Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to make your response more concise and natural by directly answering the question first, then briefly explaining your situation. Also, use correct articles and plural forms, for example, 'journalistic skills' instead of 'journalist skill'.

例: I work for a Japanese news agency. Currently, I am studying in the UK to improve my journalistic skills, especially about climate change and environmental issues.

提案: Your answer partially addresses the question but includes unnecessary information about lifestyle differences. Focus on directly answering where you work and briefly mention your study if relevant. Also, avoid pronoun errors like 'our knowledge' instead of 'more knowledge'.

例: I work for a news agency based in Tokyo. At the moment, I am studying in the UK to learn more about climate change and environmental issues.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. For example, say 'a very good place to work' and use 'because' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating 'work' unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I think my company is a very good place to work because it employs many specialists with knowledge in politics, culture, arts, and science. Therefore, I hope to stay with the company for a long time.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences simpler and more coherent. Use correct verb forms and articles, and organise your ideas logically with linking words.

例: Yes, I like my workplace because it employs many specialists from all over the world. Their expertise covers a wide range of fields, including culture, politics, arts, and science.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and somewhat confusing. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid awkward phrases like 'seek for opportunities to enter another company'. Instead, say 'look for opportunities to work at other companies'. Also, finish your sentences fully.

例: In the future, I want to become a more specialised journalist and continue in this profession for as long as possible. However, I am also open to opportunities to work for other companies, especially in developed countries.

× I'm working at the Japanese news agency but my company ordered me to gain more knowledge about the climate change and environmental issues, so I am studying in the UK so that I can improve my journalist skill.

✓ I work at the Japanese news agency but my company ordered me to gain more knowledge about climate change and environmental issues, so I am studying in the UK to improve my journalism skills.

The verb 'work' is used to describe a habitual action or current job, so the simple present tense is appropriate instead of the present continuous 'I'm working'. 'Climate change' is an uncountable noun and does not need 'the'. 'Journalist skill' should be plural and changed to 'journalism skills' to correctly express the ability. Also, 'so that I can improve' can be simplified to 'to improve' for clarity.

× My company is based in Tokyo, but I'm studying in the UK right now because I want to gain our knowledge about the climate change and environmental issues.

✓ My company is based in Tokyo, but I'm studying in the UK right now because I want to gain more knowledge about climate change and environmental issues.

The pronoun 'our' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to their own knowledge, not a shared one. 'More knowledge' is the correct quantifier. Also, 'the climate change' should be 'climate change' without 'the' as it is an uncountable noun.

× I decided to come to the new country and I find the lifestyle between the two cities very different.

✓ I decided to come to a new country, and I find the lifestyles of the two cities very different.

'The new country' is incorrect because the country is not previously specified; 'a new country' is appropriate. 'Lifestyle' should be plural 'lifestyles' when comparing two cities. Also, a comma is needed before 'and' to separate the two independent clauses.

× Yes, I find my company very good place to work for because there are many specialists who have a lot of knowledge from politics, culture, arts and science.

✓ Yes, I find my company a very good place to work because there are many specialists who have a lot of knowledge in politics, culture, arts, and science.

The article 'a' is needed before 'very good place'. The preposition 'for' is unnecessary after 'work'. The phrase 'knowledge from' should be 'knowledge in' to correctly indicate the fields of expertise. Commas are added for clarity in the list.

× So I want to work as long as possible in this company.

✓ So I want to work in this company for as long as possible.

The phrase 'as long as possible' should be preceded by 'for' to indicate duration. The placement of 'in this company' is better before the time expression for natural English word order.

× Yes, I find my workplace impressive because it's employs more or specialists from all over the world and their specialties is a very wide it is from cultural, politics, arts and the science and I want to work.

✓ Yes, I find my workplace impressive because it employs many specialists from all over the world, and their specialties are very wide, ranging from culture, politics, arts, to science, and I want to work there.

'It's employs' is incorrect; it should be 'it employs'. 'More or specialists' is unclear and should be 'many specialists'. 'Their specialties is' should be 'their specialties are' to agree in number. 'A very wide' is incomplete; it should be 'very wide, ranging from...'. 'Cultural' should be 'culture' to match the noun form. 'The science' should be 'science' without 'the'. The sentence is long and needs commas and conjunctions for clarity. 'I want to work' should be 'I want to work there' to complete the thought.

× In the future, I want to become a more specialized journalist, so I plan to continue with my profession as long as possible.

✓ In the future, I want to become a more specialized journalist, so I plan to continue my profession for as long as possible.

The preposition 'with' after 'continue' is unnecessary here. The phrase 'for as long as possible' correctly expresses duration.

× However, I also seek for opportunities to enter another company because there are many choices regarding from developed countries to the.

✓ However, I also seek opportunities to join another company because there are many choices from developed countries onwards.

The verb 'seek' does not require the preposition 'for'. 'Enter another company' is unnatural; 'join another company' is better. The phrase 'regarding from developed countries to the' is incomplete and unclear; it is corrected to 'from developed countries onwards' to indicate a range. The original sentence is incomplete and needs clarification.