Travelling— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer, more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler sounds (uh), and correct the incorrect phrase about vomiting (use 'get motion sick' or 'feel nauseous'). Use one or two supporting details with linking words. Try to keep within 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. I usually look out of the window when I travel by car because it helps me enjoy the scenery and relax. Also, when I feel motion sick, looking at the distant landscape helps reduce nausea. For example, on long drives I focus on mountains or trees to distract myself.

Sugerencia: Make the answer more structured and correct basic grammar (e.g., 'take a lot of photos', 'save them as memories'). Begin with a clear statement, then give two specific reasons or an example, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Reduce fillers and repetition.

Ejemplo: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I'm an amateur photographer and I enjoy documenting places I visit. I save these photos as memories, so later I can remember details of my trips. For instance, last month I photographed a valley at sunset and used the images in a travel album.

Sugerencia: Give a concise topic sentence stating preference, then add one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid repetition and fillers; use linking words (for example, because, such as). Mention specific features you like about mountains to add detail.

Ejemplo: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and varied scenery. For example, I like hiking in the northern areas of Pakistan where I can see dramatic peaks, forests and rivers, which makes the experience more rewarding than a beach visit.

× I love to look out the window at the scenery when traveling by car because I love the views, uh, while traveling.

✓ I love looking out the window at the scenery when traveling by car because I enjoy the views during the trip.

Use of 'to look' is acceptable, but 'love looking' is more natural when describing habitual preference; 'while traveling' is awkward after 'views' so change to 'during the trip' for clarity and correct participle use.

× And one of the most important thing thing that I vomit when I travel.

✓ One of the most important things is that I vomit when I travel.

Original has repetition 'thing thing', wrong word order and missing verb; 'one of the most important things' requires plural 'things' and a linking verb 'is' before the clause. Also 'that I vomit when I travel' is acceptable content-wise but grammatically must follow 'is'.

× So I try to divert my mind to look out, uh, at the window so that I can divert my mind out of the, uh, vomiting.

✓ So I try to take my mind off it by looking out of the window so that I can stop feeling like vomiting.

'Divert my mind to look out' is awkward; use 'take my mind off it' and 'by looking out of the window'. 'Divert my mind out of the vomiting' is ungrammatical; use 'stop feeling like vomiting' or 'stop vomiting'. Present participle/gerund forms must be used correctly.

× So yeah, I would love to look out the windows, uh, outside the views and the nature and the beauty I really like.

✓ So yeah, I would love to look out the window at the views, nature, and beauty; I really like them.

Mismatch of singular/plural and preposition use: 'look out the windows' should be 'look out the window' (when referring to one window of a car) or 'look out of the windows' if plural; list items need plural pronoun 'them' to refer back. Also punctuation and conjunctions adjusted for clarity.

× Yeah, I look a lot of photos of the scenery outside the car window because I am a photographer.

✓ Yeah, I take a lot of photos of the scenery outside the car window because I am a photographer.

'Look' is the wrong verb; to create photos we 'take' photos. 'Look a lot of photos' is ungrammatical. Use base verb 'take' in present simple for habitual action.

× Uh, I love to capture the photos and save it is a memories.

✓ I love to take photos and save them as memories.

Pronoun agreement: 'photos' is plural so use 'them', not 'it'. 'Save it is a memories' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'save them as memories'.

× So, uh, in the future I can see and remember the things that I have explored.

✓ So, in the future I will be able to see and remember the things I have experienced.

Mix of modal/tense: 'can' is acceptable but 'will be able to' better matches 'in the future'. 'Have explored' is okay but 'have experienced' is more natural for memories of places.

× Uh, I also, uh, I'm nature lover, so I love to capture.

✓ I'm also a nature lover, so I love to take photographs of nature.

Missing article 'a' before 'nature lover'. 'I love to capture' is incomplete—capture what? Specify 'photographs of nature'.

× I prefer the mountains because, uh, I'm a nature lover.

✓ I prefer the mountains because I'm a nature lover.

Minor: original sentence is mostly correct; removed filler commas. 'The mountains' is acceptable when speaking generally about mountain areas.

× As I mentioned earlier, uh, I love to explore different, different views and the beauty of the nature.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I love to explore different views and the beauty of nature.

Reduce redundancy by removing repeated 'different'. 'The beauty of the nature' should be 'the beauty of nature' or 'nature's beauty'—article unnecessary.

× Like, uh, I love to visit the northern areas of Pakistan where I can see different types of mountains and the beautiful view.

✓ I love to visit the northern areas of Pakistan where I can see different types of mountains and beautiful views.

'The beautiful view' should be plural 'beautiful views' to match 'different types of mountains' and general sense. Remove filler 'Like, uh,'.

× So I mostly prefer mountainous view.

✓ So I mostly prefer mountainous views.

'View' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally; use plural to match 'mostly prefer'.