Emails— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid filler words (uh, um) and repetition, and give one or two specific reasons with correct grammar and vocabulary. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I don't send emails very often; I only use them when my school asks me to. For example, my teachers or the vice-principal sometimes ask for an email so there is a written record of important information. Otherwise I use messaging apps for quick communication.

Sugerencia: Provide a direct topic sentence and then give one clear, specific example. Improve grammar (tense and articles) and use linking words to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repeating the same idea.

Ejemplo: I usually send emails to teachers and the principal when I need to submit formal information. For instance, I email the principal to report attendance issues because an email provides an official record.

Sugerencia: Give a clear statement and complete the comparison. Avoid hesitations and finish your thought. Use specific examples and correct vocabulary (e.g., "foreign countries" not "foreigner"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a linking word like "however."

Ejemplo: In my experience, email is common in international schools, but in China most people prefer messaging apps like WeChat. However, in businesses and universities emails are still used for formal communication.

Sugerencia: Answer directly with a prediction, give a clear reason and a succinct example. Remove fillers and tighten grammar (e.g., "less useful" vs "less popular"). Use linking words like "because" and limit to 2–3 sentences.

Ejemplo: I think emails will become less popular in daily life because messaging apps like WeChat are faster and more convenient. For example, many people prefer instant messages for quick requests, while email remains for formal or official matters.

× To be honest, I sometimes send the e-mail, it's just because, uh, the school requires, uh, sometimes, uh, my teachers, uh, or my secondary director, they want me to send e-mail.

✓ To be honest, I sometimes send emails because the school requires them; sometimes my teachers or my vice-principal want me to send emails.

The original uses 'the e-mail' and 'send e-mail' inconsistently. Use the plural 'emails' for general occurrences (quantifier issue). Also 'secondary director' is unusual; 'vice-principal' is clearer. Combine clauses with proper punctuation to avoid comma splices.

× So it, it can be as a hard evidence, uh, to show, uh, some of the, uh, crucial informations.

✓ So it can serve as hard evidence to show some crucial information.

'Hard evidence' is uncountable, so 'a hard evidence' is incorrect (singular/plural and article error). 'Informations' is incorrect plural; 'information' is uncountable. The sentence structure is also simplified to be natural.

× As I mentioned, I often send information to the teachers and also the principal as well because they wanted to have a hard evidence and also that is more in a formal way to release or to send the information to them.

✓ As I mentioned, I often send information to the teachers and the principal because they want hard evidence, and it is a more formal way to send information to them.

The original mixes present 'often send' with past 'wanted'; maintain present tense 'want' to match habitual action. 'A hard evidence' is incorrect (use 'hard evidence' without article). 'Release' is awkward here; use 'send'.

× Well, I think, uh, it's actually popular in the International School where I stay.

✓ Well, I think it's actually popular at the international school where I study.

Use 'at' for location and 'study' instead of 'stay' to indicate attending a school (preposition and verb choice). 'International School' need not be capitalized unless it's the school's proper name (article/capitalization note).

× Uh, however, I do think that it's more popular, uh, in foreigner because, uh, they usually, uh, communicate, uh, using e-mail rather than using other apps.

✓ However, I think it's more popular among foreigners because they usually communicate using email rather than other apps.

'In foreigner' is incorrect; use 'among foreigners' to indicate a group (preposition/pronoun/phrase). 'Using e-mail' is fine but 'email' (one word) is more common. Removed redundant 'using'.

× But in China we usually use.

✓ But in China we usually use messaging apps like WeChat.

The original is a sentence fragment with no verb complement. Provide the missing object to complete the sentence and make the meaning clear.

× Well, from my perspective, I think, uh, if we consider from the long term, uh, effects, then, uh, e-mail will be less useful because it's actually, uh, less convenient than using the WeChat, because if you use WeChat, then it's more easily, uh, if you can, you want them to send one e-mail, one message as you can.

✓ From my perspective, in the long term email will be less useful because it is less convenient than WeChat; with WeChat it is easier to send a quick message when you want someone to receive it.

The original has awkward phrasing and tense is acceptable (future 'will be'). Improve sentence structure for clarity: remove filler words, correct 'the WeChat' to 'WeChat' (no article), use 'easier' not 'more easily' when describing comparative adjective, and clarify the final clause to express the idea of sending quick messages.