Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details linked with connectors. Avoid filler words and repetition, and correct basic grammar (verb forms, articles, plurals).

Ejemplo: Yes, I often look out of the window when travelling by bus or car. I enjoy watching passing streets and parks because it helps me relax after a long day at school. For example, seeing people walking or children playing usually lifts my mood while I listen to music.

Sugerencia: Directly answer yes or no, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Use correct sentence structure and vocabulary (e.g., 'I don't often take photos' not 'I'm not very happy'). Avoid excessive hesitations and repeated words.

Ejemplo: No, I don't often take photos from a bus or taxi because I live in a busy urban area with few attractive views. However, I sometimes photograph rain on the window because the droplets create interesting patterns and moody images.

Sugerencia: Give a clear preference first, then explain with specific reasons and one brief example. Use correct vocabulary (mountains/sea, climate, northern region) and avoid unclear or incorrect words. Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because they are cooler and less crowded than coastal areas in Vietnam. For instance, I enjoy going to the northern highlands to escape the heat and relax in quiet villages surrounded by nature.

× Well, definitely yes, you know, I'm going to do like while I'm looking as the scenery is out the window and listening to my music is, you know, you can get a dip in your your vibe and feeling like alone and, you know, freedom after the long day at schools.

✓ Well, definitely yes. I usually look at the scenery out of the window and listen to music; it helps me relax and feel a sense of freedom after a long day at school.

The original sentence mixes future progressive 'I'm going to do' with present continuous and incorrect noun forms, creating tense and meaning confusion (Present tense issue). Use simple present or present continuous for habitual actions: 'I usually look' or 'I am looking.' Remove redundant words ('your your') and incorrect plural 'schools' when referring to a single 'school.' Improve clarity by splitting into shorter clauses and using 'relax' or 'feel a sense of freedom' instead of 'get a dip in your vibe.' Suggestions: use consistent present tense for habits, remove redundancies, and choose clear vocabulary.

× Well, I'm not very happy because when I'm take on the bus or like a taxi, 'cause I'm living urban so it's actually not have a lot of views.

✓ Well, I'm not very happy because when I take a bus or a taxi, since I live in the city there are not many views.

Errors include incorrect verb form 'I'm take' and incorrect noun and article usage 'living urban' and 'not have a lot of views' (Present tense issue). Use the simple present 'I take' for habitual actions. Use 'I live in the city' instead of 'I'm living urban.' Use 'there are not many views' to express existence of plural 'views.' Suggestions: use correct verb forms, correct prepositional expressions for places, and 'there are' for plural existence.

× But when it's rain outside and you know the, the, the, the drop of granny dumped in the window zone and just take it like a deep vibe.

✓ But when it rains outside and raindrops fall on the window, it creates a calming atmosphere.

Multiple issues, primarily incorrect verb form 'it's rain' and awkward phrase 'drop of granny dumped in the window zone' (Incorrect use of prepositions and idiomatic expressions). Use the present simple for weather: 'it rains.' Use 'raindrops fall on the window' and a clear noun phrase 'calming atmosphere' instead of 'deep vibe.' Suggestions: use correct weather verb forms, simple verbs like 'fall,' and standard collocations such as 'raindrops' and 'calming atmosphere.'

× Well, I'm actually preferring Martins cause in Vietnam, right, you know, it was a tropical climate.

✓ Well, I actually prefer the mountains because in Vietnam the climate is tropical.

The original uses 'I'm preferring' (present continuous) incorrectly for a general preference; and 'it was a tropical climate' uses past tense incorrectly (Present tense issue). Use simple present 'I prefer' for preferences and 'the climate is tropical' for a general fact. Suggestions: use simple present for preferences and general facts.

× So you, you haven't been to dialect the the place not located in the northern part of you know, it's kind of like cold and you know, you can get a a deck out out of urban place. It's called.

✓ So if you haven't been to the places outside the northern part, they can be quite cold, and you can get away from urban areas.

This sentence has unclear pronoun and noun use ('dialect the the place' and 'you haven't been to dialect the the place') and awkward phrase 'get a a deck out out of urban place' (Incorrect use of pronouns and general sentence structure). Replace unclear terms with 'places outside the northern part' and use 'they' or 'you' consistently. 'Get away from urban areas' is a natural expression. Suggestions: clarify referents, avoid repeated words, and use standard phrases like 'get away from' for leaving a city.