Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答简洁明了，但可以稍微丰富内容，增加细节，使回答更自然流畅。

例: I am currently working as a finance lecturer at a local university, where I teach undergraduate students and conduct research in financial management.

提案: 回答较长且有语法错误，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I work at a small university in my hometown, a city in the southwest of Zhejiang, which specializes in finance and accounting.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议避免重复，使用更准确的词汇，并且结构更完整。

例: Actually, I don't find it a very comfortable place to work because some staff in the administrative department are often unfriendly to lecturers and professors.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，建议使用正确的连接词，避免口语填充词，使表达更流畅。

例: Despite some issues with people, I like working here because the university is small but well equipped with advanced computers and other technical devices.

提案: 回答不完整且有重复，建议完整表达想法，避免重复和停顿，使回答更连贯。

例: In the near future, I plan to complete my current work at the university and prepare for further education abroad to advance my career.

× I work in a small local university which focused on the finance and accounting and besides it is located in my hometown which is a small city in the southwest of Zhejiang and the South side.

✓ I work at a small local university which focuses on finance and accounting, and it is located in my hometown, a small city in the southwest of Zhejiang on the south side.

介词使用错误。英语中表示工作地点通常用介词“at”而非“in”。此外，句子中“focused”应为现在时“focuses”，因为描述的是现在的情况。地理方位表达应为“on the south side”而非“and the South side”。建议注意介词搭配和时态一致。

× I work in a small local university which focused on the finance and accounting and besides it is located in my hometown which is a small city in the southwest of Zhejiang and the South side.

✓ I work at a small local university which focuses on finance and accounting, and it is located in my hometown, a small city in the southwest of Zhejiang on the south side.

时态错误。描述现在的事实时，动词应使用一般现在时，“focused”应改为“focuses”。建议根据时间状况选择正确时态。

× Actually, I don't think it is a good place to work. I mean, it is not so comfortable for me because those those people in those other miss administrative department all always mean mean to the uh lecturer and the professors.

✓ Actually, I don't think it is a good place to work. I mean, it is not very comfortable for me because the people in the other administrative departments are always mean to the lecturers and professors.

介词和冠词使用错误。应使用“in the other administrative departments”表示在其他行政部门。复数形式“departments”更合适。建议注意介词和冠词的正确使用。

× Actually, I don't think it is a good place to work. I mean, it is not so comfortable for me because those those people in those other miss administrative department all always mean mean to the uh lecturer and the professors.

✓ Actually, I don't think it is a good place to work. I mean, it is not very comfortable for me because the people in the other administrative departments are always mean to the lecturers and professors.

量词使用错误。重复使用“those”且“department”应为复数“departments”，因为指多个部门。建议注意量词和名词的单复数一致。

× Despite of those people, I think it is a good place to work because in this, uh, this university is very small, but it, it is well equipped with those advanced computers and the other, umm, technical devices.

✓ Despite those people, I think it is a good place to work because this university is very small, but it is well equipped with advanced computers and other technical devices.

介词使用错误。短语“despite of”应为“despite”。此外，“those advanced computers”改为“advanced computers”更自然。建议熟悉固定搭配的正确用法。

× Despite of those people, I think it is a good place to work because in this, uh, this university is very small, but it, it is well equipped with those advanced computers and the other, umm, technical devices.

✓ Despite those people, I think it is a good place to work because this university is very small, but it is well equipped with advanced computers and other technical devices.

代词使用错误。重复使用“it, it”显得冗余，应简化为“it is”。建议注意代词的简洁和准确。

× Well, in the nearest future, I mean in, in this year, I, I want to finish my regular work at this university, but I also, I'm also preparing for a further education abroad. So I'm, I think in the.

✓ Well, in the near future, I mean this year, I want to finish my regular work at this university, but I am also preparing for further education abroad.

未来时态和表达错误。“nearest future”应为“near future”。句子末尾不完整，应删去多余部分。建议使用正确的时间表达和完整句子。