Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 답변이 다소 어색하고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 'the most important paper'는 의미가 불분명하며, 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 중복되는 표현을 줄이고 명확한 이유를 제시하는 것이 좋습니다.

Ejemplo: I usually have dinner with my family on my birthday because it is a special day, and I want to spend quality time with my loved ones.

Sugerencia: 문장이 문법적으로 부정확하고 불완전합니다. 시제 일치와 문장 구조를 개선해야 하며, 문장을 완성하여 명확한 의미 전달이 필요합니다.

Ejemplo: When I was young, my family and I used to go on a picnic to celebrate my birthday.

Sugerencia: 중복된 단어('I I')와 문장 연결이 어색합니다. 현재와 과거의 생각을 명확히 구분하고, 자연스러운 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 다듬는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ejemplo: When I was young, I thought celebrating my birthday was very important, but now I don't pay much attention to it.

Sugerencia: 답변이 불완전하고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 질문에 직접적으로 답하지 못했습니다. 질문에 맞는 내용을 준비하고, 문장을 완성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

Ejemplo: I'm not very familiar with Chinese culture, but in Korea, the first birthday, called 'Doljanchi,' is the most important celebration.

× I usually have dinner with my family on my birthday because the birthday is very important today, so I want to spend my time with the most important paper that is my family.

✓ I usually have dinner with my family on my birthday because the birthday is very important to me, so I want to spend my time with the most important people, who are my family.

The word 'paper' is incorrectly used instead of 'people'. This is a vocabulary error affecting pronoun reference. The sentence also needs 'to me' after 'important' to be grammatically correct.

× When I was young. We go to the. Picnic with my family when on my birthday.

✓ When I was young, we went on a picnic with my family on my birthday.

The original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect word order and punctuation. 'We go to the picnic' should be past tense 'we went on a picnic'. Also, 'when on my birthday' is misplaced and should be 'on my birthday'.

× When I was young I I thought it is very important to celebrate my birthday, but currently I don't care anymore about my birthday celebration.

✓ When I was young, I thought it was very important to celebrate my birthday, but currently I don't care about my birthday celebration anymore.

The verb 'is' should be in past tense 'was' to match 'thought'. Also, 'I I' is a repetition error. The placement of 'anymore' is better at the end of the sentence.

× Actually, I'm not Chinese paper, so I don't know the Chinese culture well, but I can say about the Korean culture.

✓ Actually, I'm not Chinese, so I don't know Chinese culture well, but I can talk about Korean culture.

'Chinese paper' is incorrect; 'paper' is wrongly used instead of 'person' or omitted. Also, 'say about' is incorrect; 'talk about' is the correct phrase.

× In Korea, the most important, the most important birthday celebration is is one of the.

✓ In Korea, the most important birthday celebration is one of the traditional holidays.

The sentence is incomplete and has repeated words 'the most important'. It needs completion to make sense and proper structure.