Holidays— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds, and add one specific supporting detail (why Hokkaido was chosen or a memorable activity). Use linking words to connect sentences.

Ejemplo: I went to Hokkaido, Japan with a friend in early March (from March 1 to March 5). We chose Hokkaido because we wanted to see the famous snowy landscapes, and we spent a day skiing and another exploring the snow festival, which was unforgettable.

Sugerencia: Remove hesitations and correct small word errors. Give a clearer topic sentence and one or two specific examples of what you do on holidays. Use linking words like 'for example' correctly.

Ejemplo: Yes, I enjoy holidays because they let me escape my daily routine and recharge. For example, I often go to the countryside to relax, take long walks, and enjoy quiet time so I can return to work feeling refreshed.

Sugerencia: Be more confident and precise. Remove fillers and give one specific tradition or memory to make the answer more vivid. Use linking words like 'also' or 'for instance'.

Ejemplo: My favorite public holiday is Christmas because my whole family gets together. For instance, we always have a big dinner called Noche Buena, exchange gifts, and sing carols late into the evening.

Sugerencia: Organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence and two specific activities. Avoid filler sounds and finish your sentences. Use linking words such as 'also' and 'sometimes'.

Ejemplo: On holidays I usually go home and spend time with family. I chat with my mother, and sometimes I go out with my nephew to shop or visit the park.

Sugerencia: Be concise and correct grammar. Replace awkward phrases like 'discouraged to go out' with 'discouraged from going out'. Give one specific indoor activity to make your answer concrete.

Ejemplo: Yes, I prefer staying at home when the weather is humid because it feels more comfortable indoors. For example, I usually read a book or watch movies and relax in the cool air-conditioning.

Sugerencia: Complete sentences and correct tense. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason or example. Use linking words like 'because' followed by a full clause.

Ejemplo: I prefer a leisurely holiday because I want to enjoy the scenery and relax. For example, I like taking slow walks, visiting quiet viewpoints, and spending time at cafés.

Sugerencia: Avoid sentence fragments and tense errors. State the preference in a full sentence, then give a clear reason with specific supporting details. Link ideas with 'because' or 'so'.

Ejemplo: I prefer a peaceful holiday because I need time to relax after working hard. For example, I enjoy staying at a quiet guesthouse, sleeping well, and taking slow walks to recover my energy.

× Think it's uh, early March from March 1 to March 5.

✓ I think it was early March, from March 1 to March 5.

The student is referring to a past holiday, so present tense 'Think' is inappropriate. Use past tense 'I think it was' or simply 'It was' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: use past tense when describing past events.

× So we went there to see the snow because.

✓ So we went there to see the snow.

The sentence ends with 'because' but no clause follows, creating an incomplete sentence. Remove 'because' or add a clause explaining the reason. Suggestion: complete the reason (e.g., 'because we like winter scenery') or omit 'because'.

× I like holidays because they make MMM.

✓ I like holidays because they help me relax.

'They make MMM' is nonstandard filler and leaves the idea incomplete. Replace filler with a clear clause showing the effect of holidays. Suggestion: state a clear result such as 'help me relax' or 'help me unwind'.

× They help me escape from my daily routine and then wine for example.

✓ They help me escape from my daily routine; for example, I go wine tasting.

The original mixes ideas and misuses 'then' and 'wine' without proper structure. Clarify the meaning: if the student meant 'wine tasting' or 'dining and wine', provide a clear example and use proper connectors. Suggestion: use 'for example' and a grammatically complete clause.

× My favorite public holiday is Christmas because it's when my family gets together.

✓ My favorite public holiday is Christmas because it is when my family gets together.

Contraction 'it's' is acceptable in speech but for clarity in correction keep full form 'it is'. No major grammar error; this is a stylistic suggestion. Suggestion: use full forms in formal answers.

× We usually have this big umm dinner or like no chi Buena and we exchange gifts.

✓ We usually have a big dinner called Noche Buena, and we exchange gifts.

The original contains fillers 'umm' and 'like' and miswrites 'Noche Buena'. Also 'this big' is spoken filler; correct to 'a big dinner called Noche Buena'. Suggestion: remove fillers and use correct term 'Noche Buena'.

× MMM during holidays when I go home for holiday I just chit chat with my mother or I go outside with my nephew and buy something that.

✓ During holidays, when I go home I just chat with my mother or go out with my nephew and buy things.

Sentence contains fillers 'MMM', repetition 'for holiday', awkward phrasing 'chit chat' and an incomplete ending 'buy something that'. Correct word order, remove fillers, use plural 'things' for general purchase. Suggestion: streamline sentence: 'During holidays when I go home, I chat with my mother or go out with my nephew and buy things.'

× Yes I do because I am discouraged to go out with this kind of weather.

✓ Yes, I do because I am discouraged from going out in this kind of weather.

Use of 'discouraged to go out' is incorrect collocation; the correct pattern is 'discouraged from doing something'. Also use 'in this kind of weather' rather than 'with'. Suggestion: use 'discouraged from + -ing'.

× It's very humid so I stay at home because it's much cooler and I and just relax and be comfortable.

✓ It's very humid, so I stay at home because it is much cooler and I can just relax and be comfortable.

Original repeats 'and' incorrectly ('and I and just') and has tense/could modal issue. Add 'can' to express ability to relax, remove duplicate 'and'. Suggestion: avoid repeating conjunctions and include modal 'can' for ability.

× I prefer a leisurely holiday because. I wanted to enjoy sceneries and just relax.

✓ I prefer a leisurely holiday because I want to enjoy the scenery and just relax.

The student mixes present preference 'prefer' with past 'wanted'. Use present 'want' to match 'prefer'. Also 'sceneries' is incorrect; use 'scenery' as an uncountable noun. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct noun form.

× I prefer a peaceful holiday because I needed.

✓ I prefer a peaceful holiday because I need time for relaxation.

'Needed' is past tense but the context is a general preference, so present tense 'need' is required. Also the clause was incomplete; add 'time for relaxation' to finish the thought. Suggestion: use present tense for general preferences and complete the object of 'need'.

× I've been working so hard and I am tired every day so.

✓ I've been working so hard that I am tired every day.

Original ends with 'so' leaving sentence incomplete. Combine the clauses properly using 'that' to show result: 'working so hard that I am tired every day.' Suggestion: avoid leaving sentences unfinished; connect cause and effect clearly.