Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“celebrate my birthday on with my friends”不完整且不自然。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的表达。

Ejemplo: I usually celebrate my birthday with my friends by dancing and singing. At the end of the day, I eat birthday cake and make a wish for the future.

Sugerencia: 回答中时态使用错误（如“always go”应为“always went”），表达不清晰且有语法错误。建议使用正确时态，简洁明了地表达过去的习惯，并避免不必要的复杂表达。

Ejemplo: When I was young, I always traveled with my parents on my birthday because school was not busy, so I had plenty of free time.

Sugerencia: 回答重复且表达不连贯，句子结构混乱。建议避免重复，使用连贯的句子表达观点，并具体说明原因。

Ejemplo: I think celebrating my birthday is important because it marks another year of growth and reminds me to take on more responsibilities.

Sugerencia: 回答中充满犹豫词和重复，表达不清晰且语法错误较多。建议提前准备答案，减少口头语，使用清晰连贯的句子表达观点。

Ejemplo: In China, I think it is important to celebrate the birthdays of people who have contributed to society because their efforts help our country develop and improve the economy.

× I like to celebrate my birthday on with my friends.

✓ I like to celebrate my birthday with my friends.

句中“on”是多余的，正确表达是“celebrate my birthday with my friends”，表示和朋友一起庆祝生日。

× At the end of the birthday I will eat the birthday cakes and have the wish to the future.

✓ At the end of the birthday, I will eat the birthday cake and make a wish for the future.

“the birthday cakes”应为单数“the birthday cake”，因为通常指一个生日蛋糕；“have the wish to the future”表达不正确，应为“make a wish for the future”，表示许愿。

× When I was young, I always go to travel with my parents during my birthday because during my childhoods the class is not very tight and nervous, so the time is very free and adding dread to go traveling.

✓ When I was young, I always went traveling with my parents during my birthday because during my childhood the classes were not very tight and stressful, so the time was very free and I was eager to go traveling.

“go”应改为过去式“went”，因为描述过去的习惯；“childhoods”应为不可数名词“childhood”；“class”应为复数“classes”；“not very tight and nervous”表达不准确，改为“not very tight and stressful”；“adding dread to go traveling”表达错误，应为“eager to go traveling”，表示渴望去旅行。

× I think it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because I think birthdays are very important celebrations for me because I have grown one year older and I have more sense of responsibilities.

✓ I think it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because birthdays are very important celebrations for me as I have grown one year older and have a greater sense of responsibility.

“I have more sense of responsibilities”表达不正确，应为“have a greater sense of responsibility”，表示责任感增强。

× I need to shoulder it. It grows.

✓ I need to shoulder it as it grows.

“I need to shoulder it. It grows.”两句应合并为一句，表达责任随着年龄增长而增加。

× I think people who contribute to the society, it's important to celebrate in China because uh, the people, uh, who deserved themselves and make efforts to, uh, contribute the society, which makes us uh, society more umm, uh, developed and uh, uh, increase the economy.

✓ I think it is important to celebrate the birthdays of people who contribute to society in China because those who deserve recognition and make efforts to contribute to society help make our society more developed and increase the economy.

“deserved themselves”用法错误，应为“deserve recognition”或类似表达；“contribute the society”应为“contribute to society”；句子结构混乱，需调整使表达更清晰。