Part 1
Examinador
Do you have a talent or something you are good at?
Candidato
Yes, with trials and errors. I have taught myself perfect pitch, which is like an ability to immediately identify which tone it is, especially on the piano.
Examinador
Was it mastered recently or when you were young?
Candidato
I mastered Perfect Picture when I was like 12. At the time I was really passionate about music. I said a name from to Completely Mastery for like 6 months or maybe 3/4 of a year. I think it started off as a relative pitch and then evolved into perfect pitch.
Examinador
Do you think your talent can be useful for your future work? Why?
Candidato
Not necessarily I think my future works deals with something like teaching or anything in the real field of education, but for perfect pitch can help me in music, which in turn helps me with my relationship.
Examinador
Do you think anyone in your family has the same talent?
Candidato
Not at all, and well, no one in my family specializes in music the way I do. My dad doesn't know to play some guitar but he doesn't know any music theory. MI perfect pictures. Also really rare it occurs even in musicians. Only about one in a 10 thousands case I think.
Do you have a talent or something you are good at?
Puntuación: 70.0Sugerencia: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Hãy tránh dùng cụm từ không chính xác như "with trials and errors" và giải thích khái niệm "perfect pitch" một cách ngắn gọn, dễ hiểu hơn. Ngoài ra, nên dùng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.
Ejemplo: Yes, I have a special talent. I taught myself perfect pitch, which means I can instantly recognize musical notes, especially when I play the piano.
Was it mastered recently or when you were young?
Puntuación: 60.0Sugerencia: Bạn cần chú ý phát âm và sử dụng từ đúng, ví dụ "Perfect Picture" nên là "perfect pitch". Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh những phần không rõ nghĩa như "I said a name from to Completely Mastery". Hãy trình bày mạch lạc, có cấu trúc rõ ràng với câu chủ đề và câu bổ trợ.
Ejemplo: I mastered perfect pitch when I was about 12 years old. I was very passionate about music then, and after practicing for several months, my relative pitch developed into perfect pitch.
Do you think your talent can be useful for your future work? Why?
Puntuación: 65.0Sugerencia: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như thiếu mạo từ và chia động từ. Bạn nên dùng liên từ để kết nối ý và giải thích rõ hơn về cách tài năng của bạn có thể ảnh hưởng đến công việc tương lai.
Ejemplo: I don't think my talent will be directly useful in my future job because I want to work in education. However, having perfect pitch helps me enjoy music more, which improves my social relationships.
Do you think anyone in your family has the same talent?
Puntuación: 60.0Sugerencia: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và phát âm chính xác, ví dụ "MI perfect pictures" nên là "My perfect pitch". Câu trả lời nên mạch lạc, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ phù hợp. Hãy trình bày ý rõ ràng, có liên kết giữa các câu.
Ejemplo: No one in my family has the same talent as me. My dad can play some guitar but he doesn't know music theory. Perfect pitch is very rare, even among musicians; I think it happens in only one out of ten thousand people.
× Yes, with trials and errors.
✓ Yes, with trial and error.
The phrase 'trial and error' is an idiomatic expression and should be singular and uncountable, not plural 'trials and errors'.
× I have taught myself perfect pitch, which is like an ability to immediately identify which tone it is, especially on the piano.
✓ I have taught myself perfect pitch, which is the ability to immediately identify which tone it is, especially on the piano.
The phrase 'like an ability' is incorrect here; 'the ability' is more appropriate to define the skill.
× I mastered Perfect Picture when I was like 12.
✓ I mastered perfect pitch when I was about 12.
The phrase 'Perfect Picture' is incorrect; it should be 'perfect pitch'. Also, 'like 12' is informal; 'about 12' is more appropriate.
× I said a name from to Completely Mastery for like 6 months or maybe 3/4 of a year.
✓ I studied a course called Complete Mastery for about 6 months or maybe three-quarters of a year.
The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect prepositions and phrases. 'Said a name from to Completely Mastery' is incorrect. It should be rephrased to clarify the meaning.
× Not necessarily I think my future works deals with something like teaching or anything in the real field of education, but for perfect pitch can help me in music, which in turn helps me with my relationship.
✓ Not necessarily. I think my future work deals with something like teaching or anything in the real field of education, but perfect pitch can help me in music, which in turn helps me with my relationships.
'Works' should be singular 'work' when referring to future job. Also, 'for perfect pitch can help me' is incorrect; 'perfect pitch can help me' is correct. 'My relationship' should be plural 'my relationships' to be natural.
× My dad doesn't know to play some guitar but he doesn't know any music theory.
✓ My dad doesn't know how to play the guitar, and he doesn't know any music theory.
'Doesn't know to play some guitar' is incorrect. The correct form is 'doesn't know how to play the guitar'. Also, 'some guitar' is incorrect; 'the guitar' is appropriate.
× MI perfect pictures.
✓ My perfect pitch.
'MI perfect pictures' is a typo and incorrect. It should be 'My perfect pitch'.
× Also really rare it occurs even in musicians.
✓ It is also really rare; it occurs even in musicians.
The sentence structure is incorrect and missing the verb 'is'. Also, 'rare' should be preceded by 'really' and the sentence reordered for clarity.
× Only about one in a 10 thousands case I think.
✓ Only about one in 10,000 cases, I think.
'10 thousands case' is incorrect plural form. The correct phrase is 'one in 10,000 cases'.