Work— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by using linking words or punctuation.

例: I am currently a full-time software engineer at Microsoft.

提案: Your answer is informative but could be more coherent by using linking words and more natural phrasing. Also, avoid repeating 'work' too often.

例: I work as a software engineer at Microsoft, a technology company. My job involves implementing features requested by customers or other teams.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs better organization and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Also, correct grammar errors such as 'Family life are' to 'Family benefits are'.

例: Yes, Microsoft is a great place to work because it offers a competitive compensation package. In addition, the company provides strong support for employees, including financial assistance for child care and helpful online portals for additional services.

提案: Your answer is too brief and lacks supporting details. Try to expand your response with reasons or examples to make it more effective and natural.

例: Yes, I like working at Microsoft because it offers great opportunities for professional growth and a supportive work environment.

提案: Your answer contains good ideas but is a bit long and unclear. Break it into two sentences, use linking words, and correct grammar for clarity.

例: In the near future, I plan to complete the new cloud build-out project for my team, hoping to earn a promotion afterward. In the next five years, I aim to change jobs to a company that offers higher compensation.

× Family life are also very impressive.

✓ Family life is also very impressive.

The subject 'Family life' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are' to agree in number.

× I wish I can get a promotion after I complete this impactful project

✓ I wish I could get a promotion after I complete this impactful project

The verb 'wish' is followed by a past modal form to express a desire about the future; 'can' should be changed to 'could' to be grammatically correct.

× in in terms of five year plan, I want to change my job to another company for higher compensations.

✓ in terms of a five-year plan, I want to change my job to another company for higher compensation.

'Five year plan' needs an article 'a' and a hyphen to form the compound adjective 'five-year plan'. Also, 'compensations' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'compensation' is correct.