School— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Améliorez la clarté et la précision de vos phrases. Évitez les erreurs comme "to lose a pink city" qui semble incorrect. Utilisez des phrases simples et correctes pour décrire l'emplacement et les caractéristiques de votre école. Par exemple, dites "My school is located in the south of France, in a city known as the Pink City because of its distinctive pink buildings."

Ejemplo: My school is located in the south of France, in a city known as the Pink City because of its distinctive pink buildings. The city is always vibrant with shades of pink and orange. It is a comfortable place with many university students, making it lively and welcoming.

Sugerencia: Travaillez sur la fluidité et la cohérence de vos phrases. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour connecter vos idées, par exemple "not only... but also...". Clarifiez les phrases comme "We usually have the projects or the simulation" en disant "We usually have projects and simulations".

Ejemplo: Yes, I really like my school, not only because it has a high ranking, but also because the programs are very practical. We usually have projects and simulations, which help us apply the knowledge in real life.

Sugerencia: Améliorez la structure de vos phrases et évitez les phrases incomplètes ou confuses. Par exemple, reformulez "if I have a chance to introduce it to. Another one I would say." en une phrase claire. Utilisez des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison pour la cohérence.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think my school is a good place to study. If I have the chance, I would recommend it to others. I would highly recommend pursuing a bachelor's or master's degree there because the education quality is very high.

Sugerencia: Clarifiez vos idées et améliorez la grammaire. Par exemple, évitez les phrases fragmentées comme "an. Create successful person." Utilisez des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison pour exprimer que les étudiants sont enthousiastes et s'entraident.

Ejemplo: I think the environment at my school is great for students from all over the world. The students are very enthusiastic and always help each other to grow and become successful individuals.

Sugerencia: Améliorez la fluidité en évitant les pauses inutiles et en utilisant des phrases complètes. Par exemple, reformulez "it keeps us to be motivated and. To be successful" en une phrase cohérente. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour connecter vos idées.

Ejemplo: I think having an interest in studying is very important because it keeps us motivated and helps us succeed in the future. Without interest, it is hard to push ourselves to study and achieve success.

× My school is located in the South of France.

✓ My school is located in the south of France.

The word 'south' should not be capitalized when used as a general direction or region, only when part of a proper noun. Here, 'south' is a general region, so it should be lowercase.

× It's to lose a pink city because it breaks.

✓ It's a lovely pink city because it is beautiful.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect word usage. 'To lose' and 'breaks' are incorrect here. The sentence should describe the city positively, using appropriate adjectives and verbs.

× It's always pink or orange.

✓ The city is always pink or orange.

The pronoun 'It' is vague here; specifying 'The city' clarifies the subject. Also, 'always pink or orange' is acceptable but specifying 'The city is always pink or orange' improves clarity.

× It's really a comfortable city with a large number of university students so it's very cute an comfortable too.

✓ It's really a comfortable city with a large number of university students, so it's very cute and comfortable too.

There is a typo 'an' instead of 'and'. Also, adding a comma before 'so' improves sentence structure.

× not only because of the high-ranking it has, but also the programs are really practical.

✓ not only because of the high ranking it has, but also because the programs are really practical.

The phrase 'the high-ranking' is incorrect; 'high ranking' without a hyphen and article is better. Also, 'but also the programs are' is awkward; adding 'because' improves parallelism.

× We usually have the projects or the simulation.

✓ We usually have projects or simulations.

The use of 'the' before 'projects' and 'simulation' is unnecessary here. Also, 'simulation' should be plural to match 'projects'.

× That we can use the knowledge in real life.

✓ We can use the knowledge in real life.

The sentence fragment 'That we can use...' is incomplete. Removing 'That' makes it a complete sentence.

× Yes, I think my school it's a good place to study if I have a chance to introduce it to.

✓ Yes, I think my school is a good place to study if I have a chance to introduce it to others.

The phrase 'my school it's' is incorrect; it should be 'my school is'. Also, 'introduce it to' needs an object, so adding 'others' completes the sentence.

× Another one I would say.

✓ If I were to recommend another one, I would say...

The phrase 'Another one I would say' is incomplete and unclear. Rephrasing clarifies the meaning.

× I would highly recommend them to pursue their. Bachelor degree or master degree there because it's high quality.

✓ I would highly recommend students to pursue their bachelor's or master's degrees there because the education is high quality.

'Them' is unclear; specifying 'students' clarifies the subject. Also, 'Bachelor degree' and 'master degree' should be possessive and pluralized as 'bachelor's' and 'master's degrees'. The sentence is also completed for clarity.

× I think it's a great environment. To all the students all over the world because it's it has really enthusiastic student and they always help each other to develop together an.

✓ I think it's a great environment for all the students all over the world because it has really enthusiastic students, and they always help each other to develop together.

'To all the students' should be 'for all the students'. 'It has really enthusiastic student' should be plural 'students'. The sentence is also completed properly.

× Create successful person.

✓ They create successful people.

The phrase is incomplete and lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'They' and pluralizing 'person' to 'people' corrects the sentence.

× I think interest in study, it's really important because it keeps us to be motivated and.

✓ I think interest in studying is really important because it keeps us motivated and...

The phrase 'interest in study' should be 'interest in studying'. Also, 'keeps us to be motivated' is incorrect; it should be 'keeps us motivated'.

× To be successful in the future, if we have no interest, it's really hard for us to push ourselves and study to be successful.

✓ To be successful in the future, if we have no interest, it's really hard for us to push ourselves to study and succeed.

The sentence is awkwardly structured. Adding 'to' before 'study' and replacing 'to be successful' with 'and succeed' improves clarity and flow.