Sharing— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答は要点を押さえていますが、文法的誤りと語順の乱れがあり、意味が不明瞭な箇所があります。また冗長な語句（"to be honest"）は不要です。改善ポイント：①簡潔なトピック文（Yes, my parents taught me to share.）を使う。②理由を示す際は1～2文にまとめ、正しい語順と冠詞・代名詞を使う（"I have two siblings, so my parents often encouraged us to share toys and food."）。③接続詞（so, because）で論理を明確にする。

Ejemplo: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child. For example, because I have two siblings, our parents often encouraged us to share toys and take turns, which helped us get along better.

Sugerencia: 内容は明確ですが表現が不自然で語彙の選択に問題があります（"shelling"は不適切）。改善ポイント：①具体例を入れる（cakes, ice cream）。②理由を明確にし、接続詞で繋げる（because, so）。③語彙を正しく使う（"trying different flavors"など）。

Ejemplo: I usually share desserts with my family, such as ice cream or pancakes, because sharing lets us try different flavors and talk about which ones we like.

Sugerencia: 意図は伝わりますが、文法・語法の誤りが目立ちます（"detest to share"ではなく"detest sharing"や"I don't like sharing"、"it makes me annoyed"）。改善ポイント：①自然な否定表現を使う（I don't like sharing…）。②理由を具体的に述べる（hygiene, germs）。③簡潔に1～2文でまとめる。

Ejemplo: I don't like sharing a water bottle because it feels unhygienic and I worry about germs, so I prefer to use my own bottle.

Sugerencia: エピソードは良いですが語順・表現が冗長で不自然です（"went to coffee"→"went to a café"、"morning set"は不明瞭、"shared our pancakes with each other"）。改善ポイント：①自然な語彙を使う（café, breakfast set）。②結果を簡潔に述べる（so I could try different flavors）。③文は2～3文に収める。

Ejemplo: Recently I went to a café with my family for a breakfast set, and we shared pancakes with each other, so I was able to try several different flavors.

Sugerencia: 答えは明快ですが表現が不自然で意味が曖昧です（"cheer me hard"や"get high return"は不適切）。改善ポイント：①自然な表現を使う（"they always support me"）。②理由を簡潔に説明する（they are supportive and important to me）。③感情を表す語彙を正しく使う。

Ejemplo: Definitely my parents, because they have always supported and encouraged me, so I like to share good news with them first to celebrate together.

Sugerencia: ポイントは整理されていますが文法と語順の改善が必要です（"announce my friend"→"tell"、"friends who have the same hobby"）。改善ポイント：①具体的な例を簡潔に述べる。②正しい動詞を選ぶ（tell, invite）。③接続詞で理由や結果をつなぐ。

Ejemplo: I usually share news about our shared hobbies. For example, if I plan to go to a concert, I tell my friends who like the same music and invite them to join.

× Yes, to be honest, I have two siblings, therefore we my parents are usually allocated suites for our siblings.

✓ Yes, to be honest, I have two siblings, and my parents usually allocate rooms for us.

The original sentence has nonstandard word order and incorrect verb forms. 'Therefore' is not appropriate after a personal statement; 'and' connects the clauses better. 'We my parents are usually allocated suites for our siblings' is ungrammatical. Use active voice: 'my parents usually allocate rooms for us.' Use 'rooms' instead of 'suites' unless you mean hotel suites. Improve clarity by placing subject before verb and using correct verb tense. Suggested improvement: Break ideas into two clear clauses and use subject-verb-object order.

× I tend to share dessert with my family. We can enjoy eating other kind of taste through shelling.

✓ I tend to share desserts with my family. We can enjoy different flavors by sharing.

'Dessert' should be plural when speaking generally, so use 'desserts'. 'Other kind of taste' is ungrammatical; use 'different flavors'. 'Through shelling' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'by sharing'. Use noun pluralization and correct prepositional phrase. Suggested improvement: Use plural nouns for general statements and common collocations like 'different flavors' and 'by sharing'.

× I detest to share a bottle of water. It is not clean and it makes me annoying.

✓ I hate sharing a bottle of water. It is not clean and it annoys me.

'Detest' is followed by a gerund, not 'to' plus infinitive, so use 'detest sharing' or a simpler verb 'hate sharing'. 'It makes me annoying' uses the wrong adjective; the correct expression is 'it annoys me.' Use correct verb patterns and causative structure. Suggested improvement: Learn verb complementation patterns (verb + gerund vs verb + to-infinitive) and common expressions like 'it annoys me.'

× Recently I went to coffee with my family to have morning set and then we shared our pancakes each other. Therefore I could enjoy eating all the taste of all taste dessert.

✓ Recently I went for coffee with my family to have a breakfast set, and we shared pancakes with each other. Therefore I could enjoy all the different flavors of the desserts.

'Went to coffee' is unnatural; use 'went for coffee'. 'Morning set' should be 'breakfast set'. 'Shared our pancakes each other' needs the preposition 'with' and correct word order: 'shared pancakes with each other.' 'All the taste of all taste dessert' is redundant and unclear; use 'all the different flavors of the desserts.' Fix collocations, prepositions, and avoid redundancy. Suggested improvement: Use natural expressions for meals and ensure correct prepositions after 'share'.

× Definitely it is my parents. This is because my family all always cheer me hard so I want to get high return to make my family happy.

✓ Definitely, it is my parents. This is because my whole family always supports me strongly, so I want to give back and make my family happy.

'It is my parents' is awkward but acceptable; better punctuation helps. 'My family all always' is incorrect word order; use 'my whole family always.' 'Cheer me hard' is not idiomatic; use 'supports me strongly.' 'Get high return' is unclear; likely intended 'give back' or 'repay them.' Use correct collocation and pronoun placement. Suggested improvement: Use common verbs like 'support' and idiomatic phrases like 'give back' when expressing gratitude.

× It is about our hobbies, our shared hobbies. For instance, when I decide to go to concert, I tend to announce my friend who have same hobby.

✓ It is about our hobbies, our shared hobbies. For instance, when I decide to go to a concert, I tend to tell my friends who have the same hobby.

'Go to concert' needs the article 'a' before 'concert'. 'Announce my friend' is wrong verb choice; use 'tell' or 'invite'. 'My friend who have' has subject-verb agreement and pluralization issues; use 'my friends who have'. Also add 'the' before 'same hobby'. Fix articles, verb choice, and subject-verb agreement. Suggested improvement: Use articles with singular countable nouns ('a concert') and ensure verb agreement with plural subjects.