Birthday— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is quite long and has some grammatical errors. Try to keep your response within 5 sentences, use correct verb tenses, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words like 'then' or 'after that' to make your answer coherent. For example, say 'I usually get up early, then visit the temple to pray. After that, I celebrate with my family and friends by having a party and distributing sweets.'

Ejemplo: On my birthday, I usually get up early and visit the temple to pray. Then, I spend time with my family and friends. We celebrate by having a small party, and I like to distribute candies and pastries among them.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and has grammatical mistakes. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. For example, 'When I was young, I used to distribute candies to my friends. Then, I went to school wearing my uniform. I really enjoyed my birthday and thanked God for it.'

Ejemplo: When I was young, I used to distribute candies to my friends on my birthday. After that, I went to school in my uniform. I always enjoyed celebrating my birthday and felt grateful to God.

Sugerencia: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer structure and grammar. Start with a direct answer, then explain with reasons using linking words like 'because' and 'so'. For example, 'Yes, I think it is important to celebrate birthdays because they happen only once a year. Also, it is a special day to remember your birth and gain more life experience. Therefore, I like to celebrate with my family and friends.'

Ejemplo: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate birthdays because they come only once a year. It is a special day to remember when you were born and to appreciate another year of life. So, I usually celebrate with my family and friends.

Sugerencia: Your answer contains factual errors and unclear sentences. Please ensure your information is correct and your sentences are clear. Also, use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'In China, I think the most important birthday to celebrate is that of the President because he is the country's leader. People respect him and celebrate his birthday to show their support.'

Ejemplo: In China, I think the most important birthday to celebrate is the President's because he is the leader of the country. People respect him and celebrate his birthday to show their support and loyalty.

× If I talk about my birthday, firstly I get up early in the morning and after that I went at temple to taking the praise of my God and I spend my birthday with their friends and family member to celebrate my birthday in the form of party and I also like to distribute candies and pastries in between my friends and family members.

✓ If I talk about my birthday, firstly I get up early in the morning and after that I go to the temple to take the praise of my God and I spend my birthday with my friends and family members to celebrate my birthday in the form of a party and I also like to distribute candies and pastries among my friends and family members.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Went' should be 'go' to maintain present tense consistency. 'To taking' is incorrect; it should be 'to take' as the infinitive form after 'to'. 'Their friends and family member' is incorrect; it should be 'my friends and family members' to match the subject. 'In between' should be 'among' when referring to distribution within a group. Also, 'in the form of party' needs an article 'a' before 'party'. These corrections ensure proper tense usage and correct prepositions and articles.

× If I talk about the my youngest man, how I spend my birthday, firstly I distribute candies in between my friends and I went school in my formal uniform and I also like my birthday at that a very lot and I am very praised from God.

✓ If I talk about my younger days, how I spent my birthday, firstly I distributed candies among my friends and I went to school in my formal uniform and I also liked my birthday very much and I was very grateful to God.

The sentence has tense inconsistencies and incorrect expressions. 'Youngest man' is unclear; 'younger days' or 'when I was young' is better. 'Spend' should be past tense 'spent' to match the past context. 'Distribute' should be 'distributed' for past tense. 'In between' should be 'among'. 'Went school' needs the preposition 'to' as 'went to school'. 'I also like my birthday at that a very lot' is incorrect; it should be 'I also liked my birthday very much'. 'I am very praised from God' is incorrect; it should be 'I was very grateful to God' to express thankfulness.

× Yes, it's very important to celebrate birthday because birthdays came at the once time in a year. And if we spend to sell spend time to celebrate the birthday, it is very important because at that day you born and you get a more one year experience in your whole life and you should celebrate your birthday with the family of us and friends.

✓ Yes, it's very important to celebrate birthdays because they come only once a year. And if we spend time to celebrate the birthday, it is very important because on that day you were born and you gain one more year of experience in your life and you should celebrate your birthday with your family and friends.

The sentence has modal and tense errors. 'Birthdays came at the once time' should be 'birthdays come only once a year' to express habitual present. 'Spend to sell spend time' is incorrect; it should be 'spend time'. 'At that day you born' should be 'on that day you were born' using past tense and correct preposition. 'You get a more one year experience' should be 'you gain one more year of experience'. 'Family of us' is incorrect; it should be 'your family'. These corrections improve modal verb usage, tense, and prepositions.

× Well, if I talk about the China and I think that the Kim Jong's birthday is most important because he's the president of China and that's why most other people are getting placed from them and his word is very popular. His word is came at phone number and that's why all of the China members are celebrated his birthday to get a place from God.

✓ Well, if I talk about China, I think that Kim Jong's birthday is the most important because he's the president of China and that's why most other people respect him and his word is very popular. His word is well known and that's why all the people of China celebrate his birthday to seek blessings from God.

The sentence has pronoun and vocabulary errors. 'The China' should be 'China' without 'the'. 'Most other people are getting placed from them' is unclear; it should be 'most other people respect him'. 'His word is came at phone number' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'His word is well known'. 'All of the China members' should be 'all the people of China'. 'Are celebrated' should be 'celebrate' to match subject-verb agreement. 'To get a place from God' is better expressed as 'to seek blessings from God'. These corrections fix pronoun misuse and improve clarity.