Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 你的回答有些冗长且重复，比如“shopping mall”重复出现，且句子结构不够自然。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

Ejemplo: On my birthday, I usually invite my friends to a shopping mall where we have a big dinner together. After that, we watch a movie and do some shopping. I also buy a cake to celebrate.

Sugerencia: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，如“my friend my friend”，且表达不够连贯。建议注意语法准确性，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

Ejemplo: When I was a child, my friends gave me gifts, and my parents cooked a big meal. I invited my friends to my home, and we had dinner and ate cake together. It was a very happy time.

Sugerencia: 回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，如“a symbol of grow up”，且句子结构稍显混乱。建议使用更准确的表达和连接词，使内容更清晰。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think birthdays are very important because they symbolize growing up and starting a new age. Moreover, spending time with family and friends makes me very happy. Therefore, I look forward to my birthday all year.

Sugerencia: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“this sixty 2068”，且缺少连接词。建议注意语法准确性，避免模糊表达，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

Ejemplo: In Chinese culture, parents' birthdays are very important because they show our honor and respect for family. Besides, elderly people's birthdays, especially the sixtieth birthday, are celebrated with great importance.

× Well in my birthday I usually invite my friend to a shopping mall and we can have a big dinner together and after that we in watch a movie in a cinema and go shopping on the shopping mall together.

✓ Well, on my birthday I usually invite my friends to a shopping mall and we can have a big dinner together and after that we watch a movie in a cinema and go shopping in the shopping mall together.

birthday前应使用介词on，friend应使用复数friends表示多个朋友，去除多余的in，shopping mall前应使用介词in。

× Well in my birthday I usually invite my friend to a shopping mall and we can have a big dinner together and after that we in watch a movie in a cinema and go shopping on the shopping mall together.

✓ Well, on my birthday I usually invite my friends to a shopping mall and we can have a big dinner together and after that we watch a movie in a cinema and go shopping in the shopping mall together.

介词使用错误，应该用on my birthday，watch前不需要in，go shopping后应使用in the shopping mall。

× When I was a kid, in my birthday, my friend my friend gave me some gift and my parents cooked me a meal, a big meal and I invited my friend to my home and we have a big dinner together umm and we also have a cake together.

✓ When I was a kid, on my birthday, my friends gave me some gifts and my parents cooked me a meal, a big meal, and I invited my friends to my home and we had a big dinner together and we also had a cake together.

birthday前应使用介词on，friend应使用复数friends，gift应使用复数gifts，have应改为过去时had以符合时间背景。

× When I was a kid, in my birthday, my friend my friend gave me some gift and my parents cooked me a meal, a big meal and I invited my friend to my home and we have a big dinner together umm and we also have a cake together.

✓ When I was a kid, on my birthday, my friends gave me some gifts and my parents cooked me a meal, a big meal, and I invited my friends to my home and we had a big dinner together and we also had a cake together.

描述过去的事情，动词应使用过去时态，如gave, cooked, invited, had。

× When I was a kid, in my birthday, my friend my friend gave me some gift and my parents cooked me a meal, a big meal and I invited my friend to my home and we have a big dinner together umm and we also have a cake together.

✓ When I was a kid, on my birthday, my friends gave me some gifts and my parents cooked me a meal, a big meal, and I invited my friends to my home and we had a big dinner together and we also had a cake together.

birthday前应使用介词on，而非in。

× It's very happy.

✓ It was very happy.

happy是形容词，不能用来描述事情的状态，应该用形容词happy的副词形式happily或者改为It was a very happy time。这里根据上下文改为It was very happy更合适。

× It's very happy.

✓ It was very happy.

句子描述过去的情景，动词时态应为过去时was，且happy作为形容词不能直接修饰it，建议改为It was a very happy time。

× Yes, I think birthday is very important in my life because I think it's a symbol of grow up and it's a new start of new age and I think spending time with my family and friends are very happy.

✓ Yes, I think birthdays are very important in my life because I think they're a symbol of growing up and a new start of a new age, and I think spending time with my family and friends is very happy.

birthday应使用复数birthdays，符号grow up应改为动名词形式growing up，spending time作为主语应使用单数动词is。

× Yes, I think birthday is very important in my life because I think it's a symbol of grow up and it's a new start of new age and I think spending time with my family and friends are very happy.

✓ Yes, I think birthdays are very important in my life because I think they're a symbol of growing up and a new start of a new age, and I think spending time with my family and friends is very enjoyable.

happy是形容词，不能用来描述动作或状态，应该用副词或其他形容词如enjoyable来表达愉快的感觉。

× So I am excited to expect my birthday for all the year.

✓ So I am excited to expect my birthday all year.

for all the year用法不当，应该用all year表示整年。

× Well, in Chinese culture, a parent's birthday is a very important part and it shows our honor and respect of our family.

✓ Well, in Chinese culture, a parent's birthday is a very important part and it shows our honor and respect for our family.

respect后应接介词for而非of。

× Besides, elderly people's birthday is very important especially on this sixty 2068.

✓ Besides, elderly people's birthdays are very important especially on their sixtieth birthday.

birthday应使用复数birthdays，动词is应改为are，表达“六十岁生日”应使用sixtieth birthday。