Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. For example, say "I usually visit a temple and donate money and food to beggars and orphanages. Then, I hang out with my friends and have lunch or dinner together." Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Ejemplo: On my birthday, I usually visit a temple to pray and donate money and food to beggars and orphanages. After that, I spend time with my friends and have lunch or dinner together. It makes the day meaningful and enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Your answer lacks clarity and has grammatical mistakes. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. For example, "When I was young, I used to give chocolates to everyone, including my teachers. I also received cakes and went out to celebrate. I liked wearing beautiful clothes on that day."

Ejemplo: When I was young, I gave chocolates to everyone, including my teachers. I also received cakes and went out to celebrate with my family. Additionally, I enjoyed wearing beautiful clothes on my birthday.

Sugerencia: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons using linking words. For example, "I don't think celebrating my birthday is important because as I grow older, I see it as just another day. Moreover, not celebrating helps me avoid unnecessary expenses."

Ejemplo: I don't think celebrating my birthday is very important because as I get older, it feels like just another day. Furthermore, not celebrating helps me save money and avoid unnecessary spending.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and lacks specific details. Try to give a direct answer with supporting reasons and use linking words. For example, "I am not very familiar with birthday celebrations in China, but I think birthdays of important people, like national leaders or religious figures such as Buddha, are celebrated more importantly."

Ejemplo: I am not very familiar with birthday celebrations in China. However, I believe that the birthdays of important people, such as national leaders or religious figures like Buddha, are considered the most important to celebrate.

× On my birthday I usually do busy temple and donate some money and food for beggars and orphanage and also I hang out with my friends and have lunch or dinner with my.

✓ On my birthday I usually visit the busy temple and donate some money and food to beggars and orphanages, and also I hang out with my friends and have lunch or dinner with them.

The phrase 'do busy temple' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'visit' when referring to going to a temple. Also, 'donate some money and food for beggars and orphanage' should use 'to' instead of 'for' to indicate the recipients of the donation. Additionally, 'orphanage' should be pluralized to 'orphanages' to match the plural context. Finally, 'have lunch or dinner with my' is incomplete and should be 'with them' to correctly refer to friends.

× On my birthday when I was young, I give everyone chocolate, even my class teachers and I got cakes and I also go out for that day.

✓ On my birthday when I was young, I gave everyone chocolate, even my class teachers, and I got cakes and I also went out that day.

The verbs 'give' and 'go' should be in the past tense 'gave' and 'went' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was young.' This maintains tense consistency in the sentence.

× I wear beautiful clothes and I have some.

✓ I wore beautiful clothes and I had some.

The verb tense should be past ('wore' and 'had') to match the past context. Also, 'I have some' is vague; it is better to specify what 'some' refers to or omit it if unclear. Here, it is corrected to 'I had some' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I don't think it's important to celebrate my birthday because I when I am grow more elder now I feel it's just a day.

✓ I don't think it's important to celebrate my birthday because as I grow older now, I feel it's just a day.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect word order. 'I when I am grow more elder now' is incorrect; it should be 'as I grow older now' to express the idea clearly and grammatically.

× Why should I celebrate I even if I don't celebrate it's simple to not celebrating and not wasting money.

✓ Why should I celebrate? Even if I don't celebrate, it's simple not to celebrate and not waste money.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and has incorrect verb forms. 'Not celebrating' should be 'not to celebrate' to function correctly after 'simple.' Also, 'not wasting money' should be 'not waste money' to maintain parallel structure.

× In China I don't have any information about celebrating birthday, but I think it's someone who make great well and he should be a celebrate his birthday and also a Buddhist Buddha is a main.

✓ In China, I don't have any information about celebrating birthdays, but I think it's someone who does great things and he should celebrate his birthday. Also, Buddha is very important.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'celebrating birthday' should be plural 'birthdays.' 'Someone who make great well' is incorrect; it should be 'someone who does great things.' 'He should be a celebrate his birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'he should celebrate his birthday.' 'A Buddhist Buddha is a main' is unclear; corrected to 'Buddha is very important' for clarity and correctness.