Talents— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: 回答时时态使用不准确，且句子结构较为简单，表达不够自然。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复表达，并使用更丰富的词汇和句型。

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. Since I was six years old, I have loved listening to stories. As I grew older, I began writing my own scripts and stories, which many people around me found very interesting.

Sugerencia: 回答内容表达混乱，语法错误较多，且缺乏逻辑连贯性。建议理清思路，使用正确的语法结构，并用连接词使回答更连贯。

Ejemplo: I actually started mastering this talent when I was about six years old. While my friends enjoyed fairy tales and folk tales, I preferred writing my own stories, often focusing on romantic themes.

Sugerencia: 回答中有重复和表达不清的问题，专业名称表达不准确。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，并准确使用专业词汇。

Ejemplo: Yes, definitely. Since my major is Drama, Cinema, and Television Literature, writing interesting scripts is part of my work. Being able to write good stories will greatly benefit my future career.

Sugerencia: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的时态和句型，明确表达因果关系，使回答更自然流畅。

Ejemplo: Yes, I think my mother has a similar talent. She is a primary school Chinese teacher and often told me interesting stories like fairy tales and folk tales, which helped me improve my writing skills.

× When I was just a six year old child, I really love listening to the stories.

✓ When I was just a six-year-old child, I really loved listening to stories.

这里描述的是过去的情况，动词时态应使用过去式。'love' 应改为 'loved'。另外，'six year old' 应加连字符，变成 'six-year-old'。

× I really love listening to the stories.

✓ I really loved listening to stories.

'stories' 前不需要定冠词 'the'，因为这里指的是泛指的故事。

× So as I grew up I started to write my own scripts and interesting stories.

✓ So as I grew up, I started to write my own scripts and interesting stories.

句子中缺少逗号，影响句子结构的清晰。

× All the people around me told me that they really love my stories because they are interesting.

✓ All the people around me told me that they really loved my stories because they were interesting.

主句是过去时，宾语从句的动词也应使用过去时态，保持时态一致。

× Well, actually it Mars to the Y was just a six year old.

✓ Well, actually, when I was just a six-year-old.

原句结构混乱，无法理解。应改为清晰表达时间状语的句子。

× I still remember at that time my friend around may interest or were interested in the different stories like fairy tales and folk tales and so on.

✓ I still remember at that time my friends around me were interested in different stories like fairy tales and folk tales and so on.

'friend' 应为复数 'friends'，'may interest' 应为 'me'，且动词时态应为过去时 'were interested'。

× But As for me, I started my writing my own stories like some romantic loving.

✓ But as for me, I started writing my own stories, like some romantic love stories.

'started my writing' 结构错误，应为 'started writing'。'romantic loving' 不合适，应改为 'romantic love stories'。

× Yes, of course, as I said, my major is called Drama cinema, television, literature, so it is one of my duties to write some interesting scripts which can be adapted into films or salaries.

✓ Yes, of course, as I said, my major is called Drama, Cinema, Television, and Literature, so it is one of my duties to write some interesting scripts which can be adapted into films or series.

专业名称应分开并正确书写，'salaries' 应为 'series'，意思是电视剧系列。

× So if if I could write some interesting stories, it could help me a lot in my future.

✓ So if I can write some interesting stories, it will help me a lot in my future.

条件句中应使用现在时 'can' 表示将来可能性，主句用将来时 'will help'。

× Well, maybe actually my mom is a Chinese teacher in primary school, so when I will search how she always told me some interesting stories like fairy tales and folk tales and so on.

✓ Well, maybe actually my mom is a Chinese teacher in primary school, so when I was young, she always told me some interesting stories like fairy tales and folk tales and so on.

'when I will search how' 语法错误，应改为 'when I was young'，表示过去时间。

× So maybe at that time she helped me to improve my writing skills.

✓ So maybe at that time, she helped me improve my writing skills.

'helped me to improve' 中 'to' 可省略，且句中应加逗号使句子更通顺。