Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for better fluency. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy, for example, 'cut the cakes and the gifts' is unclear and redundant. Try to be more precise and concise.

Ejemplo: On my birthday, I usually spend time with my family in the morning by visiting my grandparents' house to celebrate together. Later in the evening, I hang out with my friends, and we enjoy cutting the cake and exchanging gifts.

Sugerencia: Your answer provides relevant details but contains some hesitations and unclear phrases like 'we could so that we could celebrate it together.' Try to avoid filler words such as 'uh' and 'umm' and ensure your sentences are complete and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Ejemplo: When I was young, my parents organized large birthday gatherings by inviting my school friends and close relatives so that we could celebrate together. Moreover, my room was beautifully decorated with balloons and streamers, which made the celebrations very enjoyable.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and ends abruptly. Avoid repeating words like 'a family or family members.' Also, try to complete your thoughts fully and use linking words to contrast your past and present feelings clearly.

Ejemplo: When I was younger, I looked forward to big birthday parties every year. However, now that I have grown up, I prefer to spend the day quietly with a few close friends or family members because it feels more meaningful and personal.

Sugerencia: Your answer is honest but lacks confidence and clarity. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure. Try to give a more direct answer with clear reasoning and use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

Ejemplo: Although I am not very familiar with Chinese traditions, I believe that important figures such as the president or the Prime Minister have their birthdays celebrated. Generally, birthdays of significant leaders are considered important occasions.

× I spend my birthday with my friends and families.

✓ I spend my birthday with my friends and family.

The word 'family' is usually treated as a singular collective noun when referring to a group of relatives. Using 'families' implies multiple separate family units, which is incorrect in this context. Therefore, 'family' should be used instead of 'families'.

× In the early mornings we visit our grandparents house and celebrate my birthday with them.

✓ In the early mornings we visit our grandparents' house and celebrate my birthday with them.

The phrase 'grandparents house' lacks the possessive apostrophe. It should be 'grandparents' house' to indicate that the house belongs to the grandparents.

× In the evening I hang out with my friends and usually I, uh, give them a party or we cut the cakes and the gifts and they give me gifts.

✓ In the evening I hang out with my friends and usually I, uh, give them a party or we cut the cake and the gifts and they give me gifts.

The word 'cakes' is plural, but usually for a birthday there is one cake. Therefore, 'cake' should be singular here.

× They used to invite all of my school friends and my close relatives and, uh, we could so that we could celebrate it together.

✓ They used to invite all of my school friends and my close relatives so that we could celebrate it together.

The phrase 'and, uh, we could so that we could' is redundant and incorrect. The correct structure is to use 'so that we could' to express purpose without the extra 'and, uh, we could'.

× Umm, my room was beautifully decorated with balloons and steamers.

✓ Umm, my room was beautifully decorated with balloons and streamers.

The word 'steamers' is incorrect; the correct word is 'streamers' which are decorative strips used for decoration.

× I prefer to spend the day quietly with a few friends or a family or family members because it feels more meaningful and.

✓ I prefer to spend the day quietly with a few friends or family members because it feels more meaningful.

The phrase 'a family or family members' is awkward and incorrect. 'Family' is a collective noun and does not need an article here. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' The corrected sentence removes the redundant phrase and completes the thought properly.

× But uh, from all the information I know, I think the birthday of the president or the Prime Minister, they have has to be celebrated.

✓ But uh, from all the information I know, I think the birthday of the president or the Prime Minister has to be celebrated.

The phrase 'they have has to be celebrated' is incorrect. The subject is singular ('birthday'), so the verb should be 'has to be celebrated' without 'they have.' The pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and causes subject-verb disagreement.