Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cevap doğal ve ilgili; ancak tekrarlar, gramer hataları ve tamamlanmamış cümleler var. Daha akıcı ve kısa bir yapı kullanın: konu cümlesiyle doğrudan başlayın, ardından bir veya iki destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin ve bağlaçlarla akışı sağlayın. Örneğin, 'I'm keen on looking outside when I travel by bus or train' ile başlayıp nedenini ve bir örnekle destekleyin.

Ejemplo: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or train because I enjoy observing city life. For example, I like watching people commuting and the changing architecture, which makes the journey more interesting.

Sugerencia: Cevap açık ama bitmemiş ve tekrarlı ifadeler var. Bir konu cümlesi verin, sonra kısaca neden söyleyin ve kısa bir örnekle bitirin. Gereksiz tekrarları azaltın ve cümleleri tamamlayın.

Ejemplo: No, I usually don't take photos from a moving bus because the pictures often turn out blurry. For example, I once tried to photograph a skyline but the motion ruined the shot, so I prefer to just enjoy the view.

Sugerencia: Cevap net ve ilgili, fakat telaffuz gösterimleri ve tekrarlar yerine daha düzgün dil ve bağlantı sözcükleri kullanın. Bir konu cümlesiyle başlayıp nedenleri iki kısa destekleyici cümleyle açıklayın ve bir örnek ekleyin.

Ejemplo: I definitely prefer the sea because I enjoy swimming and relaxing on sandy beaches. For instance, spending a day at a clear, calm beach helps me unwind after a busy week.

× I'm keen on looking outside when I have at, when I have a travel by bus or train.

✓ I'm keen on looking outside when I travel by bus or train.

The phrase 'keen on' should be followed by a gerund ('looking') which is correct, but 'when I have a travel' is ungrammatical. Use the simple present 'when I travel' for habitual actions. Remove extraneous words ('at', 'have a travel'). Suggestion: Use 'when I travel by bus or train' to indicate a regular habit.

× It is very exciting for me to see the city view and also the activities and.

✓ It is very exciting for me to see the city views and the activities.

Sentence was incomplete and awkwardly phrased. 'City view' is better pluralized as 'city views' for general observation and 'activities and.' was left unfinished. Revised to a complete noun phrase 'the city views and the activities.' Suggestion: Complete the list and use plural where referring to multiple sights.

× No, I don't like taking photos when I'm in a bus because it can be blurred because of the movement of the vehicle.

✓ No, I don't like taking photos when I'm on a bus because they can be blurred by the movement of the vehicle.

Use 'on a bus' (preposition) not 'in a bus' for public transport; also 'photos' plural should match pronoun 'they' and passive agent is 'blurred by the movement' not 'because of the movement' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'on a bus' and 'they can be blurred by the movement.'

× Once I tried that but when I took the picture.

✓ Once I tried, but the picture was blurred when I took it.

Original is a sentence fragment lacking a main clause. Provide complete clause: 'the picture was blurred when I took it.' Use past tense passive 'was blurred' to describe result. Suggestion: Combine clauses into a full sentence and use appropriate past tense and passive voice.

× I can say def I definitely prefer the sea because I like swimming and have having and spending time at the crystal clear beach.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea because I like swimming and spending time at crystal-clear beaches.

Remove filler 'I can say def' and duplicated 'have having'. Use gerund 'spending'. Use plural 'beaches' or 'the crystal-clear beach' depending on context; hyphenate 'crystal-clear'. Use simple present 'prefer' for general preference. Suggestion: Say 'I definitely prefer the sea because I like swimming and spending time at crystal-clear beaches.'

× It makes me unwind.

✓ It helps me unwind.

'Makes me unwind' is understandable but 'helps me unwind' is more natural collocation in English. Use present simple for habitual effect. Suggestion: Use 'helps me unwind' for natural expression of relaxation effect.