Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为自然且直接，但句子结构稍显重复，且“in Hong Kong in the university”表达不够地道。建议简化表达，避免重复，并使用更自然的短语。

例: I am currently a postgraduate student at a university in Hong Kong, pursuing a master's degree in accountancy.

提案: 回答中信息重复且表达不够清晰，部分句子语法错误，如“charge myself”用词不当。建议直接回答问题，避免重复，并用准确表达描述兴趣。

例: I don't work currently because I am a postgraduate student at the University of Hong Kong. I am passionate about preparing financial statements as part of my studies.

提案: 回答中存在语法和表达错误，如“study Hong Kong”不准确，“great trade”用词不当。建议使用正确表达，直接回答问题，并提供具体理由。

例: Yes, it is a great place to study because the university is well-known in Hong Kong and has a strong accountancy program.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇和语法错误，如“to to”，“anyway and end time”表达不清。建议简洁表达，避免重复，并用连贯句子描述环境和人际关系。

例: Yes, I like it very much. The campus is beautiful with many flowers and trees, and both teachers and students are friendly and helpful.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，如“special accountant”，“foster the CPA test”，“be automated into a foreign country”。建议使用正确词汇，清晰表达未来计划。

例: Since I was young, I have dreamed of becoming a certified public accountant. I plan to pass the CPA exam in mainland China and work abroad in the future.

× I'm pursuing my master degree in the field of accountancy.

✓ I'm pursuing my master's degree in the field of accountancy.

“master degree”应为“master's degree”，因为学位名称中“master's”是所有格形式，表示“硕士的学位”。

× I study in Hong Kong University and I'm trying to pursue my master degree, and I always work hard and charge myself.

✓ I study at the University of Hong Kong and I'm trying to pursue my master's degree, and I always work hard and challenge myself.

“Hong Kong University”应为“The University of Hong Kong”，且“master degree”应为“master's degree”。“charge myself”应为“challenge myself”，意思是“挑战自己”。

× I study in Hong Kong University and I'm trying to pursue my master degree, and I always work hard and charge myself.

✓ I study at the University of Hong Kong and I'm trying to pursue my master's degree, and I always work hard and challenge myself.

表示在某个具体大学学习时，介词应使用“at”而非“in”。

× I always have a passion for doing the financial statement.

✓ I always have a passion for doing financial statements.

“financial statement”应为复数形式“financial statements”，因为通常指多份财务报表。

× Well, I think it is a really wonderful place to study Hong Kong.

✓ Well, I think it is a really wonderful place to study in Hong Kong.

“study”后面表示地点时应加介词“in”。

× The university is one of the most famous universities in Hong Kong, and the field of accountancy is the school's great trade.

✓ The university is one of the most famous universities in Hong Kong, and the field of accountancy is the school's great strength.

“trade”用法不当，应改为“strength”，表示“强项”。

× Yes I do, it is full of flowers and trees and to to the beautiful scenery.

✓ Yes, I do. It is full of flowers and trees and has beautiful scenery.

原句结构混乱，“to to the beautiful scenery”不合语法，应改为“has beautiful scenery”。

× Besides the teachers and the the students are always friendly and they always help me anyway and end time.

✓ Besides, the teachers and the students are always friendly and they always help me anytime and every time.

原句缺少逗号且表达不清，“anyway and end time”应改为“anytime and every time”，表示“随时”。

× Wow, since I was young I dreamed to become a special accountant and now I'm pursuing my master's degree and my future for plan is to foster the CPA test in China mainland and be automated into a foreign country to.

✓ Wow, since I was young I have dreamed of becoming a special accountant and now I'm pursuing my master's degree. My future plan is to pass the CPA test in mainland China and be qualified to work in a foreign country.

“dreamed to become”应为“have dreamed of becoming”，动词搭配错误；“foster the CPA test”应为“pass the CPA test”；“be automated into a foreign country to”表达错误，应为“be qualified to work in a foreign country”。