Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure, such as 'On my birthday, I usually go to the temple and have lunch with my family. In the evening, all my friends gather at my home and we celebrate together. We enjoy it a lot.' Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Ejemplo: On my birthday, I usually visit the temple and have lunch with my family. In the evening, my friends come over to my house, and we celebrate together. We enjoy the time a lot.

Sugerencia: Focus on clear sentence structure and grammar. For example, say 'When I was young, I did the same as I do now. My family and friends would celebrate together, and we enjoyed it a lot.' Also, avoid filler words and be more specific if possible.

Ejemplo: When I was young, I celebrated my birthday the same way as now. My family and friends gathered together, and we had a lot of fun.

Sugerencia: Improve grammar and clarity by saying, 'I think it is important for everyone to celebrate their birthday because it marks the day they were born. From my perspective, celebrating on that day is special as people enjoy time with family and friends.' Also, avoid repetition and keep sentences concise.

Ejemplo: I believe celebrating birthdays is important because it marks the day a person was born. It is a special occasion to enjoy with family and friends.

Sugerencia: Use correct grammar and clearer expressions. For example, say 'I think parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because it shows respect towards them.' Also, explain why respect is important to make your answer more specific.

Ejemplo: In China, I believe parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because it shows respect and gratitude for their care and support.

× In my birthday I usually go to temple and having a lunch with my family and at the evening all my friends are gathered at my home and we celebrate my birthday.

✓ On my birthday I usually go to the temple and have lunch with my family, and in the evening all my friends gather at my home and we celebrate my birthday.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'birthday'; it should be 'on my birthday' because we use 'on' for specific days. Also, 'to temple' needs the definite article 'the' as it refers to a specific place. 'Having a lunch' is incorrect; it should be 'have lunch' as 'have' is the correct verb here. 'At the evening' should be 'in the evening' because 'in' is used for parts of the day. 'Are gathered' is better as 'gather' to indicate habitual action.

× In my birthday I usually go to temple and having a lunch with my family and at the evening all my friends are gathered at my home and we celebrate my birthday.

✓ On my birthday I usually go to the temple and have lunch with my family, and in the evening all my friends gather at my home and we celebrate my birthday.

'Having' is incorrectly used after 'and' here; the correct form is the base verb 'have' to maintain parallel structure with 'go'.

× We enjoyed a lot.

✓ We enjoy a lot.

'Enjoyed' is past tense, but the context is habitual action on birthdays, so present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate.

× When I was young I did the same as I do it now.

✓ When I was young I did the same as I do now.

'Do it now' is incorrect; 'do now' suffices. Also, 'did' is correct for past action, but 'do' is present tense for current action.

× Like I, we, all my family and all my friends celebrate together, enjoyed a lot.

✓ Like me, we, all my family and all my friends celebrate together and enjoy a lot.

'Like I' is incorrect; the object form 'me' should be used after 'like'. Also, 'enjoyed' should be 'enjoy' to match present tense habitual action.

× I think it is important for everybody to celebrate that birthday because it is a day where they he or she was born.

✓ I think it is important for everybody to celebrate their birthday because it is the day they were born.

'They he or she' is incorrect and awkward; 'their' is the correct singular gender-neutral pronoun. Also, 'that birthday' should be 'their birthday' to indicate possession. 'Where' is incorrect; 'when' or 'the day' is better. 'Was born' is correct past tense.

× So from my perspective, it is important to celebrate birthday on on that day.

✓ So from my perspective, it is important to celebrate a birthday on that day.

The article 'a' is needed before 'birthday'. Also, 'on on' is a repetition error; only one 'on' is needed.

× They enjoy a lot with their family and friends.

✓ They enjoy a lot with their family and friends.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× I think parents birthday are most important to celebrate because it shows the respect angle towards him.

✓ I think parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because they show respect towards them.

'Parents birthday' should be plural possessive 'parents' birthdays' because it refers to birthdays of multiple parents. 'Are most important' should be 'are the most important' to use the definite article with superlative. 'It shows the respect angle towards him' is incorrect; 'they show respect towards them' is correct to match plural subject and object.