Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to be more precise and natural by directly stating your status and relevant details without unnecessary or confusing words. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

例: I am currently a student preparing for my higher studies. I completed the AGC exam in the science stream in 2023.

提案: Your answer is clear but a bit repetitive. You can improve by directly answering the question and adding a brief explanation to make it more natural and effective.

例: I don't work at the moment because I am a full-time student focusing on my studies.

提案: Your answer is somewhat off-topic and repetitive. Try to directly answer the question about the workplace and then add your future plans as supporting details using linking words for coherence.

例: Since I don't currently work, I can't say much about a workplace. However, if I go abroad, I would definitely like to do a part-time job to gain experience.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Improve your vocabulary and sentence structure, and use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural. Also, avoid hypothetical statements without clear context.

例: I would like the place where I work because my colleagues are very friendly and helpful. For example, they always assist me whenever I face any problems at work.

提案: Your answer is understandable but needs better grammar and clearer structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more specific about your plans.

例: I plan to pursue a bachelor's degree in cyber security, so I hope to work in that field in the future. However, if I cannot find a job in cyber security, I would like to become a teacher.

× Presently I'm a student and I'm doing aisles for my higher studies.

✓ Presently I'm a student and I'm preparing for my higher studies.

The phrase 'doing aisles' is incorrect and unclear. The correct verb phrase is 'preparing for' when talking about getting ready for higher studies. This correction fits the present continuous tense used here.

× my colleague are so willinger and friendly

✓ my colleagues are so willing and friendly

The word 'colleague' should be plural 'colleagues' to agree with the plural verb 'are'. Also, 'willinger' is not a correct word; the correct adjective is 'willing'.

× my colleague are so willinger and friendly

✓ my colleagues are so willing and friendly

The incorrect comparative form 'willinger' should be replaced with the correct adjective 'willing'.

× my boss also so friendly

✓ my boss is also so friendly

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' to link the subject 'my boss' and the adjective 'friendly'.

× sometimes they help me a lot to whenever I found any problem in my work

✓ sometimes they help me a lot whenever I find any problem in my work

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary and incorrect here. Also, 'found' should be present tense 'find' to match the present context.

× if I go to abroad I think I will definitely do a part time job

✓ if I go abroad I think I will definitely do a part-time job

The phrase 'go to abroad' is incorrect; 'go abroad' is correct. Also, 'part time' should be hyphenated as 'part-time' when used as an adjective.

× if I do not get any cyber security job I would like to a teacher

✓ if I do not get any cyber security job I would like to be a teacher

The verb 'like' when followed by another verb requires 'to be' before the noun 'teacher'. The preposition 'to' alone is incorrect here.