Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, such as "open the party to invited" and repeated words "grow up grow up." To improve, try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Ejemplo: When I was a child, I usually held a party and invited my friends, who often brought surprising gifts. However, now that I am older, I prefer to spend my birthday quietly with my family.

Sugerencia: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases, such as "have a had a big party" and "like church time together." To improve, focus on using correct verb tenses and clearer vocabulary. Also, try to provide specific details and use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

Ejemplo: When I was young, I invited my friends to my cosy home and we had a big party. We spent a joyful time together, playing games and chatting, which made me feel very happy.

Sugerencia: Your answer is incomplete and contains awkward phrasing such as "like love yourself more" and "energy to healing yourself." To improve, complete your sentences clearly and use appropriate vocabulary. Also, organise your ideas logically with linking words to express your opinion effectively.

Ejemplo: Yes, I love my birthday because I think it is an important occasion to appreciate yourself, reflect on the past year, and gain energy to face new challenges.

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally relevant but contains filler words like "umm" and "uh" and some grammatical errors such as "everyone birthday." To improve, avoid fillers, use correct grammar, and provide more specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

Ejemplo: I believe every person's birthday is important in China because it offers a special opportunity to reflect on personal achievements and spend quality time with loved ones.

× Well, when I was a kid, I usually open the party to invited my friends to come in and I really appreciated that.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, I usually opened the party to invite my friends to come in and I really appreciated that.

The verbs 'open' and 'invited' are incorrectly used. 'Open' should be in the past tense 'opened' to match 'usually' in past context, and 'invited' should be the base form 'invite' after 'to' as it is an infinitive verb form.

× However, when I grew up grow up, I love spending time with my family during my birthday.

✓ However, when I grew up, I loved spending time with my family during my birthday.

The phrase 'grew up grow up' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'grew up'. Also, 'love' should be in past tense 'loved' to maintain consistency with the past time frame.

× When I was young, I invited my friend to my cosy home and have a had a big party.

✓ When I was young, I invited my friends to my cosy home and had a big party.

The singular 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context of a party. Also, 'have a had a' is incorrect; it should be simply 'had' to indicate past tense.

× We had a very like church time together and that really made me feel enjoyable.

✓ We had a very nice time together and that really made me feel happy.

The phrase 'very like church time' is unclear and incorrect. It should be replaced with 'very nice time' to express enjoyment. Also, 'feel enjoyable' is incorrect; 'feel happy' or 'enjoyed' is appropriate.

× Uh, moreover, I really appreciated that, uh, environment.

✓ Uh, moreover, I really appreciated that environment.

The comma before 'environment' is unnecessary and breaks the sentence flow. Removing it improves clarity.

× Yes, I really love my birthday therefore, I suppose birthday is a very important occasion that everyone can like love yourself more and have more energy to healing yourself and just thinking about your.

✓ Yes, I really love my birthday; therefore, I suppose it is a very important occasion when everyone can love themselves more, have more energy to heal themselves, and just think about themselves.

The original sentence is run-on and contains awkward phrasing. 'Like love yourself more' is incorrect; it should be 'love themselves more'. 'To healing yourself' should be 'to heal themselves'. Also, 'just thinking about your' is incomplete and should be 'just think about themselves' for clarity and correctness.

× Well, actually everyone birthday is very crucial because, umm, that's the only day that people can spend time for themselves and reflect about the past, what they go through and just really appreciate that, uh, your achievement, yeah.

✓ Well, actually everyone's birthday is very crucial because, umm, that's the only day that people can spend time for themselves and reflect on the past, what they have gone through, and just really appreciate their achievements, yeah.

The phrase 'everyone birthday' should be possessive 'everyone's birthday'. 'Reflect about' should be 'reflect on'. 'What they go through' should be past perfect 'what they have gone through' to match reflection on past events. 'Your achievement' should be 'their achievements' to maintain third person plural consistency.