Holidays— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise, correct grammar mistakes and organise details logically. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details (people you travelled with and the places you visited). Use linking words (for example, “first,” “then,” “also”) and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: I went to Thailand last week for a friend’s bachelor party. I travelled with some university friends, and we visited Chiang Rai in the north, spent a couple of days in Bangkok, and relaxed in Phuket in the south. The trip was fantastic because we enjoyed local food and beach activities.

Sugerencia: Avoid repetition and fix small grammatical errors. Give one clear reason and a supporting example. Use linking words like “because” and “for example” to make your answer coherent.

Ejemplo: Yes, I do. As a doctor working in a hospital, my job is very stressful, so holidays help me relax and recharge. For example, on my last holiday I explored new cultures which also gave me fresh perspectives and energy.

Sugerencia: Correct factual and vocabulary errors, avoid hesitations, and give specific details about how you celebrate. Use clear linking phrases and one or two precise examples instead of vague or incorrect words.

Ejemplo: My favourite public holiday is Diwali, the festival of lights in India that celebrates Lord Ram’s victory over Ravana. We celebrate by lighting oil lamps and decorating the house, sharing sweets with family, and enjoying fireworks (although I prefer just the lights rather than loud firecrackers).

Sugerencia: Finish your sentence and avoid leaving ideas incomplete. Provide one or two concrete activities you do when you return home and use linking words to connect ideas.

Ejemplo: On public holidays I usually travel back to my hometown of Nagpur from Delhi to visit my family. If I can’t go home, I usually spend the day relaxing, catching up with friends, or visiting nearby relatives.

Sugerencia: Reduce hesitations (“uh”), be more concise and group similar activities. Start with a topic sentence and add two specific examples of what you enjoy doing at home.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy spending the day at home, but not when I have to do chores. I like watching movies, writing, and listening to music — sometimes I even dance around my room while wearing headphones.

Sugerencia: Fix pronunciation or word errors and organise the answer with a clear conditional structure. Use linking words like “however” or “but” to contrast preferences and give a short reason for each.

Ejemplo: It depends: when I’m exhausted I prefer a leisurely holiday to rest, but during festivals—especially Indian ones—I like busy holidays because I enjoy meeting people, taking part in activities, and trying lots of food.

Sugerencia: Avoid filler words and correct small grammar mistakes. State your general preference briefly and support it with a specific example from your recent trip using linking words like “for example” or “for instance.”

Ejemplo: It depends on the situation. For example, my recent trip to Thailand was exciting — we went snorkeling (which was a spontaneous activity) and met university friends in Bangkok, so we did many adventurous things.

× For my last holiday I went to Thailand and it was extremely recent trip.

✓ For my last holiday I went to Thailand and it was a very recent trip.

The phrase 'extremely recent trip' is awkward; 'a' is required before 'very recent trip' because 'trip' is a countable noun. Use 'very' instead of 'extremely' with 'recent' for natural collocation.

× I went with my friends or from university and it was one of my friends bachelor party.

✓ I went with my friends from university and it was one of my friends' bachelor parties.

'Or' is incorrect here; 'from' should directly modify 'friends' so use 'friends from university'. Possessive for 'friends' requires an apostrophe: 'friends' bachelor party' -> 'friends' bachelor party(s)'. Also 'one of my friends' bachelor parties' or 'one of my friend's bachelor parties' depending; plural 'bachelor parties' sounds natural.

× We went to in Thailand.

✓ We went to Thailand.

Extra preposition 'in' is unnecessary when using 'went to'. Remove 'in' to form correct verb + preposition phrase 'went to Thailand'.

× We went to Chihangra, the northern part of Thailand.

✓ We went to Chiang Rai, in the northern part of Thailand.

Use 'in the northern part of Thailand' to indicate location. Also corrected place name to 'Chiang Rai' (likely intended). 'The northern part' requires 'the' before the region and 'in' to show location.

× ...and it was amazing experience it was.

✓ ...and it was an amazing experience.

Redundant clause 'it was' at end should be removed and 'an' is needed before 'amazing experience' because 'experience' is a singular countable noun.

× I like holidays because I work at the hospital as a doctor and it and it is a job that becomes quite stressful.

✓ I like holidays because I work at a hospital as a doctor and it is a job that can become quite stressful.

Duplicate 'and it' should be removed. Use 'a hospital' not 'the hospital' unless specific. 'Can become' better conveys that the job sometimes becomes stressful.

× I love holidays because it gives me a way to connect my with myself time to connect with myself and it also offers a unique experience depending on the country that I'm visiting.

✓ I love holidays because they give me time to connect with myself and also offer unique experiences depending on the country I visit.

Pronoun agreement: 'holidays' is plural so use 'they give'. Remove redundant words and awkward order 'connect my with myself'. Use 'experiences' plural or 'a unique experience' and simplify 'that I'm visiting' to 'I visit'.

× My favorite public holiday is Diwali, which is a festival of flights celebrated in India.

✓ My favorite public holiday is Diwali, which is a festival of lights celebrated in India.

Typo 'flights' should be 'lights'. Correct word choice is needed for meaning.

× It is celebrated for, uh, the Lord Ram's victory over Ravana's.

✓ It is celebrated for Lord Rama's victory over Ravana.

Avoid unnecessary commas and possessive after Ravana is incorrect; 'Ravana's' should be 'Ravana'. Use correct name 'Lord Rama'.

× And we celebrate by lightning, hundreds of the years and firecrackers.

✓ And we celebrate with lights, lanterns and firecrackers.

'Lightning' is incorrect; use 'lights' or 'lighting' and 'hundreds of the years' is nonsensical. Use 'lanterns' or 'hundreds of lamps' if intended.

× I do not like Friar crackers as much, but I love the lights and the US.

✓ I do not like firecrackers as much, but I love the lights and the atmosphere.

'Friar crackers' is a misspelling of 'firecrackers'. 'The US' makes no sense in context; likely meant 'the use' or 'the atmosphere' — 'the atmosphere' fits Diwali context.

× On public holidays, I try to go back home because I work in a separate city.

✓ On public holidays, I try to go back home because I work in a different city.

'Separate city' is awkward; 'different city' or 'another city' is more natural. Tense is fine.

× So I try to travel back to my home if I get holidays.

✓ So I try to travel back home if I get time off.

'Get holidays' is unnatural in English; use 'get time off' or 'have holidays'. Also 'travel back home' is more natural than 'travel back to my home'.

× I love spending my day at home, but uh, I do not love spending my day at home while doing chores.

✓ I love spending the day at home, but I do not enjoy spending it doing chores.

Avoid repetition 'spending my day at home' twice. Use 'the day' and pronoun 'it' to refer back. 'Enjoy' is more natural than 'love' with negative.

× I love uh, to watch movies by myself, to write, to put on my headphones and listen to music while I dance alone in my room.

✓ I love watching movies by myself, writing, putting on my headphones and listening to music while I dance alone in my room.

After 'love' both infinitive and gerund are possible, but parallel structure is required. Use gerunds for all items to maintain parallelism.

× Boot I'm in the mood of spending a leisurely holiday when I'm overworked, but when it comes to public holidays or festivals, Indian festivals especially, I would rather have a busy holiday and do a lot of activities, meet a lot of people, eat a lot of food than just spend simple time at home.

✓ But I'm in the mood for spending a leisurely holiday when I'm overworked, but for public festivals, especially Indian festivals, I prefer a busy holiday: doing many activities, meeting many people and eating a lot of food rather than simply spending time at home.

Typo 'Boot' -> 'But'. Use 'in the mood for' not 'of'. Improve parallelism and simplify 'do a lot of activities' to 'doing many activities'. Use 'rather than simply spending time at home' for clarity.

× The most recent holiday that I went on was to Thailand and it was an exciting holiday because we ended up doing a lot of activities.

✓ The most recent holiday I went on was to Thailand, and it was exciting because we ended up doing a lot of activities.

Remove redundant 'holiday' after 'exciting' and tighten sentence. Tense is fine.

× We, uh, did snorkeling, which was never on the plan.

✓ We went snorkeling, which was never part of the plan.

'Did snorkeling' is awkward; 'went snorkeling' or 'snorkeled' is natural. 'On the plan' should be 'part of the plan'.

× They were a part of the plan and we met my, uh, friends from university in Bangkok as well.

✓ It wasn't part of the plan and we met my friends from university in Bangkok as well.

'They were a part of the plan' is inconsistent with previous sentence stating it was never planned; use 'It wasn't part of the plan'. Remove unnecessary commas. Pronoun agreement: 'it' refers to snorkeling.