Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and clarity: use past tense correctly, avoid repetition and filler sounds, and give a concise supporting detail. Use linking words if adding a reason. Keep to 1–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. My parents often taught me to share food with people in need because they believed it was an important way to show kindness. For example, we regularly donated food to a local shelter when I was a child.

Sugerencia: Good content and clear idea. Improve natural phrasing and add a linking phrase to explain why you share in that way. Keep it concise and avoid repeating words.

Ejemplo: I often share happy moments on social media like WeChat and QQ, usually through photos or short videos, because visual posts convey the atmosphere better and are easy for friends to enjoy.

Sugerencia: Clarify the idea and fix grammar: use a clear topic sentence, give a reason with a linking word, and be specific about what you mean by “pain” and why. Avoid vague phrases and check subject-verb agreement.

Ejemplo: I don’t think it’s always appropriate to share very personal pain or problems because, often, people may not fully understand your situation and that can make you feel worse rather than supported.

Sugerencia: Correct factual and grammatical errors, use a clear topic sentence, and explain briefly how you shared the news. Be specific about what you did and use linking words for clarity.

Ejemplo: Yes. Last week I won a small lottery, so I celebrated by inviting my close friends Erica and Lily to dinner to share my happiness and thank them for their support.

Sugerencia: Fix phrasing and grammar: use natural expressions like “raised me” -> “raised me” is fine but use “stood by my side”. Add a brief reason and an example to support your statement.

Ejemplo: I would share good news with my parents first because they raised me and have always stood by my side; for example, when I graduated they were the first people I called to tell them.

Sugerencia: Make sentences grammatically complete and more natural: state the topic clearly, give a reason with linking words, and avoid fragment sentences. Be specific about examples of good news you share.

Ejemplo: I prefer to share good news with friends because it feels uplifting and strengthens our bond; for instance, I tell friends about job promotions or travel plans, but I usually keep very personal sad news private.

× Yes, my parents are usually taught me how to share food to poor people.

✓ Yes, my parents usually taught me how to share food with poor people.

The original mixes present tense 'are taught' with 'usually' which indicates habitual past; use simple past 'taught'. 'Are taught me' is ungrammatical because 'teach' is transitive: subject teaches someone. Also use 'with' not 'to' when indicating sharing people/objects ('share food with poor people'). Suggestion: Use simple past for habitual actions in childhood (my parents usually taught me) and use 'share ... with'.

× It was a a great way to show a kindness and generous.

✓ It was a great way to show kindness and generosity.

Double 'a a' is a typo; 'kindness' and 'generosity' are uncountable nouns here, so do not need 'a'. 'Generous' is an adjective but 'generosity' (noun) pairs with 'kindness' in this context. Suggestion: Use nouns in parallel form: 'kindness and generosity'.

× MMM.

✓ (Remove filler 'MMM' or replace with 'Hmm' if filler is needed.)

'MMM' is a nonstandard filler; in formal responses remove it or use 'Hmm' to indicate thinking. This is not a grammatical sentence and adds no content.

× I often share my happy moment on social media platforms such as WeChat and QQ.

✓ I often share my happy moments on social media platforms such as WeChat and QQ.

'Moment' should be plural 'moments' because 'often' indicates repeated events. Use plural to match frequency. No article is needed before 'happy moments'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns with adverbs of frequency: 'often share my happy moments'.

× I usually share them by pictures or videos.

✓ I usually share them with pictures or videos.

Use 'with' rather than 'by' when indicating the medium used to share. 'By pictures' is less natural; 'with pictures or videos' is idiomatic. Also fine to say 'as pictures or videos'.

× I think it is not a good idea to share your pain with others.

✓ I think it is not a good idea to share your pains with others.

'Pain' can be uncountable, but when referring to specific difficulties or emotional pains, plural 'pains' or 'your pain' depending on meaning. If meaning the general feeling, original can be acceptable; however to match 'others' better use 'your pain' (singular) is actually acceptable. Better correction: '...to share your pain with others.' Suggestion: Prefer 'your pain' for general feeling or 'your problems' for multiple issues.

× And because I most people will not understand your position.

✓ Because most people will not understand your position.

The clause starts with 'And because' which is informal; remove 'And'. 'I most people' is ungrammatical—either 'I think most people' or just 'most people'. Also 'position' is slightly formal; 'situation' or 'feelings' may be clearer. Suggestion: Say 'Because most people will not understand your situation.'

× Last week I got a lottery so I one to assure this happiness I have with my close friends such as Erica and Lily.

✓ Last week I won the lottery, so I wanted to share this happiness with my close friends, such as Erica and Lily.

Use past tense 'won' for lottery. 'Got a lottery' is incorrect collocation. 'I one to assure' is garbled; likely 'I wanted to share'. Use 'wanted to share this happiness with' to express intention. Include commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct verb 'win' and 'share' and past 'wanted'.

× I would like to share my good news with my parents first because they raised me up and always said by my side.

✓ I would like to share my good news with my parents first because they raised me and are always by my side.

Do not use 'raised me up'—'raise' does not need 'up'. 'Always said by my side' is incorrect; should be 'are always by my side' (present state). 'Are' indicates ongoing support. Suggestion: Use 'raised me' and 'are always by my side'.

× I prefer share good news with my friends because.

✓ I prefer to share good news with my friends because they are happy and it feels meaningful.

'Prefer' is followed by infinitive 'to share' or gerund 'sharing'. The original ends abruptly with 'because.' Provide a complete clause explaining why. Suggestion: Use 'prefer to share' and complete the reason.

× They are happy and meaningful. By contrast, I don't want to share a sad news.

✓ They are happy and meaningful. By contrast, I don't want to share sad news.

'A sad news' is incorrect because 'news' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Use 'sad news' without an article. 'They are happy and meaningful' is slightly odd — better: 'Sharing good news makes them feel happy and it feels meaningful.' Suggestion: Remove article before 'news' and rephrase for clarity.