Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitations and incorrect phrases, use simple past to describe childhood habits and give a brief example. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes. My parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, they encouraged me to give my toys to my siblings and to help hand out donated items to people in need.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific examples. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'it gives me satisfaction' and 'I try to motivate people'). Use linking words to explain why you share.

Ejemplo: I like to share positive experiences and encouragement with others. For example, I often tell friends about my achievements because it gives me satisfaction, and I also try to motivate them when they are facing difficulties.

Sugerencia: Answer directly and concisely. Use clearer vocabulary: 'personal matters' or 'private information'. Give a reason and a short example using linking words like 'because' or 'for example'. Avoid repetitions and filler words.

Ejemplo: I think private matters are not suitable for sharing because privacy is important. For example, I would not share financial details or sensitive family issues with casual acquaintances.

Sugerencia: Be precise and correct pronouns and vocabulary. Start with a direct statement about whether you shared something recently, then give a short specific example. Correct mistakes: 'I shared with my mom about my university graduation; she was over the moon when she heard my degree will be completed soon.'

Ejemplo: Yes. Recently I shared news about my upcoming university graduation. I told my mother yesterday and she was over the moon when she heard that I will graduate soon.

Sugerencia: Give a clear topic sentence and correct grammar (pronouns, tense). Explain why briefly with one or two supporting details. Remove repetition and filler apologetic phrases.

Ejemplo: I would share good news with my mother first because she has supported me through my ups and downs. For example, she has always encouraged me during difficult times, so I want her to be the first to know my successes.

Sugerencia: Structure your answer: state the general rule, give examples and explain reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., 'gives me pleasure' and 'daily happenings'). Keep it concise and avoid fillers.

Ejemplo: I share most everyday news with my friends, except very personal matters. For example, I tell them about my daily activities and problems because it makes me feel better, and sometimes I get helpful advice from them.

× Yes, my name was signed.

✓ Yes, I was taught to share by my parents.

The original sentence 'Yes, my name was signed.' is unrelated to the question and uses incorrect structure and vocabulary. This is a sentence structure error: the speaker likely intended to say they were taught to share. Use active voice and correct verbs: 'I was taught to share by my parents' or 'My parents taught me to share.' This makes the meaning clear and fits the past time frame.

× And also, uh, if uh, I, they donate something, they always, uh, give on my hand and I just fastest to the people.

✓ Also, when my parents donated something, they always put it in my hands and I quickly gave it to other people.

Errors include incorrect conjunction and conditional structure, wrong preposition 'on my hand', incorrect adjective 'fastest' used as adverb. The problem matches incorrect use of present participle and adverb/adjective forms and sentence structure. Use 'when' for habitual past actions, 'put it in my hands' for correct preposition, and 'quickly' as the adverb of manner. Maintain past tense for past habitual actions.

× I love to share with people a lot of things, especially, uh, my happiness because it's give me satisfaction and also I try to give, uh, motivate people.

✓ I love to share many things with people, especially my happiness, because it gives me satisfaction and I try to motivate people.

Problems: word order and quantifier ('a lot of things' better as 'many things'), incorrect verb form 'it's give' should be 'it gives', and awkward 'give, motivate people'. This matches incorrect use of verbs and adjectives/adverbs. Use third person singular 'gives' for 'it' and 'try to motivate' as correct verb phrase. Remove filler pauses for clarity.

× Uh, I believe, uh, personal life, uh, is not uh, uh, suitable to sharing with others, uh, how hard it was because uh, uh, privacy is really significant for every individual life.

✓ I believe personal matters are not suitable for sharing with others, because privacy is very important for every individual.

Multiple issues: 'suitable to sharing' should be 'suitable for sharing' (preposition error), 'personal life' is better as 'personal matters', and 'how hard it was' is irrelevant and ungrammatical here. Also 'individual life' is redundant; use 'individual'. This correction addresses incorrect preposition use and sentence structure.

× Yes, I have a lot of things to share with others recently but yesterday I had I had shared to my mom about my university graduation and he was really over the moon when he hear my refrigeration will be completed soon.

✓ Yes, I have had a lot to share with others recently, and yesterday I shared the news about my university graduation with my mom; she was really over the moon when she heard that my degree will be completed soon.

Errors: mixing present perfect 'have' with 'recently' needs present perfect 'have had'; duplicate 'I had I had'; incorrect verb 'shared to' should be 'shared with' (preposition), wrong pronouns 'he' for 'my mom' and 'hear' should be past 'heard'; 'refrigeration' is incorrect word for degree/graduation. This matches past tense errors and incorrect preposition and pronoun use. Use consistent tense and correct verbs and nouns.

× Undoubtedly my mom because she deserve everything in my life. She's the only woman who is try with me throughout my ups and down in life. So he deserved everything. Sorry she deserve everything.

✓ Undoubtedly my mom, because she deserves everything in my life. She's the only woman who has been with me through my ups and downs in life, so she deserves everything.

Pronoun and verb errors: 'she deserve' should be 'she deserves' (subject-verb agreement/third person singular), 'who is try with me' is ungrammatical; correct is 'who has been with me' (present perfect to show continuous past-to-present), 'ups and down' should be 'ups and downs'. 'So he deserved' incorrectly uses 'he' and past tense; correct pronoun is 'she' and present 'deserves'. This addresses incorrect pronoun and tense agreement.

× Uh, I share almost everything with my friend, uh, except my personal privacy, uh, because uh, it's uh, give me pleasure to share my daily life happening with them. And sometimes I get some advice from them who is, uh, is really helpful.

✓ I share almost everything with my friends, except my private matters, because it gives me pleasure to share my daily experiences with them. Sometimes I get advice from them, which is really helpful.

Problems: 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' if talking generally (quantifier/plural issue), 'personal privacy' is better as 'private matters', 'it's give' should be 'it gives' (verb form), 'daily life happening' awkward — use 'daily experiences', and 'advice from them who is' incorrect relative clause — use 'advice from them, which is'. This addresses incorrect quantifier/plural use, verb agreement, and sentence structure.