Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar (e.g. article use and sentence fragments). Aim for 2–3 sentences, linking them with words like 'because' or 'so'.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like looking out of the window when I travel because I enjoy seeing changing landscapes. For example, I often watch farmland and hills pass by, which helps me relax and notice details I would miss if I were on my phone.

Sugerencia: Avoid redundancy and tighten phrasing. Give one clear reason and one short example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and remove repeated words (e.g. 'the the', 'scenery' twice). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: No, I usually avoid taking photos through the car window because reflections and motion blur ruin the picture. Instead, I wait until I can stop and take photos on foot so I can frame shots properly and capture details.

Sugerencia: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and one brief example. Remove repeated phrases and fix grammar (e.g. 'find it at the mountain' → 'prefer the mountains'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and the wide views from the summits. For example, when I climb a nearby hill I can see forests and valleys stretching out, which feels peaceful and refreshing.

× Honestly, I keep looking at the window while traveling because I want to see the beautiful scenery outside.

✓ Honestly, I keep looking out the window while traveling because I want to see the beautiful scenery outside.

Use of the preposition is incorrect: we say 'look out the window' or 'look out of the window' when viewing scenery. 'Look at the window' implies observing the window itself instead of the view. Replace 'at' with 'out' to convey the intended meaning.

× While on the road especially.

✓ I especially do so while on the road.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb. Rewriting it as 'I especially do so while on the road' completes the thought and connects to the previous sentence. Always ensure a subject and verb are present.

× I'm not into taking photos of the environment but I prefer to look at it in my own eyes.

✓ I'm not into taking photos of the environment, but I prefer to see it with my own eyes.

'Look at it in my own eyes' is unnatural and uses pronouns awkwardly. Use 'see it with my own eyes' which is idiomatic. Also add a comma before 'but' to join independent clauses.

× I don't normally take any photos outside my car window.

✓ I don't normally take any photos from my car window.

Use of preposition 'outside' is not natural here. 'From my car window' correctly indicates the vantage point. Tense is fine but preposition choice needs correction.

× I prefer to take photos personally outside of the car so I can experience the beauty of the the environment or the scenic scenery of the specific place because I'm more comfortable doing it outside of the the car window.

✓ I prefer to take photos outside the car so I can experience the beauty of the environment or the scenery of the place, because I'm more comfortable doing it outside the car window.

Several issues: unnecessary word 'personally' can be omitted; use 'outside the car' rather than 'outside of the car' (both are acceptable but shorter is natural); duplicate 'the the' must be removed; 'scenic scenery' is redundant — use 'scenery'; long sentence needs commas to improve clarity. Also 'outside the car window' is clearer than 'outside of the the car window.'

× I'm more fascinated with the mountains but since I live in a rural community I've seen a lot of mountainous sites as well as seashore.

✓ I'm more fascinated by the mountains, but since I live in a rural community I've seen a lot of mountainous areas as well as the seashore.

Use 'fascinated by' not 'fascinated with'. 'Mountainous sites' is unnatural; 'mountainous areas' or 'mountain sites' is better. Add comma before 'but'. Include article 'the' before 'seashore' for specificity.

× But due to my own experience I find it at the mountain.

✓ Based on my experience, I prefer the mountains.

Original is awkward and ungrammatical ('find it at the mountain' is unclear). Rephrase to convey preference: 'Based on my experience, I prefer the mountains.' This provides clear subject-verb structure and correct preposition usage.

× You can experience the the beautiful scenery when you're up to the top hill and you see the the beauty of the environment as well.

✓ You can experience the beautiful scenery when you reach the top of the hill and see the beauty of the environment as well.

Remove duplicate 'the the'. Use 'reach the top of the hill' instead of 'up to the top hill'. 'See the beauty of the environment' is fine after removing the duplicate article. The corrections fix article misuse and improve natural phrasing.