Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời tự nhiên và có nội dung, nhưng cần rút gọn để tránh dài dòng và lặp từ. Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó đưa 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: hành động mẹ làm, kết quả). Tránh dùng các cụm từ như "you know" và các số liệu không cần thiết như "100%" và giảm việc lặp động từ.

Ejemplo: Yes — my parents taught me to share. For example, my mother encouraged me to give toys to friends and to take turns during playtime, which helped me become more considerate and cooperative.

Sugerencia: Ý chính rõ ràng nhưng câu còn lủng củng và kết thúc không đầy đủ. Hạn chế tiếng cảm thán như "you know"; sử dụng cấu trúc mạch lạc với liên từ để giải thích lý do (because / so). Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về loại đồ ăn bạn hay chia để tăng tính cụ thể.

Ejemplo: I prefer sharing food because it shows I care about someone’s wellbeing. For instance, I often bring homemade snacks to share with classmates so they can stay energized during long study sessions.

Sugerencia: Cần diễn đạt tự tin và đầy đủ; tránh tiếng ấp úng và câu bỏ dở. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Secrets shouldn’t be shared), rồi giải thích nguyên nhân và đưa ví dụ. Sử dụng từ vựng chính xác như "confidential information" hoặc "personal secrets".

Ejemplo: Personal secrets should not be shared because they involve someone’s trust. For example, if a friend confides in me about family problems, I would keep it private to respect their confidence.

Sugerencia: Ý tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và một câu không rõ nghĩa ("learn clothes"). Cần sửa lỗi thành "lend clothes" nếu ý đang nói cho mượn quần áo. Sắp xếp thông tin theo thứ tự: chủ đề chính -> các ví dụ cụ thể. Giữ tối đa 3 câu ngắn gọn.

Ejemplo: Recently I’ve been sharing study tips and useful articles with my classmates so they can improve their grades. I also lend clothes to close friends occasionally and recommend good restaurants to people who ask.

Sugerencia: Nội dung xúc tích nhưng câu cuối bị bỏ dở và một vài từ lựa chọn hơi trang trọng ("nourished"). Nên dùng cấu trúc đơn giản hơn và hoàn thiện câu kết. Thêm lý do cụ thể về phản ứng mẹ hoặc cảm xúc của bạn để làm rõ hơn.

Ejemplo: My mother is the first person I’d share good news with because she raised me and always supports me. I’d tell her first because I know she would be genuinely happy and proud.

Sugerencia: Ý tưởng tốt nhưng diễn đạt lặp lặp và có từ không phù hợp ("superficial"). Hãy rõ ràng: phân loại tin theo mức thân thiết và cho ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: personal problems with best friends; general updates with acquaintances). Loại bỏ tiếng ấp úng.

Ejemplo: It depends on how close we are. I share personal problems and important life updates with my best friends, while I only share casual news, like events or plans, with acquaintances.

× Without a doubt 100% yes.

✓ Without a doubt, yes.

The original sentence is informal but grammatically acceptable; however '100% yes' is colloquial and awkward in formal speech. Replace with 'yes' and add a comma for clarity. Suggestion: avoid slang intensifiers in formal responses.

× When I was a child I used to be selfish but my mom always told me to share things with my friends and play with them so I became more mature and knew how to share.

✓ When I was a child I used to be selfish, but my mom always told me to share things with my friends and play with them, so I became more mature and learned how to share.

Use of 'knew' is incorrect because the speaker refers to acquiring a skill in the past; 'learned' is the correct past form. Also add commas for sentence clarity. Suggestion: use 'learned' or 'came to know' to indicate acquiring ability in the past.

× I think that sharing food is my favorite one because, you know, food is something really important and ensuring food shows others that I care about them and I wanted them to be healthy and.

✓ I think that sharing food is my favorite because food is really important, and making sure they have enough to eat shows others that I care about them and want them to be healthy.

'Ensuring food' is not a natural verb phrase; 'making sure they have enough to eat' is clearer. Also 'I wanted' mixes past with present general statement; use present 'want' to match the ongoing feeling. Remove trailing conjunction. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use natural verb patterns like 'make sure' or 'ensure that someone has'.

× I think it's secret, like, umm, uh, when others told me a secret, I couldn't share it with anyone else because uh, uh, the one who told me really trust me. So I, I.

✓ I think secrets shouldn't be shared. When someone tells me a secret, I don't share it with anyone else because the person who told me really trusts me.

Pronoun and tense issues: 'it's secret' is unnatural; use 'secrets'. 'Others told me a secret' should be 'someone tells me a secret' or 'when someone told me a secret' with consistent tense. 'The one who told me really trust me' has subject-verb disagreement; 'trusts' is correct. Also 'I couldn't share' implies past inability; use present 'I don't share'. Suggestion: use correct pronouns ('someone', 'the person') and match verb forms to subject and tense.

× I usually share useful knowledge with my friends because I want them to benefit from what I've learned. I also sometimes learn clothes to close friends and occasionally recommend food, good places to eat.

✓ I usually share useful knowledge with my friends because I want them to benefit from what I've learned. I also sometimes lend clothes to close friends and occasionally recommend good food and places to eat.

'Learn clothes' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'lend' (to loan clothes). Word order 'recommend food, good places to eat' is awkward; reorder to 'recommend good food and places to eat.' Suggestion: choose correct verbs ('lend') and natural word order for clarity.

× If you ask me, the first person coming to my mind is my mother because she is the one who nourished me and brought me up and she always cared about me. So if there any good news comes to me the 1st.

✓ If you ask me, the first person who comes to my mind is my mother because she is the one who raised me and always cares about me. So if any good news comes to me, she is the first person I would tell.

Problems: 'coming to my mind' should be 'who comes to my mind'; 'nourished me and brought me up' is wordy—'raised me' is natural. Tense/agreement: 'she always cared' mixes past; use present 'always cares' for ongoing habit. 'So if there any good news comes to me the 1st' is ungrammatical; correct to 'if any good news comes to me, she is the first person I would tell.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use idiomatic expressions ('comes to my mind', 'raised me', 'I would tell').

× It varies from person to person and depends a lot on our relationship. Uh, I could share everything with my best friends, but uh, to somebody who is more superficial, uh, I think I wish to always share, umm, what they want to know.

✓ It varies from person to person and depends a lot on our relationship. I could share everything with my best friends, but with someone more casual, I prefer to share only what they want to know.

'Somebody who is more superficial' is awkward and potentially inappropriate; 'someone more casual' or 'less close' is better. 'I think I wish to always share' is redundant and ungrammatical; 'I prefer to share only' conveys intended meaning. Suggestion: use concise, idiomatic phrases and match verbs to preferences ('prefer to share').