Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (e.g., "emphasized"), avoid repetitions, and keep sentences varied. Use linking words like "for example" to connect details.

Ejemplo: Yes, they did — my parents always emphasized sharing. For example, when I had chocolate, my mother would tell me to give some to my younger sister, saying "sharing is caring," so I learned to be generous from an early age.

Sugerencia: Be specific and correct word choice. Remove hesitations and correct phrases (e.g., "I like to share food" not "pension food"). Use one topic sentence and a linked example. Keep it under five sentences.

Ejemplo: I usually like to share food with friends and colleagues. For instance, if I buy snacks or street food and a friend is nearby, I often offer them some because it helps build friendships.

Sugerencia: Make your list clear and accurate. Use correct negatives and avoid contradicting yourself (you said you don't like to share, then said you would). Use linking words ("for example", "also") and be specific about reasons (privacy, hygiene, value).

Ejemplo: I usually avoid sharing personal items for privacy and hygiene reasons. For example, I would not share my mobile phone or laptop because they contain private information, and I also avoid lending sentimental gifts or underwear.

Sugerencia: Be concise and finish your sentences. Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific details about the situation (title, author, why you lent it). Avoid repetitions and hesitations.

Ejemplo: Yes — I recently lent a favorite novel to a colleague. I bought a book called Homodius by Eval Harry and recommended it to her; when she asked to borrow it, I agreed because I thought she would enjoy it.

Sugerencia: Speak directly and avoid filler words. Start with a clear statement and give one reason. Use natural phrases ("my parents are my first choice" and "they are very important to me").

Ejemplo: I would tell my parents first because they are the most important people in my life. For example, whenever something big happens — good or bad — they are the first I call for support and advice.

Sugerencia: Organize your answer into a clear topic sentence and examples. Correct vocabulary ("photo fan" -> "football fan") and grammar, remove repetition, and use linking words like "for example" and "also". Be specific about topics you discuss.

Ejemplo: I share different kinds of news with my friends, especially politics and sports. For example, as a big football fan, I often discuss news about Manchester City with friends, and we also talk about important political events in our country.

× Yes, my parents much emphasized on sharing.

✓ Yes, my parents emphasized sharing a lot.

'much' is not used before a finite verb in affirmative sentences; use 'emphasized a lot' or 'placed much emphasis on'. Also remove the preposition 'on' after 'emphasized' when followed directly by a noun phrase like 'sharing'.

× My mom used to tell me sharing is caring.

✓ My mom used to tell me that sharing is caring.

This sentence needs the conjunction 'that' to introduce the reported clause, making the sentence grammatically complete and clearer.

× I had a little sibling and so if I buy chocolate, sometimes I want to eat the whole chocolate.

✓ I had a younger sibling, so if I bought chocolate, sometimes I wanted to eat the whole bar.

'Little sibling' is better expressed as 'younger sibling'. Past context requires past tense 'bought' and 'wanted'. 'Chocolate' as an uncountable noun needs a countable unit here ('bar').

× And my mom always said no, you have to share it with your sister.

✓ And my mom always said, 'No, you have to share it with your sister.'

The sentence is acceptable but needs punctuation for the reported speech. No grammatical change to verb forms; adding commas and quotes (or reported clause punctuation) clarifies meaning.

× Uh, actually I'd like to share some stuff with my friends and the people I know.

✓ Actually, I'd like to share some things with my friends and people I know.

'Stuff' is informal and uncountable; 'things' is more appropriate here. 'The people I know' is wordy; 'people I know' is natural.

× Well, uh, first of all, I want to pension food.

✓ Well, first of all, I want to share food.

'Pension food' is incorrect word choice. The intended verb is 'share'. Use 'share food' to express offering food to others.

× If I buy food and if there is any anybody close nearby, my friends or a person who is known to me, I usually offer food.

✓ If I buy food and there is anybody nearby—friends or someone I know—I usually offer it.

Remove redundant 'if' and fix word order: 'anybody close nearby' is awkward; use 'anybody nearby' or 'someone I know'. Use the pronoun 'it' to refer back to 'food'. Present simple fits habitual action.

× I think there are certain stuff which I don't like to share with anybody.

✓ I think there are certain things that I don't like to share with anyone.

'Stuff' should be 'things' for countable items. Use 'anyone' instead of 'anybody' is optional but 'anyone' fits formal style. Use 'that' instead of 'which' for restrictive clauses.

× Uh, first of all, I don't like to share my mobile with anybody because this is confidential.

✓ First of all, I don't like to share my mobile with anyone because it is confidential.

Use 'it' to refer to 'mobile' and 'anyone' is more natural in this context. Remove filler 'uh'.

× Moreover, I would like to share my clothes, uh, my bag and my laptop and some maybe from favorite gift.

✓ Moreover, I would not like to share my clothes, my bag, my laptop, or possibly my favorite gifts.

Original mixed affirmative 'would like to share' conflicts with context; speaker means items they wouldn't share. 'Some maybe from favorite gift' is ungrammatical; 'possibly my favorite gifts' conveys intended meaning. Use commas and 'or' for list clarity.

× Yes, uh, recently I shared one of my favorite book with a colleague.

✓ Yes, recently I shared one of my favorite books with a colleague.

Use plural 'books' after 'one of my favorite'. Remove filler 'uh'.

× Uh, recently I bought a book, uh, named Homodius, uh, written by Eval Harry.

✓ Recently I bought a book called Homodius, written by Eval Harry.

Use 'called' to introduce a title and remove extra fillers. 'A book named' is acceptable but 'called' is more natural here.

× Uh, I really like the book and I told my colleague about the book. She asked me whether I would allow her to loan it and I.

✓ I really liked the book and told my colleague about it. She asked if she could borrow it, and I agreed.

Maintain past tense 'liked' and 'told' to match 'recently'. 'Allow her to loan it' is awkward; use 'borrow it'. The original sentence was incomplete; finish with 'I agreed'.

× Uh, my parents, umm, actually, uh, actually, umm, very favorite of my parents, uh, like, uh, apple of eye.

✓ My parents are my favorites; they are the apples of my eye.

Clarify and correct idiom: 'apple of my eye' refers to someone beloved; 'very favorite of my parents' is unclear. Use concise phrasing and correct idiom form.

× So if anything good, bad anything happen, I first person I like to share with my parents.

✓ So if anything good or bad happens, the first people I like to share it with are my parents.

Use 'happens' (present simple for general occurrences), reorder sentence for clarity and correct noun plural 'people'. Include 'it' to refer to 'news'.

× Actually, I share a lot of things with my friends and if you want to, particularly about news, I think current politics in my country, sometimes we share, I share news about sports.

✓ I share a lot of things with my friends; particularly, we discuss current politics in my country, and sometimes we share news about sports.

Remove 'if you want to' which is irrelevant. Improve sentence flow by splitting clauses and using 'discuss' for 'talk about'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× I mean, I'm a big photo fan.

✓ I mean, I'm a big football fan.

'Photo fan' seems to be a mispronunciation; context about Manchester City indicates 'football fan' is intended.

× I'm I'm supposed to Manchester in anything happened with Manchester City, I usually speak with my friends and tell them, yeah.

✓ Whenever anything happens with Manchester City, I usually talk with my friends and tell them about it.

Original contains many errors: 'supposed to Manchester' is meaningless. Use 'whenever anything happens with Manchester City' for time clause, and 'talk with' and 'tell them about it' for reporting.