Plants— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g. "big back" -> "back", "plums" -> "plants"). Use linking words like "but" or "however" correctly.

Ejemplo: I don't keep any plants at the moment because I live away at university. However, my family grows several plants at home—my mother tends roses and some vegetables in our garden.

Sugerencia: Organize into 2–3 concise sentences, correct grammar and vocabulary ("gel", "aloe vera", "leaf"), and use linking words (e.g. "also"). Be specific about uses and avoid repetition.

Ejemplo: When I was young we grew aloe vera in our garden. I liked it because its thick leaves contain a clear gel that I would apply to small cuts and skin irritations. My mother also used mature aloe to make a sweet soup dessert.

Sugerencia: Provide a clear topic sentence then 2–3 specific tips with correct terms ("prune", "weeds", "nutrients"). Use linking words like "for example" or "also" for coherence. Avoid contradictions ("water every day but not too much")—be precise.

Ejemplo: Yes. I learned basic care from my mother: for roses, water regularly but avoid waterlogging, remove weeds and prune excess branches so nutrients go to healthy growth, and ensure plenty of sunlight. For cacti, water sparingly (about once a week) because they store water in their stems.

Sugerencia: Give a direct answer then a brief specific example. Fix grammar and vocabulary ("plants", "loves", "unique shape", "plain"->"pink"). Use linking words such as "for example" and avoid filler words.

Ejemplo: Yes, people in China sometimes give plants as gifts. For example, I once bought a small cactus for a friend who loves unique-shaped cacti; it even had a small pink flower and she was very happy.

× Right now I don't keep any plants at home because I'm currently living outside as a student.

✓ Right now I don't keep any plants at home because I'm currently living away from home as a student.

The phrase 'living outside as a student' is unnatural; use 'living away from home' to indicate being away from one's hometown while keeping present continuous tense 'I'm currently living' which is correct.

× I'm living far away from home but big back in my hometown where I live.

✓ I'm living far away from home, but my family still lives back in my hometown where I used to live.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear ('big back' incorrect). Restructure to clarify contrast: 'I'm living far away from home, but my family still lives back in my hometown' and use past 'used to live' or present depending on meaning.

× My mom, my mother used to plums a a few plants outside in the garden.

✓ My mom used to plant a few plants outside in the garden.

Pronoun repetition 'My mom, my mother' is redundant. 'Plums' is incorrect verb; correct verb is 'plant'. Remove extra 'a'. Keep past tense 'used to' for habitual past actions.

× So like the Rose and some vegetable.

✓ She planted roses and some vegetables.

'So like' is colloquial and ungrammatical here. Capitalization 'Rose' incorrect. Use plural 'roses' and 'vegetables' to match plural items and past 'planted' to match 'used to'.

× When I was young I had my mom grow aloe Vera in our garden.

✓ When I was young my mom grew aloe vera in our garden.

Use past simple 'grew' for an action that happened in the past. 'Had my mom grow' suggests causative and is awkward here. Also 'aloe vera' is not capitalized in the middle of the sentence.

× I love it because it have a thick triangular leaf filled with a clear jaw.

✓ I loved it because it has thick triangular leaves filled with a clear gel.

Subject 'it' referring to aloe vera requires singular verb 'has' (present) or past 'had'/'loved' depending on narrative; use 'has' if describing the plant generally. 'Leaf' should be plural 'leaves'. 'Jaw' is wrong word; correct is 'gel'.

× And I when I whenever I got a small injury I would cut a piece and apply the gel directly to the skin so it can help me to treat the skin irritation.

✓ Whenever I got a small injury, I would cut a piece and apply the gel directly to the skin so it would help treat the irritation.

Remove redundant words 'I when I whenever'. Use past habit 'would'. 'Can help me to treat' is incorrect; use 'would help treat' or 'would help me treat'.

× And beside this my mother love cooking aloe Vera soup so like a dessert dessert so they will cut when it's mature.

✓ Besides this, my mother liked cooking aloe vera soup as a dessert, so she would harvest it when it was mature.

Use 'Besides' not 'And beside this'. Subject-verb agreement: 'my mother liked' (past). 'Aloe vera' lowercase. Rephrase 'so like a dessert dessert' to 'as a dessert'. Use 'harvest' or 'cut' and past 'was mature'.

× Yes, I know a little about growing a plant because my mother taught me how to care for a roses.

✓ Yes, I know a little about growing plants because my mother taught me how to care for roses.

Use plural 'plants' and 'roses' without the article 'a' before plural noun. 'a roses' is ungrammatical.

× So I will water them every day but not too much and remove the weight so that they don't compete for nutrient and then remove the excess leaf and branch to keep the plant healthy and also make sure they get enough sunlight.

✓ I water them every day but not too much, remove weeds so they don't compete for nutrients, and remove excess leaves and branches to keep the plants healthy and make sure they get enough sunlight.

Shift to habitual present 'I water' rather than 'I will water' when describing general care. 'Remove the weight' should be 'remove weeds'. Use plural nouns 'nutrients', 'leaves', 'branches', 'plants'. Improve parallel structure and commas.

× And whereas for the growing of the cactus you need to only water just a little bit maybe once a week because if it's too much.

✓ For growing cacti, you only need to water a little, maybe once a week, because too much water is harmful.

Avoid awkward 'whereas' and 'need to only water just' — use 'you only need to water a little'. Use plural 'cacti' or 'cactus'. Clarify reason: 'too much water is harmful.'

× Yes, sometimes we send plan at gifts.

✓ Yes, sometimes we send plants as gifts.

Typo 'plan at' should be 'plants', and 'as gifts' is correct prepositional phrase. Use plural 'plants' for general statement.

× So I remember one time I sent a cactus to my friend as a gift because she is, she love cactus very much and she have a different this, uh, shape of the cactus.

✓ I remember one time I sent a cactus to my friend because she loves cacti very much and she likes different shapes of cactus.

Subject-verb agreement: 'she loves' and 'she has' or 'she likes'. Use plural 'cacti' for general preference. Remove disfluent filler 'is, she'. Rephrase 'have a different this shape' to 'likes different shapes'.

× So I saw a very small cactus. So I'm immediately think of her and the cactus have a small plain pink flower that she love it very much.

✓ I saw a very small cactus and immediately thought of her; the cactus had a small plain pink flower that she loved very much.

Sequence of tenses: use past 'thought' to match 'saw' and 'had'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the cactus had'. Remove redundant 'it' after 'loved'. Use past 'loved' for consistency.