Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammatical accuracy and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb patterns, and add one or two brief details using a linking word. For example, say you enjoy noticing specific things (buildings, fields) and explain why. Keep it within three sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I enjoy watching changing landscapes such as fields and city streets because it helps me relax and notice small details I miss when I’m walking. Also, I sometimes use those moments to plan my day.

Sugerencia: Work on clarity, cohesion and correct word choice. Give a direct topic sentence (e.g. “Not usually”) then one or two clear supporting reasons using linking words (because, so). Correct phrases like “take pictures”, “create memories”, and avoid vague fragments. Keep sentences concise and natural.

Ejemplo: Not usually, because I prefer to enjoy the view rather than take pictures. For example, if I stop to photograph everything, I feel distracted and I miss the moment, so I only take pictures when something special happens.

Sugerencia: Make the preference clear with a correct topic sentence and provide two specific reasons using linking words (because, when, and). Fix grammar (e.g., “mountains make me feel special”, “when I travel to the mountains”). Avoid vague phrases like “so many good things.”

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because they make me feel peaceful and adventurous. For instance, when I hike in the mountains I enjoy the fresh air and quiet, whereas the sea feels crowded and noisy to me.

× Yes, I like to the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I like to look out the window at the scenery when traveling by bus or car.

The verb 'look' is missing after 'like to'. This is a sentence structure/verb usage error (category 26). Use the base form 'look' after 'like to'. Suggestion: include the verb 'look' to complete the infinitive phrase 'like to look out'.

× I'm not really. I don't like to take picture, moreover, I like to enjoy the scenery.

✓ Not really. I don't like to take pictures; moreover, I like to enjoy the scenery.

Multiple issues: 'I'm not really' is unnatural and should be 'Not really' (sentence structure, category 26). 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' (singular/plural issue, category 1). Also a semicolon or conjunction improves sentence flow. Suggestion: use 'Not really.' and pluralize 'pictures'.

× Something maybe.

✓ Maybe sometimes.

Word order is incorrect (sentence structure, category 26). 'Something maybe' is not idiomatic. Use 'Maybe sometimes' or 'Sometimes' to fit English adverb placement. Suggestion: place the adverb before or after appropriately: 'Maybe sometimes' or simply 'Sometimes'.

× I think if I want to take pictures then buy a memory, at this time I cannot enjoy the scenarios.

✓ I think if I want to take pictures, I would buy more memory, but then I couldn't enjoy the scenery.

Multiple problems: missing modal/conditional structure to express hypothetical (use 'would' and 'could' — modal verb usage, category 4). 'buy a memory' is unclear; use 'buy more memory' or 'buy extra memory card' (word choice). 'scenarios' is wrong plural noun here; use 'scenery' (incorrect use of nouns/adjectives, category 13). Also punctuation and clause linking need correction (sentence structure, category 26). Suggestion: use conditional 'if... I would...' and 'couldn't' to show inability to enjoy, and use 'scenery' for landscape.

× I always prefer the mountains 'cause I think mountains makes me feel special when I travel mountain, but I don't think when I travel to the sea it makes me more special or so many good things.

✓ I always prefer the mountains because I think mountains make me feel special when I travel to them, but when I travel to the sea it doesn't make me feel as special or offer so many good things.

Several issues: 'makes' disagrees with plural subject 'mountains' (subject-verb agreement, category 27) — use 'make'. 'travel mountain' is incorrect; use 'travel to them' or 'travel to the mountains' (preposition and noun form, category 11). 'I don't think when I travel to the sea it makes me more special' has wrong word order and verb form; use 'it doesn't make me feel as special' (sentence structure and tense consistency, categories 26 and 6). 'so many good things' is informal and slightly awkward; 'offer so many good things' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects take plural verbs and include appropriate prepositions ('to the mountains', 'to the sea').