School— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of saying "it's really convenient for everyone to go to school because it's connected to the Skytrain and it's very easily accessed," you can say "it's conveniently located in central Bangkok with easy access via the Skytrain." This makes your answer more natural and concise.

Ejemplo: My school is conveniently located in central Bangkok with easy access via the Skytrain, making it easy for students to commute.

Sugerencia: Focus on grammar and clarity. For example, "it has a strong curriculum and many extracurricular activities" is better than "strong curricula and ha have many extra curricular activities." Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by linking ideas properly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like my school because it has a strong curriculum and offers many extracurricular activities, which help me balance schoolwork and hobbies.

Sugerencia: Improve sentence structure and clarity. For example, say "over 10,000 students nationwide want to enter this school, and it ranks among the top schools in Bangkok." Also, avoid awkward phrases like "on a very top school length."

Ejemplo: Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because it attracts over 10,000 students nationwide and ranks among the top schools in Bangkok.

Sugerencia: Clarify unclear parts and improve grammar. For example, "I think it's COM" is unclear and should be removed or explained. Also, use linking words to connect ideas, such as "Moreover, it has more than 210 buildings and a large football field in the center, where many clubs are available."

Ejemplo: My school is very large compared to others. Moreover, it has more than 210 buildings and a big football field in the center, where many clubs are available for students to join.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and sentence flow. For example, say "interest is very important for motivation. When students are interested in their studies, they tend to get better grades, participate actively, and perform well in class." Avoid filler words like "umm."

Ejemplo: I think interest is very important for motivation. When students are interested in their studies, they tend to get better grades, participate actively, and perform well in class.

× I find it's really convenient for everyone to go to school because it's connected to the Skytrain and it's very easily accessed.

✓ I find it's really convenient for everyone to go to school because it's connected to the Skytrain and is very easy to access.

The phrase 'very easily accessed' incorrectly uses the adverb 'easily' to modify 'accessed'. The correct form is the adjective 'easy' to describe the state of access. So, 'very easy to access' is the proper expression.

× Yes, I like my school, it has a strong curricula and ha have many extra curricular activities between the years I've.

✓ Yes, I like my school; it has a strong curriculum and has many extracurricular activities throughout the years I've been here.

The word 'curricula' is plural, but the sentence refers to a singular concept, so 'curriculum' is correct. Also, 'ha have' is a typo and should be 'has'. 'Extra curricular' should be one word 'extracurricular'. The phrase 'between the years I've' is incomplete and unclear; 'throughout the years I've been here' is clearer.

× I found it really enjoyable to balance between schoolwork and the extra activity they provide.

✓ I find it really enjoyable to balance schoolwork and the extracurricular activities they provide.

The sentence mixes past tense 'found' with present context. Since the student is currently attending, present tense 'find' is appropriate. Also, 'balance between' is better as 'balance' without 'between'. 'Extra activity' should be plural 'extracurricular activities'.

× Yes, I think so because I have seen over 10,000 students around country want to enter to this school and in Thai ranking this is on a very top school length in Bangkok.

✓ Yes, I think so because I have seen that over 10,000 students around the country want to enter this school, and in Thai rankings, this is one of the top schools in Bangkok.

The sentence has several structural issues: 'around country' should be 'around the country'; 'want to enter to this school' should be 'want to enter this school'; 'in Thai ranking this is on a very top school length' is unclear and corrected to 'in Thai rankings, this is one of the top schools'; 'length' is incorrect here.

× It is a very, very big school compared to many schools. I think it's COM. It has more than 210 buildings and a big football field in the middle where they also have many club we can join.

✓ It is a very, very big school compared to many others. I think it's comfortable. It has more than 210 buildings and a big football field in the middle where there are also many clubs we can join.

'I think it's COM' is unclear; likely 'comfortable' was intended. 'Many club' should be 'many clubs'. Also, 'where they also have' is better as 'where there are also' to correctly refer to the clubs' existence.

× I think it's very important in terms of umm motivation. When students really interest in school, they tend to have better grades and perform in class really well and also engaging.

✓ I think it's very important in terms of motivation. When students are really interested in school, they tend to have better grades, perform well in class, and also be more engaged.

'Students really interest in school' is incorrect; it should be 'students are really interested in school' using the correct verb and form. 'Perform in class really well and also engaging' is ungrammatical; it should be 'perform well in class and also be more engaged' to maintain parallel structure and correct verb forms.