Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating your status and reason for your study. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

例: I am currently a student at Bangladesh Home Economics University, majoring in Food and Nutrition. I chose this subject because I am interested in metabolism and how organisms interact within ecosystems.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Make sure to complete your sentences and provide clear information. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy.

例: I work as a teacher at a primary school where I teach English. I am also trying to improve my own English skills. The environment at my workplace is supportive and friendly.

提案: Your answer is generally good but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use linking words properly and correct sentence structures to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: In my opinion, it is a good place to work because the environment is peaceful. The students are very friendly, and my colleagues inspire me to teach effectively.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about why you like your workplace.

例: Yes, I like the place where I work. Recently, we have been spending more time discussing our lectures together, which creates a peaceful and motivating environment. Because of this, everyone is excited to work here.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas clearly with proper sentence structure and avoid repeating the same information. Use linking words to connect your plans logically.

例: Although my major is Food and Nutrition, I want to become a nutritionist in the future. I also plan to study abroad for my postgraduate degree, and I am currently preparing for it.

× Currently I am a student at Bangladesh Home Economics majority in food and nutrition.

✓ Currently, I am a student at Bangladesh Home Economics University, majoring in Food and Nutrition.

The original sentence lacks the correct verb form 'majoring' to indicate the field of study. 'Majority' is incorrect here; the correct term is 'majoring' to express the subject of study. Also, the name of the institution should be complete for clarity.

× I choose this subject because I I am interested in metabolism and organisms and their ecosystem.

✓ I chose this subject because I am interested in metabolism, organisms, and their ecosystems.

The verb tense should be past tense 'chose' to match the context of a decision made in the past. Also, 'ecosystem' should be plural 'ecosystems' to agree with 'organisms'. The sentence also had a repeated 'I' which is corrected.

× In general, I am a teacher I work in a primary school for where I teach students about English and I'm trying to improve my English as well and the environment in my workplace was.

✓ In general, I am a teacher. I work in a primary school where I teach students English. I am also trying to improve my English, and the environment in my workplace is good.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. It also ends abruptly. The verb tense is corrected to present tense 'is' to describe the current environment. The sentence is split for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× In my opinion, yes, it's a good place for work.

✓ In my opinion, yes, it's a good place to work.

The correct preposition after 'a good place' when referring to an activity is 'to', not 'for'. Hence, 'a good place to work' is correct.

× My workplace is very peaceful and the students are very friendly, and the my colleagues are also very inspiring me to teach students perfectly.

✓ My workplace is very peaceful, and the students are very friendly. My colleagues also inspire me to teach students well.

The phrase 'the my colleagues' is incorrect; 'the' should be removed. Also, 'inspiring me' should be changed to 'inspire me' to match the present tense and subject-verb agreement. 'Perfectly' is replaced with 'well' for natural usage.

× Yes, I do like the place where I work. Recently in my workplace we all get together and spend more time about our lectures and the environment was peaceful so everyone excited to job here.

✓ Yes, I do like the place where I work. Recently, at my workplace, we all got together and spent more time discussing our lectures. The environment was peaceful, so everyone was excited to work here.

The sentence had tense inconsistencies and awkward phrasing. 'Get together' and 'spend' are changed to past tense 'got together' and 'spent' to match 'recently'. 'Spend more time about our lectures' is corrected to 'spent more time discussing our lectures'. 'Excited to job here' is corrected to 'excited to work here'.

× Though my major is food and nutrition, I always want to be a nutritionist.

✓ Though my major is Food and Nutrition, I always want to be a nutritionist.

No grammatical error here; capitalization of 'Food and Nutrition' is corrected to reflect proper noun usage.

× I in my future I want to be a nutritionist and I want I always wanted to go abroad for my partner study and I am preparing for it nowadays and I think in my future in my field I will.

✓ In the future, I want to be a nutritionist. I have always wanted to go abroad for my postgraduate studies, and I am preparing for it nowadays. I believe I will succeed in my field.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains tense inconsistencies. 'Partner study' is corrected to 'postgraduate studies'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and proper tense usage.