Gifts— Part 1 Informe

Sugerencia: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Ejemplo: I’m not very skilled at choosing perfect gifts, but I enjoy preparing them because they show my affection. For example, I like to wrap presents carefully and include a handwritten note, which makes the recipient feel appreciated.

Sugerencia: Good focus and relevant example. Improve by tightening language and adding a linking phrase to explain why hobby-related gifts work. Avoid redundancy like 'satisfied and pleasant'.

Ejemplo: I usually give gifts on birthdays, and I try to choose items related to the person’s hobbies. For instance, I once bought a sketchbook for a friend who loves drawing because it supported her interest and showed I pay attention to her passions.

Sugerencia: Improve coherence and correctness. Use a clear topic sentence, then link points with words like 'also' or 'in addition'. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I like to give something symbolic' and clarify the example).

Ejemplo: I consider my friend’s hobbies first so the gift matches their tastes. In addition, I like to choose something symbolic—for example, I once gave a small pair of matching keychains to a close couple to symbolize their relationship.

Sugerencia: Avoid fillers and grammar errors (use 'make' or 'made' correctly). Keep it concise: topic sentence + one specific example of a handmade gift and its effect. Use linking words like 'because' and 'as a result'.

Ejemplo: Yes. When someone is very important to me, I prefer to make a handmade gift because it shows personal effort and care. For example, I once knitted a scarf for my sister, and she was touched because it was warm and made especially for her.

Sugerencia: Good opinion and supporting point. Remove fillers and improve fluency by giving one concrete example and linking words like 'therefore' or 'for example'.

Ejemplo: I don’t think expensive gifts express feelings better because meaning matters more than price. For example, a simple handmade card from a close friend meant more to me than an expensive item because it showed thought and time.

× Not really, but I really enjoy the process of preparing gifts for my friends or family members since uh gifts can represent my love to them and uh, I can imagine their uh feelings and uh expressions while.

✓ Not really, but I really enjoy the process of preparing gifts for my friends or family members since gifts can represent my love for them and I can imagine their feelings and expressions while doing so.

Error: missing present participle phrase completion and incorrect preposition. 'while' at the end requires a verb in the -ing form to complete the clause (present participle) — e.g., 'while doing so'. Also use 'love for them' rather than 'love to them'. Suggestion: complete the 'while' clause with an -ing verb and replace 'love to' with 'love for'.

× I usually give gifts to my friends or family members as their birthday presents.

✓ I usually give gifts to my friends or family members as birthday presents.

Error: redundant possessive pronoun 'their' is unnecessary when 'friends or family members' already shows possession; 'as birthday presents' is more natural. Suggestion: remove 'their' to make the sentence concise and natural.

× For example, I like to pick something that's related to their hobbies so that they would feel satisfied and pleasant about that.

✓ For example, I like to pick something that's related to their hobbies so that they will feel satisfied and pleased.

Error: modal and adjective choice. 'Would' is not needed in a general present-fact statement; use 'will' or simple present. 'Pleasant about that' is unidiomatic — use the adjective 'pleased'. Suggestion: use 'will' or simple present and the adjective 'pleased'.

× For example, I was giving a couple to a friend.

✓ For example, I gave a couple to a friend.

Error: incorrect past continuous tense 'was giving' implies an ongoing action; simple past 'gave' is appropriate for a completed action. Suggestion: use simple past to report a past single event.

× Yes, of course, when the person is very important to me, I prefer to uh, made a handmade gift to him or her because it can represent my, uh, deep love to them.

✓ Yes, of course. When the person is very important to me, I prefer to make a handmade gift for him or her because it can represent my deep love for them.

Errors: incorrect verb form after 'prefer' (use base form 'make', not past 'made'); incorrect preposition 'to him or her' should be 'for him or her'; 'love to them' should be 'love for them'. Suggestion: after 'prefer' use the base verb; use 'for' to indicate recipient; use 'love for'.

× Also, uh, if they receive such kind of gift, they will feel very happy.

✓ Also, if they receive such a gift, they will feel very happy.

Error: unidiomatic quantifier 'such kind of gift' — correct form is 'such a gift' or 'that kind of gift'. Suggestion: use 'such a gift' or 'that kind of gift' for natural expression.

× Uh, I don't think so.

✓ I don't think so.

Issue: filler 'Uh' is a spoken hesitation marker and not a grammatical error, but remove for written clarity. Suggestion: omit filler words in written responses.

× The symbolic meaning of a gift cannot be judged by its prices.

✓ The symbolic meaning of a gift cannot be judged by its price.

Error: 'prices' (plural) is incorrect here; refer to the price of the gift—singular 'price'. Also 'judged by its price' is idiomatic. Suggestion: use singular 'price' or 'cost'.

× Uh, for example, maybe a handmade gift is very cheap, but it can, uh, truly represent our love to our friends.

✓ For example, a handmade gift may be very cheap, but it can truly represent our love for our friends.

Errors: conversational 'uh' removed; 'maybe' replaced with modal 'may' for formality; 'love to our friends' should be 'love for our friends'. Suggestion: use 'may' for possibility and 'love for' for correct preposition.