Emails— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases like “I'm” and “so.” Also correct collocation: say “clinical placement” or “work” instead of “clinical employment.”

Ejemplo: Yes, I send emails regularly. For example, as a student I email professors about assignments and arrange clinical placements, so email is an important tool for managing my studies.

Sugerencia: Give a direct topic sentence and clearer, more specific supporting details. Reduce hesitations and use linking words (for example, besides, or also). Fix grammar and prepositions (e.g., “a question to my professor” and “congratulatory emails to friends”).

Ejemplo: I usually send emails when I need to ask a question or make arrangements. For example, I email professors with questions about assignments and sometimes send congratulatory emails to friends when they achieve something.

Sugerencia: Begin with a clear statement and support it with concise, specific reasons. Avoid repetition and use a linking phrase like “because” or “mainly because.” Use correct grammar: “email is used” or “people rarely use email.”

Ejemplo: Not really — email is used rarely in China because people mainly use WeChat for messages; it is faster and more convenient for everyday communication.

Sugerencia: State your position clearly, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Avoid filler words and incorrect phrasing like “less popular” without subject. Use examples of alternatives (e.g., messaging apps, collaboration tools).

Ejemplo: I think emails will become less popular in the future because people prefer instant messaging and collaborative platforms, which are faster and notify users immediately, so emails may feel too slow for everyday communication.

× Yes, I often send emails. So I'm currently I'm a student so I need to send e-mail for my classwork and clinical employment. So it is an important skill for me to manage in my school.

✓ Yes, I often send emails. I'm currently a student, so I need to send emails for my classwork and clinical placements. Therefore, it is an important skill to manage at school.

Original contains redundant 'I'm' ('I'm currently I'm a student'), awkward phrasing ('send e-mail for my classwork and clinical employment'), and repeated 'so'. These are sentence structure issues. Suggestions: remove redundancy, use plural 'emails' consistently, replace 'clinical employment' with 'clinical placements' or 'clinical work' for clarity, and combine clauses with appropriate connectors (use commas and transition words).

× Well, so, uh, it depends. So if I have specific question on my professor or the school staff to show, I will send emails and sometimes I will send like congratulations e-mail to my.

✓ Well, it depends. If I have a specific question for my professor or a member of the school staff, I will send an email, and sometimes I send congratulatory emails to my friends.

Problems: missing articles ('a specific question'), wrong preposition ('on my professor' -> 'for my professor'), incomplete object at the end ('to my.'). These are incorrect pronoun and sentence structure uses. Suggestions: include necessary articles, use 'for' with 'question', complete the object (e.g., 'friends' or 'classmates'), and use 'congratulatory emails' for natural phrasing.

× No, obviously send e-mail is very rarely in China because we usually use an app called WeChat.

✓ No. Obviously, sending emails is very rare in China because we usually use an app called WeChat.

Original uses incorrect verb form and word order ('send e-mail is very rarely') causing subject-verb agreement and sentence structure errors. Use the gerund 'sending' as the subject and the adjective 'rare' (not adverb 'rarely') to describe frequency. Also plural 'emails' is more natural.

× So we usually send, we usually send text through that app and it's more efficient than e-mail.

✓ We usually send text messages through that app, and it's more efficient than email.

Redundant repetition 'we usually send, we usually send' and awkward phrase 'text' instead of 'text messages'. Clean up by removing repetition and using concise phrasing. Use 'email' (no hyphen) for consistency.

× In my opinion, I think there will be less popular in the future because I think there may be have some more efficient way to contact with others.

✓ In my opinion, I think email will become less popular in the future because there may be more efficient ways to contact others.

Errors: 'there will be less popular' is incorrect future structure; missing noun subject ('email' as subject), and 'may be have' is ungrammatical. Also 'contact with others' should be 'contact others'. Suggestions: specify the subject ('email'), use 'become less popular', use 'may be' without extra 'have', and pluralize 'ways' to match 'more efficient'.

× So uh, e-mail. Sometimes people cannot see e-mail so and it's not so efficient.

✓ Sometimes people do not see their emails, so email is not very efficient.

Original fragments ('So uh, e-mail.') and awkward connectors ('cannot see e-mail so and') create sentence structure problems. Suggest: combine fragments into a full sentence, use appropriate auxiliary 'do not', use possessive 'their emails' or 'emails', and replace colloquial 'so' with 'so email is not very efficient' for clarity.