Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid confusing phrases like 'measuring his accounting' and incomplete sentences. Try to give a direct answer first, then explain your reason with simple, clear sentences. Use linking words like 'because' to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I am a student studying accounting at Dhaka Commerce College. I chose this subject because I want to become a chartered accountant in the future. I found accounting very interesting when I was in school, so I decided to pursue it further.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and a bit confusing. Make sure to answer the question directly and complete your sentences. Use linking words to explain your plans clearly. Avoid repeating information unnecessarily.

例: I don't work currently because I am a student in my 4th year. After graduation, I plan to find a job related to accounting because I want to become an ACA professional.

提案: Your answer has good points but lacks clarity and completeness. Avoid repeating phrases like 'I think so' and finish your sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' to connect ideas. Be specific about what makes the place good.

例: Yes, it is a good place to work because the environment is natural and well developed. The atmosphere is cool, and my colleagues are very friendly. Also, my boss is quite open and supportive.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Avoid using unclear words like '*****' and finish your sentences. Give specific reasons why you like the place. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I like the place where I work, especially my room because it is cool and has yellow lighting. The office has a nice atmosphere with many trees, which makes it a pleasant place to be.

提案: Your answer needs to be more complete and clear. Avoid incomplete sentences and explain your reasons fully. Use linking words like 'because' and 'and' to connect your ideas logically.

例: In the future, I want to be a teacher because I enjoy teaching others in a good environment. Also, in our country, teaching is a very respectable profession.

× I study accounting at Dhaka Commerce College and measuring his accounting.

✓ I study accounting at Dhaka Commerce College and am measuring accounting.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'measuring' without an auxiliary verb. To form the present continuous tense, the verb 'to be' is needed before the '-ing' form. Here, 'am measuring' is correct to indicate an ongoing action.

× I study accounting at Dhaka Commerce College and measuring his accounting.

✓ I study accounting at Dhaka Commerce College and am measuring accounting.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrectly used to refer to accounting, which is a subject, not a person. It should be omitted to maintain clarity and correctness.

× I chose accounting because I want to become a chartered accountant in the future and it's quite really fascinating me when I was in my school and that's why I chose my.

✓ I chose accounting because I want to become a chartered accountant in the future. It fascinated me a lot when I was in school, and that's why I chose it.

The original sentence is run-on and unclear. Breaking it into two sentences improves clarity. Also, 'fascinating me' is incorrect; 'it fascinated me' is the correct past tense form. 'My' at the end is incomplete and should be replaced with 'it' referring to accounting.

× As I mentioned earlier, I am a student and I'm in my 4th year now and after my graduation I will find my dream job.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I am a student and I'm in my 4th year now. After my graduation, I will find my dream job.

The sentence is a run-on. Separating into two sentences improves readability and correctness. Also, a comma after 'graduation' is needed for clarity.

× I want to become ACA that's why I chose accounting related jobs and I think so it would be a.

✓ I want to become an ACA, that's why I chose accounting-related jobs, and I think it would be a good fit.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks proper punctuation. 'ACA' needs an article 'an' before it. 'Accounting related' should be hyphenated as 'accounting-related'. The phrase 'I think so it would be a' is incomplete and needs completion for clarity.

× It's naturally well developed surrounding my office and the atmosphere is quite a cool.

✓ It's naturally well-developed surroundings around my office, and the atmosphere is quite cool.

'Surrounding' should be plural 'surroundings' and 'around' is the correct preposition to indicate location. 'Well developed' should be hyphenated as 'well-developed' when used as an adjective. 'Quite a cool' is incorrect; 'quite cool' is correct.

× My colleagues, they're very friendly. My boss, he's quite open for.

✓ My colleagues are very friendly. My boss is quite open.

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete. Removing unnecessary pronouns and completing the sentence improves clarity. 'Open for' is incomplete; 'open' alone suffices here.

× Well it's a good question. I like my place where I work, especially my ***** and my room which is so cool and there yellow light in my office, the atmosphere, the trees and I'm quite fascinated about my office in.

✓ Well, it's a good question. I like the place where I work, especially my desk and my room, which are so cool. There is yellow light in my office, the atmosphere, the trees, and I'm quite fascinated by my office.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'My *****' is incomplete and replaced with 'my desk' for clarity. 'There yellow light' should be 'There is yellow light'. 'Fascinated about' should be 'fascinated by'. The sentence is restructured for coherence.

× In the future I want to be a teacher because teaching is one of those profession.

✓ In the future, I want to be a teacher because teaching is one of those professions.

'Profession' should be plural 'professions' to match 'one of those'. A comma after 'In the future' improves readability.

× I can easily teach someone in a good way and environment and in our country the teachers are very respectable job and quite.

✓ I can teach someone well in a good environment, and in our country, teaching is a very respectable job.

'In a good way and environment' is awkward; 'teach someone well in a good environment' is better. 'Teachers are very respectable job' is incorrect; 'teaching is a very respectable job' is correct. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.