Internet— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

Ejemplo: I started using the Internet when I was seven years old, after receiving my first cell phone. It was exciting because that phone introduced me to the online world, which felt like a fantasy.

Sugerencia: Improve your grammar by using correct verb tenses and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your past and present habits clearly.

Ejemplo: When I was a child, I went online about once a week. However, now as a university student, I go online almost every day because I need to do research and find information for my studies.

Sugerencia: Focus on clarity and grammatical accuracy. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

Ejemplo: Yes, when I was a child, my parents sometimes did not allow me to use the Internet because they were concerned it might damage my eyesight.

Sugerencia: Work on sentence structure and clarity. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons.

Ejemplo: I don't think I spend too much time online because staying connected with people and accessing information is important for me.

Sugerencia: Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid incomplete or confusing sentences. Use linking words to list activities logically and provide specific examples.

Ejemplo: Without the Internet, I would read books and spend time outdoors playing football or skateboarding. If I couldn't do sports, I would hang out with friends, write, and enjoy nature through meditation.

× I started, I started using the Internet at the age of seven.

✓ I started using the Internet at the age of seven.

The repetition of 'I started' is unnecessary and incorrect. The sentence should only have one instance of the past tense verb 'started' to be grammatically correct.

× It was the time when I received my first cell phone and also happy because that cell phone bring me into the world of the Internet is quite nice.

✓ It was the time when I received my first cell phone, and I was also happy because that cell phone brought me into the world of the Internet, which is quite nice.

The original sentence lacks proper conjunctions and verb forms. 'And also happy' should be 'and I was also happy' to form a complete clause. 'Bring' should be in past tense 'brought' to match the past context. Additionally, the sentence needs commas and a relative clause 'which is quite nice' for clarity.

× To be honest, when I was a child, I go online about once a week, but now I go online almost every day, because as a university student, I need to find some, do some research and search some information online.

✓ To be honest, when I was a child, I went online about once a week, but now I go online almost every day because, as a university student, I need to do some research and search for some information online.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past time reference 'when I was a child'. Also, 'find some, do some research and search some information' is awkward; 'do some research and search for some information' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× They don't want the string to damage my eyesight.

✓ They don't want the screen to damage my eyesight.

The word 'string' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'screen', which is the correct noun referring to the phone display. Using the correct noun is essential for clarity.

× So they sometimes there is time when I asked him to use my phone and use the Internet, they refused.

✓ So sometimes there were times when I asked them to use my phone and use the Internet, but they refused.

The phrase 'there is time' is incorrect; it should be 'there were times' to indicate multiple occasions in the past. Also, 'asked him' should be 'asked them' to refer to parents (plural). The sentence needs conjunction 'but' to connect the clauses properly.

× I don't think they I I spend too much time online because I think if I want to say something, spend too much time being means that this it is bad thing to do.

✓ I don't think I spend too much time online because I think if I say someone spends too much time online, it means that it is a bad thing to do.

The original sentence has repeated pronouns 'they I I' which is incorrect. Also, the phrase 'if I want to say something, spend too much time being means that this it is bad thing to do' is confusing and ungrammatical. The correction clarifies the intended meaning with proper pronouns and sentence structure.

× I need to. Set Spend some time online to keep connected with people, with the world, with informations.

✓ I need to spend some time online to stay connected with people, with the world, and with information.

The phrase 'Set Spend' is incorrect and likely a transcription error; it should be 'spend'. Also, 'informations' is uncountable and should be 'information'. 'Keep connected' is better expressed as 'stay connected' in this context.

× Without the Internet I will find some book to read and I would do some Go outdoor place footboard football and two sons boards an.

✓ Without the Internet, I will find some books to read and I would go outdoors to play football and do some snowboarding.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'some book' should be plural 'some books'; 'Go outdoor place footboard football and two sons boards an' is incoherent and likely meant to say 'go outdoors to play football and do some snowboarding'. The correction uses proper future tense and corrects vocabulary and sentence structure.

× If I. Hi, without sports, I will just hang out with my friends an recent book and write something and enjoy the beautiful nature, because it is quite nice to do some meditation. Meditation nature.

✓ If I have no sports, I will just hang out with my friends, read a recent book, write something, and enjoy the beautiful nature because it is quite nice to meditate in nature.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains errors like 'If I. Hi' which should be 'If I have no sports'. 'An recent book' should be 'read a recent book'. The phrase 'do some meditation. Meditation nature.' is awkward and corrected to 'meditate in nature' for clarity and grammatical correctness.