Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific example with linking words like 'for instance' or 'such as'.

Ejemplo: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share because they believe sharing is caring. For instance, during my birthday, I usually distribute toffees and chips to my friends to celebrate together.

Sugerencia: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organise your ideas better and use linking words to connect them. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'But they like according to that'. Be specific and clear about what you share and why.

Ejemplo: I usually share various things with my friends, such as books, mobile phones, and sometimes money. Additionally, I often share snacks and food with them, depending on the situation.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I prefer not to share money because it might cause misunderstandings or problems in friendships. Therefore, in my opinion, sharing money is not necessary.

Sugerencia: Your answer needs better organisation and clearer expression. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like 'sometimes they share bite'. Be specific and concise.

Ejemplo: Yes, I believe more people will share cars in the future because it is already becoming common. Many of our friends share their cars to travel conveniently, and this practice might become a cultural norm.

× Yes, my parents have always taught me about sharing is caring and they usually tell me to share my snacks with my friends.

✓ Yes, my parents have always taught me that sharing is caring and they usually tell me to share my snacks with my friends.

The phrase 'about sharing is caring' is incorrect because 'about' should be followed by a noun or gerund phrase. Here, 'sharing is caring' is a clause, so it should be introduced by 'that' instead of 'about'.

× For example, when I'm having my birthday, actually distribute Toffees and chips to my friends.

✓ For example, when I'm having my birthday, I actually distribute toffees and chips to my friends.

The original sentence lacks a subject for the verb 'distribute'. Adding 'I' clarifies who is performing the action, making the sentence grammatically correct.

× I usually share many kind of things like books and mobile phones and sometimes money with my friends and on the other hand I usually share some snacks and foods.

✓ I usually share many kinds of things like books and mobile phones and sometimes money with my friends, and on the other hand, I usually share some snacks and food.

The phrase 'many kind of things' is incorrect; it should be 'many kinds of things' because 'kinds' is plural to match 'many'. Also, 'foods' is generally uncountable in this context, so 'food' is preferred.

× But they like according to that.

✓ But they like that accordingly.

The phrase 'they like according to that' is unclear and incorrect. Changing it to 'they like that accordingly' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I think sharing enough money would create some kind of. Distraction or some kind of? Behavior problem with your friends.

✓ Yes, I think sharing too much money would create some kind of distraction or behavior problem with your friends.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the fragments and correcting 'enough money' to 'too much money' clarifies the meaning and improves grammar.

× So my opinion sharing money. Is not necessary.

✓ So, in my opinion, sharing money is not necessary.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. Adding 'in my opinion' and connecting the sentence properly makes it grammatically correct.

× Yes, I think more people will share cars in future becauses it is already been.

✓ Yes, I think more people will share cars in the future because it has already been.

The phrase 'in future' should be 'in the future' for correct usage. Also, 'becauses it is already been' is incorrect; it should be 'because it has already been'.

× And seeing that many of our friends share their cars and go. Anywhere they want and sometimes they share bite, so I think it will be a culture.

✓ And seeing that many of our friends share their cars and go anywhere they want, and sometimes they share rides, so I think it will become a culture.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'share bite'. Correcting 'share bite' to 'share rides' and connecting the sentence properly improves clarity and grammar.