Computers— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và tính tự nhiên: dùng mạo từ và chia động từ đúng (a computer, I use it), tránh câu lủng củng và thông tin thừa. Mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng một hoặc hai cụm chi tiết cụ thể (thời gian, mục đích) với liên từ phù hợp (for example, because). Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

Ejemplo: I mainly use a computer for studying. For example, I attend online IELTS classes every evening at 8:00 PM and complete assignments on it. I also use it to research materials and submit school deadlines online.

Sugerencia: Cần cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và dùng thì quá khứ chính xác; tránh từ ngữ nói lặp và từ không chính xác (like, touch). Nên mở bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về kỷ niệm hoặc cảm xúc, dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để kết nối ý.

Ejemplo: I first used a computer when I was about four years old. I remember touching the keyboard and pressing random keys because I did not know how it worked, and that moment was very memorable.

Sugerencia: Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng từ đúng (computers have, help me, tasks). Trình bày rõ ý chính trong câu đầu rồi giải thích bằng 1–2 ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ: viết báo cáo, học trực tuyến) với liên từ như "because" hoặc "for example". Tránh câu dài, không hoàn chỉnh.

Ejemplo: My life would be much harder without a computer because I rely on it to write reports and attend online classes. For example, using a phone is inconvenient for lengthy assignments and video lessons.

Sugerencia: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng cần chỉnh ngữ pháp nhỏ và dùng từ chính xác (in a noisy environment, near roadworks). Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ như "for example" đã tốt; chỉ cần sửa lỗi động từ số ít/ật và danh từ số ít/ nhiều.

Ejemplo: I find it difficult to use a computer in a noisy environment because I get easily distracted. For example, when I'm in a busy café or near roadworks, the background noise makes it hard to concentrate on typing or following a video.

× I use a computer for variety of tasks, especially for studying.

✓ I use a computer for a variety of tasks, especially for studying.

You omitted the article 'a' before 'variety'. In English, 'a variety of' is the correct fixed expression meaning 'many kinds of'. Suggestion: always use 'a variety of' when indicating multiple kinds or tasks.

× I usually have online courses at 8:00 PM every day for studying IELTS and I always use it for doing.

✓ I usually have online courses at 8:00 PM every day to study for the IELTS and I always use it for that.

The phrase 'for studying IELTS' is awkward; use 'to study for the IELTS'. 'use it for doing' is incomplete—replace with 'use it for that' or specify the activity. Suggestion: use 'to study for' for purposes and avoid dangling gerunds without object.

× My deadlines come from schools.

✓ My deadlines come from school.

'Schools' plural is odd here; 'come from school' or 'from my school' is more natural. Also 'come from' is acceptable but 'are set by my school' is clearer. Suggestion: say 'My deadlines are set by my school' for clarity.

× The first time I used the computer was I was in like 4 years old if my memory serves me right.

✓ The first time I used a computer was when I was about four years old, if my memory serves me right.

Incorrect structure: 'was I was' is redundant and 'in 4 years old' is wrong. Use 'when I was about four years old'. Suggestion: use 'when' + age and 'about' for approximation.

× So I touch it and I don't know how to use this properly but I try to like pressing the buttons just randomly and that's just like a really memorable.

✓ So I touched it and I didn't know how to use it properly, but I tried pressing the buttons randomly, and it was very memorable.

Mixing past and present tenses: the action happened in the past, so use past tense verbs 'touched', 'didn't know', 'tried', 'was'. 'this' should be 'it'. 'pressing the buttons just randomly' -> 'pressed the buttons randomly'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent for past events.

× I think it would be a lot harder since the computer have a big screen and also have me to complete difficult taxes that require a computer like writing reports and also acting online classes since the phones is really small and.

✓ I think it would be a lot harder since computers have big screens and help me complete difficult tasks that require a computer, like writing reports and attending online classes, because phones are really small.

Several errors: subject-verb agreement 'computer have' -> 'computers have' or 'a computer has'; 'have me to complete' is incorrect — use 'help me complete'; 'taxes' should be 'tasks'; 'acting online classes' -> 'attending online classes'; 'phones is' -> 'phones are'. Suggestion: fix agreement, choose correct nouns ('tasks'), and use 'attend' for classes.

× I find it difficult to use the computer a noisy environment because I get easily distracted and my concentration suffers.

✓ I find it difficult to use a computer in a noisy environment because I get easily distracted and my concentration suffers.

Missing preposition 'in' before 'a noisy environment' and article before 'computer'. Also word order wrong: 'use the computer a noisy environment' should be 'use a computer in a noisy environment'. Suggestion: insert 'in' and use 'a computer' for general statement.

× For example, when I'm in busy cafe or near rug works, the background noise make it hard to focus on typing or following a video.

✓ For example, when I'm in a busy cafe or near road works, the background noise makes it hard to focus on typing or following a video.

Missing article 'a' before 'busy cafe'. 'rug works' is incorrect — likely 'road works' or 'construction'. Subject-verb agreement: 'noise make' -> 'noise makes'. Suggestion: use 'a busy cafe' and correct noun 'road works' and ensure singular verb for 'noise'.