Internet— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答时语句较长且有语法错误，如'May'应为'me'。建议简化句子结构，避免冗长，同时注意语法准确性。

Ejemplo: I started using the Internet in high school during our computer science class every Tuesday. There, I learned how to search online and use it for homework. It was exciting to be among the first to access computers.

Sugerencia: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如'read videos to enjoy to enjoy myself and I'。建议简洁明了地表达，避免重复和语法错误。

Ejemplo: I go online almost every day to read the latest news and watch interesting videos. I also use the Internet to keep in touch with my family and friends.

Sugerencia: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，如'addiction to 8 so'。建议使用完整句子，表达清晰，避免语法错误。

Ejemplo: When I was in high school, I wasn't allowed to use the Internet after class because we didn't have access at home. My parents thought it was time-consuming and could lead to addiction.

Sugerencia: 回答中有双重否定和语法错误，如'without not since that time'。建议使用简单明确的句子表达观点。

Ejemplo: Yes, I often spend too much time scrolling through social media and watching videos. I know it's a problem, and I hope to reduce my online time.

Sugerencia: 回答中有拼写错误和表达不清，如'raid'应为'read'，句子结构混乱。建议注意拼写和句子连贯性。

Ejemplo: Without the Internet, I would read books because I haven't done that for a long time. It would be a perfect chance to enjoy novels and immerse myself in stories.

× At that class I learned how to search the Internet and use it effectively for more homework.

✓ At that class I learned how to search the Internet and use it effectively for more homework.

该句时态正确，无需修改。

× It was quite challenging and exciting for May to get first access to computers.

✓ It was quite challenging and exciting for me to get first access to computers.

句中'May'应为' me'，是拼写错误，导致句子结构不正确。应改为'me'表示'我'。

× Well, to be honest, I go online almost every day because I want to keep up with the latest news by browsing news websites and I also prefer scrolling through which add videos to enjoy to enjoy myself and I. Keep in touch with my families and friends. So in three.

✓ Well, to be honest, I go online almost every day because I want to keep up with the latest news by browsing news websites and I also prefer scrolling through short videos to enjoy myself and keep in touch with my family and friends.

原句结构混乱，存在断句错误和词语使用错误。'which add videos'应为'short videos'，'to enjoy to enjoy myself and I.'重复且断句错误，'families'应为单数'family'。应调整句子结构使其通顺。

× But I was in high school, I wasn't allowed to use the Internet after class because we don't have Internet access at home.

✓ When I was in high school, I wasn't allowed to use the Internet after class because we didn't have Internet access at home.

句中时态不一致，前半句用过去时，后半句用现在时，应统一为过去时。'don't have'应改为'didn't have'。

× My parents believed that using the Internet is time consuming and I will end up with getting addiction to 8 so.

✓ My parents believed that using the Internet was time-consuming and I would end up getting addicted to it.

'is'应改为过去时'was'，'will'应改为过去将来时'would'，'getting addiction to 8 so'表达错误，应为'getting addicted to it'。

× Yes, I always find myself scrolling on social media and watching video clips without not since that time.

✓ Yes, I always find myself scrolling on social media and watching video clips since that time.

'without not'是双重否定，应去掉'without'，保留'not'或直接去掉两者。此处应去掉'without not'。

× But you know I couldn't help doing this.

✓ But you know, I couldn't help doing this.

句中缺少逗号，影响句子流畅性。

× I hope I can spend less time on line and I will try to do this.

✓ I hope I can spend less time online and I will try to do this.

'on line'应合并为'online'，表达更准确。

× Without the Internet I would have a book to read because I haven't read a book for like ages 0 is the normal.

✓ Without the Internet, I would have a book to read because I haven't read a book for like ages; it is normal.

句中缺少逗号和分号，导致句子不通顺。'0 is the normal'表达不清，应改为'it is normal'。

× I always wanted to raid and have no time as so this will be the perfect time for me to read this novel and immerse myself into the world of words.

✓ I have always wanted to read and have had no time, so this will be the perfect time for me to read this novel and immerse myself in the world of words.

'raid'应为'read'，拼写错误。时态应用现在完成时'have always wanted'和'have had no time'，'immerse myself into'应改为'immerse myself in'。