Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be careful with grammar and sentence clarity. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct word order and missing words (e.g., “As an only child who grew up...”). Keep it natural and concise.

Ejemplo: I didn’t receive formal lessons about sharing because I grew up as an only child in a single-parent family. However, my mother often encouraged me to share toys and snacks with visiting friends, which helped me learn through practice.

Sugerencia: Use smoother linking words and correct small grammar errors (e.g., “help build friendships” not “get help build”). Start with a concise topic sentence, then give specific reasons and one short example. Avoid redundancy.

Ejemplo: I like sharing books, toys, and my handheld games console with friends because sharing makes activities more fun and helps build friendships. For example, when I lend a game console, I always ask for it back afterwards to avoid losing it.

Sugerencia: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific reasons using linking words. Correct phrasing and use plural/singular consistently (e.g., “things such as fruit or jeans”). Provide more precise vocabulary (e.g., “unsanitary” or “sentimental items”).

Ejemplo: Items that are not suitable for sharing include personal or unhygienic things, such as underwear or freshly eaten fruit. Also, sentimental items like a gift from my grandmother should not be shared because they have special value.

Sugerencia: This answer is good but check accuracy (author is Bulgakov) and minor grammar (e.g., “raises interesting questions”). Keep sentences concise and use linking words like “so” or “because” correctly. Mention one specific theme or character to add detail.

Ejemplo: Yes. I recently shared The Master and Margarita by Mikhail Bulgakov with my friend Miguel so we could discuss its themes together. For example, we talked about the novel’s exploration of good versus evil and how the characters question reality.

Sugerencia: Strong answer: clear topic sentence and a specific supporting example. Minor improvement: streamline the parenthetical explanation and use smoother phrasing. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I would share good news with my wife first because she always supports me. For instance, when I received an interview for the PGDE, I messaged her immediately to share my excitement.

Sugerencia: Fix small errors and improve fluency: start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words (“However,” “On the other hand,” or “With acquaintances”). Be concise and avoid repetition. Provide one specific example of each type of news.

Ejemplo: It depends on how close we are. With close friends I share both good and bad news because I trust their support; with acquaintances I usually share light-hearted updates, such as a funny incident at work or a recent promotion.

× As an only child grew up in a single parent family, I didn't recall there were any formal lessons about sharing.

✓ As an only child who grew up in a single-parent family, I don't recall any formal lessons about sharing.

Original sentence is missing a relative pronoun and has tense inconsistency. 'As an only child grew up...' needs 'who' to modify 'only child'. 'Single parent' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective: 'single-parent family'. The question asks about childhood, so 'don't recall' or 'didn't recall' can both work, but 'don't recall' is more natural when speaking about a general lack of memory. Suggestion: add 'who', hyphenate compound adjective, and use present 'don't recall' for general memory.

× I'd like to share my toys, my books, and my handheld games console with friends because it's nice to enjoy things together and get help build friendships.

✓ I'd like to share my toys, my books, and my handheld games console with friends because it's nice to enjoy things together and get help building friendships.

After the verb 'get' when meaning 'obtain' + verb, the following verb should be in the -ing form: 'get help building'. Using base form 'build' is incorrect. Use 'building friendships'.

× However, I usually ask people to return them after they've used and finished so I don't lose anything important.

✓ However, I usually ask people to return them after they've used them and finished, so I don't lose anything important.

The sentence omits the second object pronoun after 'used' — it should be 'used them'. Also a comma is needed before 'so' to separate clauses. The phrase 'used and finished' is awkward; 'used them and finished' clarifies the actions. Present perfect 'they've used' is appropriate for recent past actions.

× I think like fruit or jeans because it could be unhygienic also like something which is of special value, like a gift from my grandma for example.

✓ I think things like fruit or underwear shouldn't be shared because it can be unhygienic; also items of special value, for example a gift from my grandma, shouldn't be shared.

Original mixes 'jeans' which are generally shareable but 'underwear' is a clearer example; however keep user's intent—replacing with 'underwear' clarifies hygiene. 'It could be unhygienic' needs consistent reference to 'sharing such items', so use 'it can be unhygienic'. 'Also like something which is of special value' is ungrammatical: use 'items of special value' or 'something of special value'. Reorder sentence for clarity and use semicolon to connect related ideas.

× Yes, I've been reading a great novel called The Master and Margarita by the Russian author Boldkov and I shared it with my best friend Miguel so that we can discuss its themes and characters together.

✓ Yes, I've been reading a great novel called The Master and Margarita by the Russian author Bulgakov, and I shared it with my best friend Miguel so that we could discuss its themes and characters together.

Author's name was misspelled: 'Bulgakov'. Tense sequence: 'I've been reading' (present perfect continuous) and 'I shared' (simple past) is acceptable if sharing already happened, but 'so that we can discuss' should match perspective: use past 'could discuss' if the sharing already occurred. Ensure consistency of past reference.

× I wanted his opinion because the book raises interesting question about life.

✓ I wanted his opinion because the book raises interesting questions about life.

Count noun 'question' should be plural 'questions' when referring to more than one, and 'raises interesting questions about life' is the correct collocation. Keep tense: 'wanted' (past) is fine while 'raises' (present) is also acceptable because the book generally raises questions.

× The first person I would share good news with is my wife.

✓ The first person I would share good news with would be my wife.

Using conditional 'would' twice makes the sentence clearer in hypothetical contexts. Original is okay conversationally, but matching conditional structure ('would share' and 'would be') is more consistent. This addresses pronoun/reference clarity and modality.

× For example, as soon as I got an interview for the PGDE, the Postgraduate Diploma in Education, I messaged her right away because she always supports me and shares my excitement.

✓ For example, as soon as I got an interview for the PGDE, the Postgraduate Diploma in Education, I messaged her right away because she always supports me and shares my excitement.

Sentence is grammatically correct; tense sequence is consistent: 'got' (past), 'messaged' (past), and present 'she always supports' and 'shares' are appropriate for habitual behavior. No change needed.

× It it depends. If they are my close friends, I share both good and bad news with them because I trust they will support me.

✓ It depends. If they are my close friends, I share both good and bad news with them because I trust they will support me.

Original had a duplicated 'It it'. Removing the extra word fixes the sentence. The rest of the sentence is grammatically correct.

× With acquaintances I usually only share light hearted or positive updates like something funny that happened or good news about work.

✓ With acquaintances I usually only share light-hearted or positive updates, like something funny that happened or good news about work.

Compound adjective 'light-hearted' should be hyphenated. Add a comma before the example clause 'like ...' for clarity. Spelling 'light hearted' is incorrect without hyphen in this context.