Emails— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Your answer is clear and relevant, but to improve, try to avoid minor grammatical errors and use more precise vocabulary. For example, instead of 'various real life purpose', say 'various real-life purposes'. Also, try to add linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Ejemplo: Definitely, I often use emails for my office work because it is an official way to send messages or applications to higher authorities. Furthermore, emails serve various real-life purposes, such as raising complaints with companies.

Sugerencia: Your answer addresses the question but could be improved by adding linking words and correcting grammar. For instance, say 'I usually send emails to my higher authorities for complaints and applications. Recently, I raised a concern about technical issues in various assistive technologies that I use for children with special needs.' Also, try to expand your answer slightly to make it more natural and effective.

Ejemplo: I usually send emails to my higher authorities for complaints and applications. For example, recently I raised a concern about technical issues in the assistive technologies I use to support children with special needs.

Sugerencia: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Instead of 'more safer', use 'safer'. Also, clarify your points with linking words and more specific details. For example, explain why emails are popular and safer.

Ejemplo: Definitely, email is one of the official ways to communicate with others in China. Moreover, it is safer and widely used among citizens because it provides a formal and reliable method of communication.

Sugerencia: Your answer is well-structured and relevant. To improve, try to use smoother linking phrases and correct minor grammatical issues. For example, say 'various other platforms are readily available, through which we can communicate effectively'. Also, you could add a concluding sentence to strengthen your opinion.

Ejemplo: In my opinion, the popularity of email will decline in the future because various other platforms, such as Telegram, WhatsApp, and Instagram, are readily available and allow us to communicate more effectively. Therefore, people may prefer these instant messaging apps over email.

× Moreover, it can be used in various real life purpose such as raising a complaint in any company.

✓ Moreover, it can be used for various real-life purposes such as raising a complaint in any company.

The word 'purpose' is countable here and should be plural 'purposes' when preceded by 'various'. Also, 'in' should be replaced by 'for' to correctly express the intended meaning. Additionally, 'real life' should be hyphenated as 'real-life' when used as an adjective.

× Recently I raised a concern about technical issue in various assistive technology that I use for children with special needs.

✓ Recently I raised a concern about technical issues in various assistive technologies that I use for children with special needs.

The noun 'issue' should be plural 'issues' because it refers to multiple problems. Similarly, 'technology' should be plural 'technologies' as it refers to different types of assistive technology. Also, the preposition 'in' is correct here as it indicates the area of concern.

× Moreover, it is more safer and widely used in China among citizens.

✓ Moreover, it is safer and more widely used in China among citizens.

The word 'safer' is already a comparative adjective, so 'more' should not be used before it. The correct form is 'safer'. For 'widely used', 'more' is correctly used to form the comparative adverb 'more widely'.

× ...various other platforms are readily available to us which through which we can communicate effectively with others...

✓ ...various other platforms are readily available to us through which we can communicate effectively with others...

The phrase 'which through which' is redundant. The correct preposition is 'through which' to indicate the means of communication.