Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and accurate: start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary, and add one specific detail. Avoid hesitations and filler words. Use a linking word if you add another point.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, on a recent trip I watched the countryside with rolling fields and tall trees, which made the journey relaxing.

Sugerencia: Give a clear direct answer, correct grammar, and organise supporting details with linking words. Mention frequency and a specific example to make it concrete. Reduce repetition and self-corrections.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos from the car window, especially when I see dramatic scenery. For instance, last month I photographed mountain peaks with layers of clouds and a river running beside the road.

Sugerencia: Begin with a direct opinion, then give two clear, linked reasons with specific details. Use linking words (first, secondly) and finish the sentence properly. Avoid trailing off and include a brief concluding phrase.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains. First, the green landscape and dense trees create a peaceful ambience, and secondly the fresh, cool air helps me feel relaxed and energized during and after the trip.

× Uh, when I was raffling, I always looked at the window, uh, because there was sometime, uh, good scenery with a beautiful landscape or a lot of trees or anything.

✓ Uh, when I was travelling, I always looked out of the window because sometimes there was good scenery, such as beautiful landscapes or a lot of trees.

The main issues are incorrect word choice and several tense/number problems. 'Raffling' is not correct; the intended verb is 'travelling' (word choice). 'Looked at the window' is acceptable but 'looked out of the window' is more natural for viewing scenery. 'Sometime' should be the adverb 'sometimes' to indicate occasional occurrences. 'A beautiful landscape' and 'a lot of trees' were combined awkwardly; use plural 'landscapes' or rephrase with 'such as' for examples. These changes fix vocabulary errors and number agreement and make the sentence clearer. Suggestion: learn common collocations (look out of the window, travel/travelling) and use adverb forms ending in -s for frequency (sometimes).

× Yeah, I take a lot of pictures from the window because when I whenever I see, every time I see a beautiful scenery such as mountains with a lot of with beautiful pretty clouds or there's a river our will be taking picture.

✓ Yes, I take a lot of pictures from the window because whenever I see a beautiful scene, such as mountains with pretty clouds or a river, I will take a picture.

This sentence has redundancy and structure problems. 'When I whenever I see, every time I see' is repetitive; use one temporal connector like 'whenever'. 'Beautiful scenery' is uncountable; 'a beautiful scene' or just 'beautiful scenery' works — here 'a beautiful scene' fits. 'Mountains with a lot of with beautiful pretty clouds' contains duplication and adjective redundancy; choose one adjective: 'pretty clouds'. 'There’s a river our will be taking picture' is ungrammatical; change to 'there is a river, I will take a picture' or more naturally 'I will take a picture'. Also maintain tense consistency: simple present for habits ('I take a lot of pictures') and present/future for the reaction ('I will take a picture' or 'I take a picture'). Suggestion: avoid repeating connectors, pick correct noun forms (scene vs scenery), and keep adjective use concise.

× Yeah, I take a lot of pictures from the window because whenever I see a beautiful scene...

✓ Yes, I take a lot of pictures through the window because whenever I see a beautiful scene...

Both 'from the window' and 'through the window' can be used, but 'through the window' is more natural when describing photographing scenery while inside a vehicle. 'From the window' is not wrong but less idiomatic here. Suggestion: prefer common collocations when describing how photos are taken (take pictures through the window).

× I honestly prefer the mountains because first of all the ambience is really good because there are a lot of trees and green landscapes.

✓ I honestly prefer the mountains because, first of all, the ambience is really good; there are a lot of trees and green landscapes.

The original sentence is mostly correct but needs punctuation for clarity and parallel structure. 'Green landscapes' is fine as plural to match 'a lot of trees'. Ensure commas to set off 'first of all' and use a semicolon or conjunction to link related clauses. Suggestion: pay attention to punctuation to improve readability and maintain plurality agreement.

× Other than that, the air in the mountain feels really fresh so I feel refreshed by.

✓ Other than that, the air in the mountains feels really fresh, so I feel refreshed.

Several issues: 'in the mountain' should be plural 'in the mountains' to match general preference, 'feel refreshed by' is incomplete — 'by' needs an object. Better to say 'I feel refreshed.' Also add a comma before 'so' to join clauses. Suggestion: use plural for general locations (mountains), avoid dangling prepositions, and ensure clauses are complete.