Perfume— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word errors (e.g., 'casual' → 'casual occasions', 'at me work' → 'at work', 'recent scent' → 'a light/recent scent' or name the scent).

Ejemplo: I usually wear perfume only on special occasions, such as weddings and family parties. For everyday life, I avoid strong fragrances because I prefer subtle, natural smells; for example, I like light floral scents for celebrations.

Sugerencia: This answer is clear and polite but can be tightened and polished. Use one topic sentence then one specific reason with a linking word (because/so). Correct word choice: 'natural fragrance' is fine, but avoid 'make trouble'—say 'bother others'.

Ejemplo: No, I don’t wear perfume daily; I prefer natural scents instead because strong fragrances can bother colleagues at work. Therefore I only apply perfume for special events.

Sugerencia: Organise the response: give a clear opinion first (yes/no), then explain with one reason and an example. Fix grammar and vocabulary: 'one of my friend' → 'a friend', 'would never be a best idea' → 'is not a good idea', 'personal choice' → 'a personal choice', 'Everyone has different tastes in scent'.

Ejemplo: I would usually avoid buying perfume as a gift because scent is a very personal choice; for example, a friend once received a perfume she disliked. Instead, I prefer safe options like chocolates or handbags.

Sugerencia: Clarify and correct inaccuracies (it doesn’t 'depend on the weather' — use 'depending on the brand' or 'quality'). Provide a topic sentence, then contrast expensive and affordable options with linking words. Use realistic brand examples and correct phrasing ('big brands like Chanel or Dior', not 'Sephora' which is a retailer).

Ejemplo: I think perfumes can be expensive, especially designer brands like Chanel or Dior. However, there are also affordable options from drugstore brands, so everyone can find something within their budget.

× I love to wear perfume only on special occasions such as weddings, parties or any other family events.

✓ I love to wear perfume only on special occasions such as weddings, parties, or other family events.

Comma missing before coordinating conjunction in a list and 'any other' is unnecessary; use parallel nouns. Also add Oxford comma for clarity.

× However, I don't wear perfumes on casual such as at me work or at home.

✓ However, I don't wear perfume on casual occasions such as at my work or at home.

Missing noun 'occasions' after 'casual'; 'me' is incorrect pronoun form, should be 'my'; 'perfume' is uncountable here so use singular.

× I like the recent scent of the perfume.

✓ I like the recent scent of the perfume.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'recent' is odd for scent; consider 'the latest scent' or 'the new scent' if referring to a new fragrance.

× As I mentioned earlier, I prefer to wear perfume only on special occasions such as parties or weddings.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I prefer to wear perfume only on special occasions such as parties or weddings.

Sentence is correct; pronoun use is appropriate. No change needed.

× In my daily life, I would rather prefer the natural fragrance.

✓ In my daily life, I would rather have a natural fragrance.

'Would rather' should be followed by a base verb or be used without 'prefer' (redundant). Use 'have a natural fragrance' or 'prefer a natural scent.'

× I do not want to make trouble for some other people by using strong perfume, especially at work.

✓ I do not want to cause trouble for other people by using strong perfume, especially at work.

Use 'cause trouble for' rather than 'make trouble for'; 'some other people' is awkward—'other people' is sufficient.

× When I was little, one of my friend told me that perfume would never be a best idea to as a gift.

✓ When I was little, one of my friends told me that perfume would never be the best idea as a gift.

'One of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' for plural; 'a best idea' is incorrect article and adjective order—use 'the best idea' or 'a good idea'; remove extra 'to'.

× There could be a reason behind that is the personal choice.

✓ The reason behind that could be personal choice.

Original is ungrammatical due to redundant 'that is'; restructure to 'The reason behind that could be personal choice' or 'That could be because of personal choice.'

× Every personal love different sense of perfume so it I would rather choose anything else such as handbags, chocolate.

✓ Every person loves a different scent of perfume, so I would rather choose something else such as handbags or chocolate.

Multiple errors: 'Every personal' should be 'Every person'; 'love' needs third-person singular 'loves' (subject-verb agreement); 'sense' should be 'scent'; extra 'it' is extraneous; 'anything else' is better as 'something else'; 'chocolate' should be plural or uncountable—here 'chocolates' or 'chocolate' are acceptable; add 'or' between items.

× Definitely. I suppose that not every perfume is cheap.

✓ Definitely. I suppose that not every perfume is cheap.

This sentence is acceptable; tense and verb use are correct.

× It depends on the weather which brand you are buying.

✓ It depends on where and which brand you are buying.

Original 'depends on the weather' is odd in this context; likely intended 'depends on where' or 'depends on the occasion' and 'which brand you are buying' should be linked. If weather truly intended, rephrase 'It depends on the weather which brand you buy.'

× For example if you are buying big brands such as Gas Gas and Sephora.

✓ For example, if you are buying big brands such as Gucci and Sephora, the price will be higher.

Fragment lacking main clause. Add result clause or integrate into previous sentence. Also 'Gas Gas' seems incorrect brand—maybe 'Gucci'. Add comma after 'For example.'

× However, on the other hand, you can still buy the cheap brands such as Frogs, so it could be manageable for everyone.

✓ However, you can still buy cheap brands, such as perfumes from lower-cost makers, so it can be manageable for everyone.

'However' and 'on the other hand' are redundant together; 'the cheap brands such as Frogs'—'Frogs' seems wrong; avoid definite article before 'cheap brands'; 'it could be manageable' better as 'so it can be manageable.'