Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: You need to make your answer more natural and clear. Start with a direct response to the question, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'Train my baby' and 'schedule always'.

Ejemplo: On my birthday, I usually start the day by praying to thank God for a new year of life. Then, I receive calls from family and friends who wish me well. Finally, I plan a small celebration to enjoy with my loved ones.

Sugerencia: Your answer should be more structured and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition. Also, be careful with vocabulary to ensure clarity and appropriateness.

Ejemplo: When I was young, I usually invited a few friends to hang out. We either went to the cinema to watch movies or visited a club. Afterwards, we enjoyed some food and drinks while dancing together.

Sugerencia: Your answer is good but can be improved by adding more specific reasons and using linking words to make it more coherent and natural.

Ejemplo: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it only happens once a year. Moreover, it gives me a chance to spend quality time with my friends and family, which strengthens our relationships and creates happy memories.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to answer directly and provide specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Ejemplo: In China, I believe the most important birthday to celebrate is that of close family members, such as my husband's child. This is because family bonds are highly valued, and celebrating together shows love and respect.

× Train my baby.

✓ I train my baby.

The sentence lacks a subject. In English, sentences need a subject and a verb. Adding 'I' makes it a complete sentence.

× I Secondly, I start receiving calls from family and friends who called to wish me a lovely birthday.

✓ Secondly, I start receiving calls from family and friends who call to wish me a lovely birthday.

The word 'Secondly' should not be preceded by 'I'. Also, 'called' should be in present tense 'call' to match the habitual action described.

× Then I schedule always to celebrate the birthday.

✓ Then I always schedule to celebrate the birthday.

The adverb 'always' should be placed before the main verb 'schedule' for correct word order.

× Well, I'll call some few friends, then we'll hang out either in the cinema or either to watch some movies in the cinema or go to club.

✓ Well, I would call a few friends, then we'd hang out either at the cinema to watch some movies or go to a club.

'I'll' (I will) is incorrect for past habitual action; 'would' is appropriate. 'Some few' is incorrect; 'a few' is correct. 'Either' should not be repeated. Prepositions 'in' should be 'at' for places. 'Go to club' needs an article 'a club'.

× Then we eat some pot **** drink some champagne and dance, dance.

✓ Then we eat some potluck, drink some champagne, and dance.

The phrase 'pot ****' is unclear; assuming 'potluck' is intended. Also, the sentence needs commas and conjunctions for clarity and correct list structure.

× Yes, it's very important to celebrate this because it's something that happens once in a year.

✓ Yes, it's very important to celebrate this because it happens once a year.

'Once in a year' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'once a year'. Also, 'it's something that happens' can be simplified to 'it happens' for clarity.

× I don't think we have a finance to sponsor a baby party in China, but if the need may be, I would say my husband's baby.

✓ I don't think we have the finances to sponsor a baby party in China, but if needed, I would say my husband's baby.

'Finance' should be plural 'finances' when referring to money. 'If the need may be' is incorrect; 'if needed' is more natural. 'My husband's baby' is unclear; likely means 'my husband's birthday'.