Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答内容较丰富，但句子较长且略显复杂，建议简化句子结构，使表达更自然流畅，同时避免重复。

例: I work as a finance lecturer at a local university. I teach undergraduate students and also conduct research on financial risk management and stock repurchases.

提案: 回答中信息较多但表达不够清晰，建议分句表达，避免语法错误，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I work in a small city in my hometown, located in the southwest of Zhejiang province. It is a third-tier city known for its commerce. If you have a chance, you are welcome to visit, and I will treat you as a friend.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，建议注意单复数和词汇准确性，同时表达应更具体和积极。

例: Actually, I don't find it very comfortable to work there because some staff in the university's administrative department are often unfriendly to lecturers and professors.

提案: 表达中有语法错误和口语填充词，建议避免使用口语词汇，改进语法，并使表达更自然和具体。

例: Despite some issues with unfriendly people, I like working here because the university is small but well equipped with advanced computers and technical devices, which makes my work comfortable.

提案: 回答较完整，但存在口语填充词，建议减少使用“well”、“actually”、“umm”等词汇，使表达更简洁自然。

例: In the future, I plan to finish my current work as a finance lecturer. Then, I will pursue further education abroad to advance my career, possibly next year.

× Besides teaching, I also conduct research related to financial risk management and the stock repurchase.

✓ Besides teaching, I also conduct research related to financial risk management and stock repurchases.

stock repurchase 应为复数形式，因为这里指的是股票回购的多种情况或行为，需使用复数形式。

× I work at a small city in my hometown, 1/3 tier city in the southwest of Zhejiang province, which specialize in commerce significantly and if you have any chance, you can come here and I will treat you as a friend.

✓ I work in a small city in my hometown, a 1/3 tier city in the southwest of Zhejiang province, which specializes in commerce significantly, and if you have any chance, you can come here and I will treat you as a friend.

工作地点应使用介词in而非at；small city前应加冠词a；which指代单数city，谓语动词应为specializes；句子较长，适当加逗号分隔。

× which specialize in commerce significantly

✓ which specializes in commerce significantly

which指代单数city，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式specializes。

× some stuff in the administrative department of the university are often unfriendly to lecturers and professors who give give classes to the students.

✓ some staff in the administrative department of the university are often unfriendly to lecturers and professors who give classes to the students.

stuff是物品的意思，表示“员工”应使用staff；重复了give。

× some stuff in the administrative department of the university are often unfriendly to lecturers and professors who give give classes to the students.

✓ some staff in the administrative department of the university is often unfriendly to lecturers and professors who give classes to the students.

staff作为集合名词，通常视为单数，谓语动词用is；且去除重复的give。

× Despite of some issues about those hateful people, I like working here because the university is small but well equipped with advanced computers and technical devices, so I think it is really a comfort to, umm, look.

✓ Despite some issues with those hateful people, I like working here because the university is small but well equipped with advanced computers and technical devices, so I think it is really comfortable to, umm, work.

despite后不加of；issues后用with更合适；comfort应为形容词comfortable；look应为work，符合语境。

× so I think it is really a comfort to, umm, look.

✓ so I think it is really comfortable to, umm, work.

comfort是名词，需用形容词comfortable；look与上下文不符，应为work。