Bike— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be careful with sentence structure and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid repeating the object (remove the extra 'it'), and add one or two brief, specific details using linking words. Also vary vocabulary: 'magnificent' is fine but consider more natural adjectives like 'lovely' or 'sturdy' when appropriate.

Ejemplo: Yes, I had a lovely bike that my grandfather bought for me when I was eight. It was a red, sturdy bike with a basket, and I used it every day to visit friends and go to the park.

Sugerencia: Fix grammar and phrasing for clarity and naturalness. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a clear reason introduced by a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'mainly because'), and add a specific example or consequence. Avoid contractions or awkward clauses like 'the city planning it's'.

Ejemplo: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country, mainly because city planning doesn't support cycling. For example, there are few bike lanes and heavy traffic, so many people prefer cars or public transport.

× Yes, I had a magnificent bike that my grandpa bought it.

✓ Yes, I had a magnificent bike that my grandpa bought.

The sentence contains a relative clause 'that my grandpa bought'. Including the pronoun 'it' after this clause creates a redundant object (double object). Remove the extra pronoun 'it' so the clause correctly modifies 'bike'. Suggestion: use either 'that my grandpa bought' or 'which my grandpa bought', but do not add 'it' afterward.

× Actually I don't think so, because the city planning it's not suitable for the use of bikes.

✓ Actually, I don't think so, because the city's planning is not suitable for the use of bikes.

There are two issues: (1) 'city planning it's not suitable' incorrectly uses the pronoun 'it' after a noun phrase and contracts subject and verb awkwardly. Replace with 'the city's planning is not suitable' or 'city planning is not suitable'. (2) Article use: adding 'the' or the possessive 'city's' clarifies which planning is meant. Also add a comma after 'Actually'. Suggestions: write 'Actually, I don't think so, because city planning is not suitable for bikes.' or '...because the city's planning is not suitable for the use of bikes.'