Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и грамматически правильным. Следует избегать повторений и использовать связующие слова для логичности. Также важно уточнить, что именно нравится в выбранной специальности.

例: I am currently a student at Murmansk College of Economy and IT Technology. I chose this college because it offers many activities and collaborates with other institutions. Specifically, I study Economics because I am passionate about understanding how markets work.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие формулировки. Рекомендуется использовать правильные времена и более точные выражения, а также связующие слова для плавности речи.

例: I don't work at the moment because I am a student. However, I plan to work during the summer holidays to earn money for presents for my family and relatives.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит ошибки. Следует четко выразить мнение, использовать подходящие слова и связки, а также объяснить причины своего мнения.

例: I believe working during the summer holidays is a good idea because it allows me to earn money for gifts. Although it can be challenging, it helps me achieve my goals and gain experience.

提案: Ответ содержит много повторов и нечетких выражений. Рекомендуется использовать более точные слова, избегать повторений и структурировать ответ с помощью связующих слов.

例: I enjoy studying at my college because I have many friends and participate in various activities. The professors are excellent and I learn a lot of new information.

提案: Ответ нуждается в улучшении грамматики и ясности. Следует использовать правильные формы глаголов, более точные выражения и связующие слова для логичности.

例: In the future, I plan to work as a manager in a company because I enjoy working in an office environment, collaborating with my team, and contributing ideas to various projects.

× I choose this college because it has a lot of activities and collabing with another college.

✓ I chose this college because it has a lot of activities and collaborates with another college.

The verb 'choose' should be in the past tense 'chose' to match the past action of selecting the college. 'Collabing' is an informal and incorrect form; the correct verb is 'collaborates' in the third person singular form to agree with 'it' (the college).

× I choose Economy Freed because I love.

✓ I chose Economics because I love it.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Economy Freed' seems to be a mishearing or misspelling of 'Economics'. The verb should be in past tense 'chose' to match the action. The sentence needs an object 'it' after 'love' to be complete.

× I'm not work yet because I'm a student and I am going to work in the summer holidays because I need money to some present and some.

✓ I don't work yet because I'm a student, and I am going to work in the summer holidays because I need money for some presents and other things.

The phrase 'I'm not work' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I don't work' for present tense negative. 'Money to some present and some' is unclear; it should be 'money for some presents and other things' to express purpose correctly.

× Gift for my family and relatives.

✓ Gifts for my family and relatives.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a verb. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rephrased as 'I want to buy gifts for my family and relatives.'

× I think work in the summer holidays is a good place and idea because you can have a lot of gifts and a lot of goals you need to swallow and I think it's very difficult and hard to take it.

✓ I think working in the summer holidays is a good idea because you can earn money to buy many gifts and achieve many goals, although I think it is very difficult and hard.

The phrase 'work in the summer holidays' should be 'working' to function as a gerund. 'Good place and idea' is incorrect; 'good idea' is appropriate. 'Goals you need to swallow' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'achieve many goals' is better. The sentence is long and confusing; it needs restructuring for clarity.

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Do you like the place where you study?

The question is about liking the place where the student works, but the student is a student and studies, not works yet. The verb 'would you like' implies future preference, but the student should answer about current feelings, so 'do you like' is more appropriate.

× I like my place when I study because I have a lot of friends, I have a lot of of a lot of activities and the professor in this college so grapes for so awesome and I love them so much.

✓ I like the place where I study because I have a lot of friends, many activities, and the professors in this college are so great and awesome, and I love them very much.

The sentence has repetition ('a lot of of a lot of'), incorrect word 'grapes' instead of 'great', and awkward phrasing. It needs correction for clarity and grammar.

× I have a lot of new information for my.

✓ I have learned a lot of new information for my studies.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. It needs an object after 'my' to complete the thought. Adding 'studies' clarifies the meaning.

× My future work plans is some like manager in some company because I love to work in office and uh, collabing with my teams, doing some ideas for some project and another one.

✓ My future work plans are to be a manager in a company because I love to work in an office, collaborating with my team, and working on projects.

'Plans' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. 'Some like manager' is incorrect; it should be 'to be a manager'. 'Collabing' is informal and incorrect; 'collaborating' is correct. 'Teams' should be singular 'team' to match the context. 'Doing some ideas for some project and another one' is awkward and unclear; rephrased for clarity.