Perfume— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

Ejemplo: Yes, I like perfume because it boosts my confidence and makes me feel more attractive. For example, I often wear a floral scent that reminds me of special occasions. Additionally, perfumes come in many varieties, each with unique fragrances that I enjoy.

Sugerencia: Your answer addresses the question but is repetitive and lacks clear linking words. Try to organise your ideas logically and use linking words to connect your points. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases.

Ejemplo: Yes, I use perfume daily because it helps me create a positive impression on others. Moreover, there are many fragrances available, which I find enjoyable. Using perfume also boosts my confidence and makes me feel more attractive.

Sugerencia: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, with grammatical mistakes and vague expressions. Focus on giving a clear topic sentence, followed by specific reasons with linking words. Avoid unfinished sentences and be precise.

Ejemplo: Yes, I would buy perfume as a gift because it is a convenient choice when I am unsure of someone's preferences. However, I consider factors such as the fragrance and my budget before purchasing, since perfumes can be expensive.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but contains some repetition and minor grammatical errors. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid repeating phrases. Also, try to be more concise and precise.

Ejemplo: Yes, perfumes are generally expensive. Although there are cheaper counterfeit perfumes available, they usually lack a pleasant or long-lasting fragrance. Genuine perfumes, on the other hand, tend to be costly worldwide due to their quality.

× There are variety kinds of perfume.

✓ There are various kinds of perfume.

The phrase 'variety kinds' is incorrect because 'variety' should be followed by 'of' and an uncountable or plural noun. The correct phrase is 'various kinds' or 'a variety of kinds'. Here, 'various kinds' is more appropriate to indicate multiple types of perfume.

× Most of them have a best fragrance.

✓ Most of them have the best fragrance.

The adjective 'best' is a superlative and requires the definite article 'the' before it. Saying 'a best' is incorrect because 'best' implies the highest degree and is unique, so it must be preceded by 'the'.

× They are really enjoyable and and.

✓ They are really enjoyable.

The sentence ends with an incomplete phrase 'and and' which is a repetition and does not complete the thought. Removing the extra 'and' and ending the sentence properly improves clarity and correctness.

× they have variety kinds of fragrances and they are really enjoyable and they raise my confidence when I use them and they provide a self attraction.

✓ They have various kinds of fragrances, and they are really enjoyable; they raise my confidence when I use them and provide self-attraction.

Again, 'variety kinds' is incorrect; 'various kinds' or 'a variety of kinds' is correct. Also, the sentence is long and needs proper punctuation for clarity. 'Self attraction' should be hyphenated as 'self-attraction' to form a compound noun.

× Yes, it's really convenient for me to buy it when I don't know about people's favorite and they try that and they taste.

✓ Yes, it's really convenient for me to buy it when I don't know about people's favourites and they try and test it.

The phrase 'people's favorite' should be plural 'favourites' to match 'people'. Also, 'they try that and they taste' is awkward; 'try and test it' is more natural. Pronoun 'that' is vague; 'it' refers clearly to perfume.

× But I have to consider lots of thing, for instance the the fragrance of this perfume and the budget and the like, because most of perfume are really.

✓ But I have to consider lots of things, for instance the fragrance of this perfume, the budget, and the like, because most perfumes are really expensive.

'Lots of thing' should be plural 'lots of things'. 'Most of perfume' is incorrect; it should be 'most perfumes' or 'most of the perfumes'. The sentence was incomplete; adding 'expensive' completes the thought.

× There are right kinds of fake perfume available and they are not really expensive, but they don't have a good have a good fragrance and their fragrances are not really long lasting.

✓ There are some kinds of fake perfume available, and they are not really expensive, but they don't have a good fragrance and their fragrances are not really long-lasting.

'Right kinds' is incorrect; 'some kinds' or 'certain kinds' is appropriate. The phrase 'have a good have a good fragrance' is repetitive; it should be 'have a good fragrance'. 'Long lasting' should be hyphenated as 'long-lasting' when used as an adjective.

× But most of genuine perfume are really expensive around the world.

✓ But most genuine perfumes are really expensive around the world.

'Most of genuine perfume' is incorrect; it should be 'most genuine perfumes' without 'of' because 'most' can be used directly with plural countable nouns. Also, 'perfume' should be plural to match 'most'.