Views— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one brief reason and an example. Avoid repetition ("mobile phone" twice) and long compound sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Aim for 2–3 sentences, clear vocabulary, and a smoother flow.

Ejemplo: Not really. I rarely photograph views on my phone because I'm worried about running out of storage. Instead, I usually take photos of my family and friends so I can remember special moments together.

Sugerencia: Provide one clear topic sentence and then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid awkward phrasing ("the open country said") and tense inconsistency. Use linking words such as "because" and "for example" to make reasons coherent. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer rural views because they help me escape a stressful work atmosphere. For example, being surrounded by green fields and quiet countryside makes me feel more relaxed and refreshed.

Sugerencia: Organize into a clear topic sentence plus two concise supporting details. Remove fillers ("uh", "I have I have") and complete unfinished thoughts. Use precise vocabulary ("scenery" not "sceneries") and correct grammar. Mention one concrete reason and one example of what you do to learn about those places. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I prefer scenery in other countries, especially Switzerland, because I love the Alps and clear lakes. Since childhood I've watched many videos about Swiss landscapes, and visiting Switzerland has always been on my bucket list.

× No, I don't usually take pictures of views on my mobile phone because I'm worried about running out of storage on my mobile phone.

✓ No, I don't usually take pictures of views on my mobile phone because I'm worried about running out of storage.

Redundant repetition of 'on my mobile phone' is not an article error per se but a redundancy; however article 'the' before 'storage' is unnecessary. Remove the repeated phrase to make the sentence concise and natural. Suggestion: omit repeated information and keep 'storage' without an article.

× Instead, I prefer photographing my family and friends so I can remember our time together.

✓ Instead, I prefer taking photographs of my family and friends so I can remember our time together.

'Photographing' is grammatical but sounds awkward in conversation; 'taking photographs' is more natural in spoken English. This is a sentence-style improvement rather than strict grammar; keep verb form but choose more idiomatic expression.

× I prefer views in rural areas because they give me relief from stressful and hectic work atmosphere, the open country said.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they give me relief from a stressful and hectic work atmosphere; the open country does that.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and contains an irrelevant clause 'the open country said.' Use an article 'a' before 'stressful and hectic work atmosphere' and rephrase the second part to clarify meaning. The clause 'the open country said' is incorrect; replace with 'the open country does that' to convey that rural areas provide relief.

× And green scenery helped me relax and feel more peaceful and refreshed.

✓ And green scenery helps me relax and makes me feel more peaceful and refreshed.

Tense inconsistency: earlier present preference requires present simple 'helps' and 'makes'. Also 'feel more peaceful and refreshed' needs 'makes me' for parallel structure. Use present simple to match general preference.

× I prefer sceneries in other countries, especially Switzerland.

✓ I prefer scenery in other countries, especially Switzerland.

Countable/uncountable issue: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Use 'scenery'.

× Since childhood I have I have loved images of Swiss Alps and clear lakes.

✓ Since childhood I have loved images of the Swiss Alps and clear lakes.

Repeated 'I have' is an error. Also use the definite article 'the' before 'Swiss Alps' because that mountain range takes 'the'. Keep present perfect 'have loved' to show a continuing state from the past to present.

× So uh, visiting Switzerland has been always on my bucket list.

✓ So, visiting Switzerland has always been on my bucket list.

Word order: 'always' should come before 'been' in this passive/perfect construction. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity in written form.

× I frequently watch travel videos about Swiss landscape on YouTube, but imagine what it would.

✓ I frequently watch travel videos about the Swiss landscape on YouTube, and I imagine what it would be like to visit.

Sentence is incomplete and missing final clause. Add 'be like to visit' to complete the thought. Also use 'the Swiss landscape' (definite article) and replace 'but imagine what it would' with a full complement. Use 'and' rather than 'but' for smoother connection.