School— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to give a clear and concise answer directly addressing the question. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and redundant phrases. Also, organize your answer logically and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, mention the location first, then talk about the commute and cost as supporting details.

Ejemplo: My school is located in the center of Tokyo. However, I commute from Yokohama, which takes about an hour and a half. Additionally, the transportation cost is quite high, making the commute both time-consuming and expensive.

Sugerencia: Focus on speaking clearly and avoid repetition or hesitation. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly to connect your ideas. Also, try to be more specific and concise when explaining how your school inspires you.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like my school because it has many international students, which broadens my perspective. For example, I learned about Islamic culture from a Muslim classmate, which was very enlightening and important to me.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use precise vocabulary and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words like 'for example' to introduce examples smoothly.

Ejemplo: I think my school is a good place to study because it has many useful facilities. For example, the large library offers a wide range of books, which helps students concentrate and learn effectively.

Sugerencia: Try to reduce filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about the environment. For example, mention quiet study areas and spaces for international students separately.

Ejemplo: The environment at my school is generally quiet, which helps students focus. Additionally, there are special facilities for international students that encourage communication among people from different countries.

Sugerencia: Clarify your ideas and avoid unclear phrases like 'have posture' and 'the measure for them.' Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and provide specific examples if possible.

Ejemplo: I believe interest in studying is very important because without it, students lack motivation and passion. For instance, when I am interested in a subject, I am more eager to learn and explore it deeply.

× Uh, my school is in Tokyo, uh, which is really center of the Tokyo.

✓ Uh, my school is in Tokyo, uh, which is really the center of Tokyo.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'center' to specify the particular center being referred to. Also, 'the Tokyo' is incorrect; 'Tokyo' as a proper noun does not need 'the.'

× So, uh, it's really, uh, time consuming for me from it to, uh, to commute from Yokohama, which which takes about one hour and a half if I can, uh, at its cost rate as well, because the price is really high expensive.

✓ So, uh, it takes me about one and a half hours to commute from Yokohama, which is quite time-consuming and expensive because the cost is really high.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness, combining ideas logically and removing redundant words.

× So which is, which inspired me a lot and brought my broaden my ex, uh, perspective as well.

✓ This inspired me a lot and broadened my perspective as well.

The phrase 'brought my broaden my ex' is incorrect and confusing. The correct verb is 'broadened' to indicate expanding perspective, and 'brought' is unnecessary here. Also, 'which is' is redundant and removed for clarity.

× For example, when I met the Muslim, Muslim students, I learned from, I learned him, I learned Islamic culture from him, which is really important for me.

✓ For example, when I met Muslim students, I learned about Islamic culture from them, which is really important to me.

The phrase 'I learned him' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I learned about Islamic culture from them.' Also, 'the Muslim, Muslim students' is redundant; 'Muslim students' suffices. Pronouns are corrected for number agreement.

× I think my school is good to study, good place to study because there are many facilities to focus on.

✓ I think my school is a good place to study because there are many facilities to help focus.

The phrase 'good to study' is awkward; 'a good place to study' is the correct expression. Also, 'facilities to focus on' is unclear; 'facilities to help focus' is clearer.

× For example, uh, the bigs library is really, uh, best price to concentrate on study, uh, because they, they prefer a lot of, a lot of right wide right wide range of books, which which contains a lot of.

✓ For example, the big library is really the best place to concentrate on studying because it has a wide range of books.

'Bigs library' is incorrect; it should be 'big library.' 'Best price' is incorrect; it should be 'best place.' 'Prefer a lot of, a lot of right wide right wide range' is confusing; corrected to 'has a wide range.' The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Uh, in my school, uh, there is a lot of quiet environment to focus, to get focus easily.

✓ Uh, in my school, there is a quiet environment to help focus easily.

'A lot of quiet environment' is incorrect because 'environment' is uncountable; 'a lot of' is unnecessary. The sentence is simplified for clarity.

× For example, there is uh, uh, international students facilities, which is really a good place to focus on the communication with diverse country, uh, the international students.

✓ For example, there are international student facilities, which are really good places to focus on communication with students from diverse countries.

'International students facilities' should be 'international student facilities.' 'Is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'facilities.' 'Diverse country' should be 'diverse countries.' The sentence is corrected for subject-verb agreement and pluralization.

× I think the interest in the study is really important for uh students because without interest, we cannot, uh, have posture.

✓ I think interest in study is really important for students because without interest, we cannot have motivation.

'The interest in the study' is awkward; 'interest in study' is more natural. 'Have posture' is incorrect; likely intended 'have motivation' or 'have passion.' The definite article 'the' is unnecessary here.

× We don't have passion to study and explore the knowledge more.

✓ We don't have the passion to study and explore knowledge more.

Adding 'the' before 'passion' is correct to specify the particular passion. 'The knowledge' is better as 'knowledge' without article because it is uncountable in this context.

× So I think it's really important to have the interest and, uh, the measure for them.

✓ So I think it's really important to have interest and motivation for them.

'The interest' and 'the measure' are incorrect here; 'interest' and 'motivation' without 'the' are more appropriate. 'Measure' is likely a misused word; 'motivation' fits the context better.